Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and small errors (e.g., “walk off”). Use correct prepositions and articles.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot because I’m a student and my campus is within walking distance. For example, I usually walk to school and between classes, so I spend a couple of hours walking every day.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and one brief example. Correct grammatical errors and punctuation, and avoid unnecessary words like “stubborn” unless you explain it. Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I did. I loved being outdoors because exploring made me feel calm and curious, so my parents often took me to parks and trails when I was young.

제안: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and support it with two specific reasons connected by linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and sentence breaks.

예시: People like walking in parks because it relaxes their minds and reduces stress. In addition, parks offer fresh air and a pleasant atmosphere, which improves mood and energy.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Start with one clear sentence stating the place, then add two concise reasons using linking words. Use precise language instead of vague words like “too near.”

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because I love the sound of the waves and the fresh sea air. Also, walking there lets me enjoy beautiful sunrises and sunsets.

제안: Make the answer natural by using a clear topic sentence and a smooth supporting detail. Use correct noun phrases (e.g., “a 30-minute walk”) and linkers if needed.

예시: I recently walked from my class to a nearby shopping mall, which was about a 30-minute walk. I went there to buy some snacks and it was a pleasant stroll.

× I do walk a lot as I am a student and I have to walk to my school and to the classroom then back home, so I do walk off for several hours in total.

✓ I walk a lot because I am a student and I have to walk to school and to the classroom and then back home, so I walk for several hours in total.

The original uses 'do walk' unnecessarily; simple present 'walk' is correct for habitual actions. Remove 'do' unless for emphasis. Also 'walk to my school' is awkward when speaking of a regular routine; 'walk to school' is idiomatic. 'Walk off' is incorrect here; use 'walk for' to indicate duration. Combine clauses with 'and then' for clarity.

× Yes, even my parents still tell me that I used to be stubborn to go outside when I was a child because I really loved traveling outside and it helped me to. Feel calm.

✓ Yes, my parents still tell me that I used to be stubborn about going outside when I was a child because I really loved going out and it helped me feel calm.

Use 'used to' correctly for past habits; say 'stubborn about going outside' rather than 'stubborn to go outside'. 'Traveling outside' is unnatural; 'going out' is appropriate. 'Helped me to feel calm' should be 'helped me feel calm' (omit unnecessary 'to'). Also fix sentence break and punctuation.

× People likes to walk in parks because it helps them relax their mind and. Feel stress free while they also go out for some fresh air and positive vibes.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it helps them relax their minds and feel stress-free while they also get some fresh air and positive vibes.

Subject 'People' is plural so verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. 'Relax their mind' should be 'relax their minds' to match plural subject, or use singular 'one's mind'. Remove erroneous period and join clauses. Use 'feel stress-free' (hyphenated adjective) and 'get some fresh air' is more natural than 'go out for some fresh air' in this context.

× If I had to take a long walk, if I had the chance, then it would be probably too near. Probably near beaches as I love the sound of waves and the flow of water.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, it would probably be near the beach because I love the sound of the waves and the flow of the water.

Use one clear conditional: 'If I had the chance to take a long walk' (second conditional). 'It would probably be near the beach' is idiomatic; 'beaches' can be singular 'the beach' when speaking generally. Remove redundant phrases. Use 'the sound of the waves' and 'flow of the water' for natural English.

× Recently I walked from my class to the shopping mall nearby, which was around 30 minutes walk in total.

✓ Recently I walked from my class to the nearby shopping mall, which was around a 30-minute walk in total.

Word order: 'nearby shopping mall' is more natural. Use 'a 30-minute walk' with hyphens to form a compound adjective. Alternatively 'about 30 minutes' is acceptable. Maintain past tense 'walked' is correct.