Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + frequency), then give two brief specific examples with linking words. Reduce repetitions and hesitations, and use consistent tense. Aim for 2–4 sentences and precise time expressions.

예시: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, I walk 10–15 minutes each morning to catch the bus and another 5–7 minutes from the bus stop to my workplace. In the evenings I often go to the nearby park for a longer walk to relax and exercise.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give specific details and a brief reason. Use past tense consistently and connect ideas with linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid awkward phrases like 'no sufficient transit services'—use 'limited' or 'no public transport.'

예시: Yes, I went walking a lot as a child because I lived in a rural area with limited public transport. For example, I often walked short distances to visit friends or to buy groceries, sometimes walking 10–20 minutes each way.

제안: Begin with a concise general reason, then give two specific and varied supporting points using linking words (for instance, moreover/also). Use natural collocations (greenery, birdsong, fresh air, peaceful atmosphere) and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer a peaceful natural environment. For instance, parks have greenery and birdsong, which make walks relaxing, and they provide fresh air and well-maintained paths for an uninterrupted stroll.

제안: Structure the reply with a clear topic sentence naming the place and one or two specific reasons why. Avoid hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use conditional wording correctly and give a concise plan for the walk (activities and companions).

예시: I would like to take a long walk in Unwin Park, which is near my home. If I had the chance after work, I would walk there for an hour to exercise and discuss fitness plans with my neighbor to help with weight loss.

제안: Answer directly with a past-tense topic sentence, then give two specific details about who you were with and what you did. Remove repetitions and filler words, and replace vague phrases like 'do some important work' with concrete activities. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Recently I walked in the nearby park with a friend. We walked for about 40 minutes, sat on a bench to chat, and enjoyed the fresh air while catching up on each other's news.

× I have always a walk of 10 to 15 minutes whenever I need to go to catch a bus.

✓ I always have a walk of 10 to 15 minutes whenever I need to catch a bus.

The original word order 'have always a walk' is unidiomatic in English. Use 'I always have' before the object. Also 'go to catch a bus' is redundant; 'need to catch a bus' is correct. Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'always' before the main verb and remove unnecessary 'go to'. (Verb in the past participle form ID used because correction involves verb form and placement.)

× After that when I reach my work then there is a 5 minute to seven minute walk over there and then after coming from work I used to go park and walk there a lot.

✓ After that, when I reach work there is a five- to seven-minute walk, and after coming from work I usually go to the park and walk there a lot.

Use 'reach work' or 'reach my workplace' (omit 'my' with 'work' sometimes) and use 'a five- to seven-minute walk' for range. 'Used to go park' is incorrect: use 'usually go to the park' for habitual present action. Also add hyphens with compound time adjectives. Suggestion: Use 'usually' for current habitual actions and include 'to' before locations (go to the park).

× After that when I reach my work then there is a 5 minute to seven minute walk over there and then after coming from work I used to go park and walk there a lot.

✓ ..., and after coming from work I used to go to the park and walk there a lot.

If describing a past habitual action, 'used to' requires 'go to the park' rather than 'go park'. The omission of 'to' is a grammar error. Use 'used to go to the park' for past habits. Suggestion: Include the preposition 'to' after 'go' when indicating destination.

× I would like to get a long walk whenever I get opportunity or I get a chance, uh, from my work, I will go there and have a long walk and do some exercise and also with my neighbor I will do some plans about doing weight loss.

✓ I would like to take a long walk when I have the opportunity. After work I will go there to walk and exercise, and I will make plans with my neighbor to lose weight.

Use 'take a walk' not 'get a walk'. 'Have the opportunity' is the common collocation. Sentence was long and mixed conditionals and future; split into clear sentences and use 'will' for future plans. 'Do some plans about doing weight loss' is unidiomatic; use 'make plans to lose weight'. Suggestion: Use standard collocations: 'take a walk', 'have the opportunity', and 'make plans to lose weight'.

× When I was a child, I lived in a rural area and there was no sufficient transit services.

✓ When I was a child, I lived in a rural area and there were not sufficient transit services.

'No sufficient transit services' mixes singular 'no' with plural 'services'. Use 'there were not sufficient transit services' or 'there was insufficient transit service'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'were' for plural 'services'. Suggestion: Use 'there were not sufficient transit services' or 'there was insufficient transit service'.

× And so that time we need to walk for a little distance and to go to buy some groceries, we need to walk there.

✓ At that time we needed to walk a short distance, and to buy groceries we had to walk there.

The speaker refers to past events, so verbs should be past tense: 'needed' or 'had to' instead of present 'need to'. Also 'a little distance' is better as 'a short distance'. Suggestion: Match past context with past tense verbs: 'needed' or 'had to'.

× Well, people like to walk in parks because it has a greenery and a chirping of birds.

✓ Well, people like to walk in parks because they have greenery and the chirping of birds.

'It has a greenery' wrongly uses 'it' and 'a greenery' is incorrect. Use 'they' to refer to 'parks' (plural) and 'greenery' is uncountable, so no article. 'The chirping of birds' is preferable. Suggestion: Use correct pronoun agreement and uncountable noun usage: 'parks have greenery and the chirping of birds'.

× We can listen there.

✓ We can listen to them there.

'Listen' often requires the preposition 'to' and an object: 'listen to them' (the birds). Without an object the sentence is vague. Also 'there' can follow. Suggestion: Use 'listen to' plus a clear object: 'listen to the birds there'.

× Also, there is a fresh air and we can walk there without any disturbance.

✓ Also, there is fresh air and we can walk there without any disturbance.

'A fresh air' uses an incorrect article; 'air' is uncountable so no 'a'. Suggestion: Remove the indefinite article with uncountable nouns: 'there is fresh air'.

× Moreover, their looks and landscaping views are very nice.

✓ Moreover, their appearance and landscaping are very nice.

'Their looks' is unclear—use 'appearance' or 'the looks of the park'. 'Landscaping views' is awkward; 'landscaping' alone or 'landscaped areas' is better. Pronoun 'their' can refer to parks but rephrase for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'the park's appearance' or 'their appearance' and 'landscaping' or 'landscaped areas'.

× As I told you, as I told you earlier, that I have a park nearby my hometown, so last time I visited there and I go with my friend and do some, uh, important work and uh, sit there.

✓ As I told you earlier, I have a park near my hometown, so last time I visited it and I went with my friend and did some important things and sat there.

Mixed present and past tenses: 'I have a park' (present) is okay, but recounting a past visit requires past tense verbs: 'visited', 'went', 'did', 'sat'. Also use 'near my hometown' not 'nearby my hometown'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when narrating past events and use correct preposition 'near' with 'my hometown'.

× Moreover, we both walk and, umm, start a conversation, which was very nice.

✓ Moreover, we both walked and started a conversation, which was very nice.

Describing a past event requires past tense verbs 'walked' and 'started' rather than present 'walk' and 'start'. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past events.