Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. I sometimes walk in a park near my home because it helps me relax and clear my mind. Also, I like to go alone so I can think quietly and enjoy the peaceful surroundings.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Give a concise topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details (when, where, with whom) and link them logically.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. My parents usually took me to the beach on weekends, where we would walk along the shore and play in the sand.

제안: Provide a clear main idea and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct grammar and word choice (people, minds, health). Keep it concise.

예시: People like walking in parks because it offers a break from busy daily life. For example, walking among trees reduces stress and improves mental and physical health, and some people even use parks as a quiet place to work or exercise.

제안: Your answer is descriptive but needs clearer structure and correct grammar. State your preference first, then add one or two specific reasons, using linking words and avoiding repetition.

예시: I would like to walk along a tree-lined park full of flowers because being in nature helps me relax. For instance, the fresh air and quiet atmosphere would make it easier to think and feel calm.

제안: Answer the question directly and use correct tense. If you didn't go for a walk, say so briefly and give a clear reason. Provide one optional detail about when you might next go.

예시: I haven't gone for a walk recently because I've been very busy with work. I hope to go for a short walk this weekend when I have more free time.

× Yes I forgot sometimes I work in the park, it's help me relaxing and peaceful and I go to the park in alone.

✓ Yes, I often walk in the park; it helps me relax and feel peaceful, and I go to the park alone.

Multiple sentence structure and verb problems: 'I forgot sometimes' is incorrect for habitual action — use 'I often'. 'It's help me relaxing' mixes forms; use 'it helps me relax' (subject-verb agreement and base verb after helps). 'peaceful' needs 'feel' to describe state. 'I go to the park in alone' has wrong preposition and word order — use 'alone'. Suggestions: simplify into clear clauses, use correct adverb for frequency, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use base verb after 'helps'.

× I was a child. I often go outside with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I often went outside with my parents.

The time frame is past, so verbs should be in past tense. 'I was a child' sets past context; 'go' should be 'went'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for actions in childhood and use a single sentence for clarity.

× They like to spend time with me in the beach.

✓ They liked to spend time with me at the beach.

The preposition for beaches is usually 'at' or 'on' depending on context; 'at the beach' is most natural. Also tense consistency: past context requires 'liked'. Suggestion: use 'at the beach' and match verb tense to surrounding sentences.

× So I was a child, they bring me in the beach.

✓ So when I was a child, they took me to the beach.

'Bring me in the beach' uses wrong verb tense and preposition. For past events use 'took' (bring -> took) and 'to the beach'. Also add 'when' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct past verb and 'to' for direction.

× Because many peoples are busy so they need to some relaxing or peaceful or comfortable things or they like to work in parks.

✓ Because many people are busy, they need something relaxing, peaceful, or comfortable, or they like to work in parks.

'Peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is the plural form already. 'need to some' is wrong — use 'need something'. The list of adjectives should modify 'something' or be connected with commas. Suggestion: use 'people', 'something relaxing', and parallel structure for lists.

× It's very helpful. They are mind and health.

✓ It is very helpful for their minds and health.

'They are mind and health' is ungrammatical. Use 'for their minds and health' to show benefit. Also combine with previous sentence for flow. Suggestion: use 'for' plus possessive to indicate what benefits.

× I would like to take a long walk along a peaceful lane, a park that is lined with trees and full of flowers.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along a peaceful lane or in a park that is lined with trees and full of flowers.

Comma suggests two locations but is unclear; use 'or in a park' for parallel options. 'lined with trees and full of flowers' is fine as participial phrase modifying 'park'. Suggestion: present options clearly and keep participial phrase attached to the correct noun.

× I enjoy being in nature, nature because it's help me relax and work in there would be very calming.

✓ I enjoy being in nature because it helps me relax, and working there would be very calming.

Duplicate 'nature' removed. 'It's help me' is wrong: subject-verb agreement and verb form — use 'it helps me'. 'work in there' is awkward for the intended meaning; use 'working there'. Suggestion: ensure correct subject-verb agreement and use gerund for the second idea.

× No, I didn't because I'm not for for my works, so I didn't.

✓ No, I didn't because I was busy with work, so I didn't go.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect phrasing 'I'm not for for my works'. For a past action use past tense 'was busy' and natural collocation 'busy with work'. Add verb 'go' to complete sentence. Suggestion: use clear past tense and standard expressions like 'busy with work'.