Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small errors, and provide one or two specific details linked logically. Watch pronunciation errors (e.g. 'talk' likely meant 'walk') and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: No, I don't walk much, but I exercise regularly. For example, every morning I follow a routine: I do a 20-minute training session, then meditate for ten minutes before I get ready for work.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers ('umm', 'like'), and give one specific reason with a short supporting detail. Use linking words to connect cause and effect.

예시: No, I rarely walked outside as a child. Because I grew up in central Bangkok, there were few parks or public green spaces, so we usually stayed indoors or played in small alleys instead.

제안: Give a concise main idea, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and use linking words (for example, moreover) correctly. Provide more specific benefits (physical, mental, social) with brief examples.

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer a calm, natural environment and social opportunities. For example, walking paths let neighbours meet for casual chats, and parks also help reduce stress and encourage light exercise.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, avoid filler words and inappropriate language, and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'forests' not 'foreheads'). Provide one clear reason and a short example of what you would do there.

예시: If I had the chance, I would trek through the rainforests in southern Thailand. I'm passionate about forests and wildlife, so I would enjoy photographing plants and observing birds while exploring new trails.

제안: Answer directly, remove fillers and repetition, and use clear linking words to explain purpose and effect. Be specific about location and feelings with one or two sentences.

예시: Recently I walked along a quiet street near my house. I go there to clear my mind and breathe fresh air; the short walk helps me feel calmer and more focused.

× I don't walk a lot, but I exercise. But I do exercise regularly.

✓ I don't walk a lot, but I do exercise regularly.

Redundant repetition and awkward phrasing: the two sentences repeat the same idea. Combine into one sentence and include 'do' for emphasis: 'I don't walk a lot, but I do exercise regularly.' This keeps present simple tense and avoids repetition.

× For example I have morning routine.

✓ For example, I have a morning routine.

Missing article and punctuation: English requires the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns. Add a comma after 'For example' for clarity. Use present simple to state habitual action.

× I talk in the morning and do it, do training exercises, then meditate and get ready to to start work.

✓ I wake up in the morning and do training exercises, then meditate and get ready to start work.

Wrong verb choice 'talk' likely should be 'wake up'. Also duplicative 'do it' and repeated 'to'. Use base verbs in a sequence for habitual routine: 'wake up', 'do training exercises', 'meditate', 'get ready to start work.' Remove duplicate 'to'.

× When I was a child I rarely walk outside because umm I live in Bangkok and in the parts Bangkok didn't provide enough like green spaces such as park or public spaces for people to to walk or like.

✓ When I was a child I rarely walked outside because I lived in Bangkok and some parts of the city didn't provide enough green spaces such as parks or public spaces for people to walk.

Tense inconsistency and plural/article errors: Use past simple 'walked' and 'lived' to match 'When I was a child'. 'Parts Bangkok' should be 'some parts of the city'. 'Park' should be plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Remove filler words and duplicate 'to'.

× I think green spaces like park offers society commu communication like I mean society conversations.

✓ I think green spaces like parks offer social communication, like conversations among members of the community.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'parks' plural requires 'offer' (not 'offers'). 'Society communication' is unnatural; use 'social communication' or 'conversations among members of the community' for clarity. Also plural 'parks' fits general statement.

× People can get can can get interact and meet each other and moreover they can like meet new friends and exchange experience together.

✓ People can interact and meet each other; moreover, they can meet new friends and exchange experiences together.

Redundant modal and verb repetitions, and uncountable/count errors: Remove repeated 'can' and 'get'. Use 'interact' without 'get'. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' when referring to different experiences. Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× Oh **** if I had a chance I would like to take a long walk trekking in rainforest in the in the South of Thailand because I'm passionate about foreheads and jungle and I want to explore new experiences in in in jungles.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go trekking in a rainforest in the south of Thailand because I'm passionate about forests and jungles and I want to explore new experiences in jungles.

Awkward phrasing and vocabulary errors: Use 'go trekking' instead of 'take a long walk trekking'. Add article 'a' before 'rainforest'. Capitalization of 'south' not required. 'Foreheads' is a mispronunciation of 'forests'. Remove duplicate words and filler repetition. The conditional structure is correct but needs cleaner verbs and articles.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Question in prompt: 'lately' pairs with present perfect in English. Use 'have you gone' to ask about recent past with relevance to now. Past simple 'did you go' is possible but less natural with 'lately'.

× I think it is, uh, around my house like it is a simple walking street and it just, you know, it just want to walk because I just want to clear my negative thoughts and stay at the moment.

✓ I think it's around my house; it's a simple walking street and I walk there to clear negative thoughts and stay in the moment.

Pronoun and verb agreement and awkward repetition: Use contraction 'it's' and consistent subjects. 'It just want to walk' is incorrect; use 'I walk there' because the speaker is the subject. Replace 'stay at the moment' with 'stay in the moment'. Remove filler words and repetition.

× So I take a walk and fret, uh, breathe the fresh air to keep moving on.

✓ So I take a walk and breathe the fresh air to keep going.

Incorrect verb 'fret' is out of place; likely filler. Use 'breathe the fresh air' as the intended action. 'Keep moving on' can be simplified to 'keep going.' Remove filler interjections.