Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repetition. Also correct grammar (use present simple) and accurate quantifiers (walk 5–10 kilometres).

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk five to ten kilometres every day because it helps me lose weight and stay fit. In addition, walking is part of my daily routine, so it’s easy to keep doing it.

제안: Use past tense consistently and reduce repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details (who, what activities, how often).

예시: Yes, I did. I often walked outside with my friends when I was a child. We usually played football or explored the neighbourhood, so we spent hours walking and playing together.

제안: Organize your answer: begin with a general reason, then add specific supporting points using linking words (for example, because, besides). Avoid filler words and incorrect grammar (use singular/plural agreement).

예시: People like walking in parks because parks provide dedicated, safe paths. For example, parks are away from traffic and cars, so it’s easier and more pleasant to walk there. Also, parks often have green spaces and benches for resting.

제안: Begin with a clear conditional sentence and avoid repeating phrases. Give two concise reasons with linking words (because, so) and use varied vocabulary (safe, peaceful, scenic).

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a park. Parks are peaceful and car-free, so they feel safe, and they usually have scenic routes where I could walk comfortably for hours.

제안: Answer directly and add a brief specific detail about time or place. Use past simple and avoid saying ‘same answer’—instead give additional detail to show engagement.

예시: I went to the nearby city park last weekend. I walked along the lake path for about an hour and enjoyed the fresh air and the view.

× I walk to 5 kilometers to 10 kilometers.

✓ I walk 5 to 10 kilometers.

Use the plural 'kilometers' without the preposition 'to' twice and place the range in the normal order. The original repeats 'to' and mixes word order. Suggestion: use 'I walk 5 to 10 kilometers' or 'I walk between 5 and 10 kilometers.'

× And also I, so I can lose some weight.

✓ I also do it to lose some weight.

The original is fragmented and uses redundant fillers ('and also', 'so'). Make a clear purpose clause: 'I also do it to lose some weight.' This corrects sentence flow and clarifies subject-action relation.

× It's and it's like a good thing for you to keep your fitness good.

✓ It's a good way to keep fit.

The original is wordy and uses 'good' twice and incorrect collocation 'keep your fitness good.' Use the idiomatic expression 'keep fit.' Also avoid duplicated 'it's and it's like.'

× When I was a child, I always go a walk with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I always went for a walk with my friends.

The time clause 'When I was a child' requires past tense. 'Go' should be past 'went' and the collocation 'go for a walk' is standard. Use past simple to match the time frame.

× I have a lot of friends when I was I was a child.

✓ I had a lot of friends when I was a child.

Past time 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'had.' Also remove duplicated 'I was.' Ensure subject-verb agreement in past.

× So I go with them outside and we have a walk and we play and sometimes we play football, so we walk a lot.

✓ So I went out with them; we walked and played, and sometimes we played football, so we walked a lot.

Mixing past and present tenses is incorrect. Use past simple throughout to describe childhood activities: 'went, walked, played.' Also use clearer connectors and punctuation.

× Because, uh, it's like, it's, uh, there is a way, a special way for them to walk and it's easier for them because you, some places doesn't have play places to walk because you can't walk everywhere because there is a street, there is a car.

✓ Because parks provide a special place to walk and it's easier there; some places don't have safe places to walk because of streets and cars.

Multiple issues: use 'don't' not 'doesn't' with plural 'places.' 'There is a way' is awkward; use 'parks provide a special place.' Keep subject-verb agreement and use plural where appropriate. Simplify and correct logical flow.

× So it's, if you walk in the park, it's better.

✓ So, if you walk in a park, it's better.

Minor article and style issue: use 'a park' or 'the park' consistently. The original had extra commas and awkward phrasing. Use conditional structure 'if... it's better' clearly.

× There is a special place for The Walking place.

✓ There is a special place for walking.

Incorrect capitalization and redundant phrasing. Use the gerund 'walking' without 'place' repeated. Avoid unnecessary articles and capital letters.

× For me, I would like to take a long walk if I had a chance.

✓ I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance.

Use 'the chance' idiomatically. 'If I had a chance' is understandable but 'the chance' is the common conditional phrase. The conditional modal 'would like' with past 'had' is correct.

× For me, I will choose a park because it's a special place for walking and it's just comfortable place.

✓ I would choose a park because it's a special and comfortable place for walking.

Use 'would' to match hypothetical 'if I had the chance.' Add 'a' before 'comfortable place' and combine adjectives in natural order. 'Will' is less appropriate in a hypothetical response.

× There is no cars, there is nothing dangerous, you can walk safely for a long time.

✓ There are no cars; there is nothing dangerous, so you can walk safely for a long time.

'Cars' is plural and requires 'there are,' not 'there is.' Add a connector 'so' to show consequence and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Where did you go for a walk lately? ... Uh, for me I think it's the park. Also the same answer. As I said before, it's the park here.

✓ Lately, I went to the park. It's the same answer; as I said before, it's the park here.

The question asks about a recent past action ('did you go'). Use past tense 'went.' The original mixes present tense 'it's' with 'lately.' Match tense to question.