Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fragments.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. For example, I usually walk to local shops and the Microsoft Center because it is only a 15-minute walk from my home, so I prefer walking to save money and get some exercise.

제안: Give a concise past-tense statement and add one or two specific memories. Use linking words (for example, sometimes, because) and correct tense and word forms.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often played and walked with my friends near my house. For example, some mornings we would walk to a nearby park to play football before school.

제안: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (quiet, peaceful, fresh air) and avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: People like walking in parks because they are quieter and cleaner than busy streets. Also, parks have trees and fresh air, which help people relax and reduce stress.

제안: State a clear preference and give specific details about the place and who you would go with. Use conditional form ('If I had the chance') and avoid repetition.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the open field near my home because it is peaceful and scenic. I would go there with my friends or my father so we could chat and enjoy the views together.

제안: Use past tense correctly and give specific details concisely. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'I can't request') and use linking words to explain why you enjoyed it.

예시: Last weekend I walked near our coaching center with my friends. I enjoyed the route because the path is shaded by trees and there are benches to sit on, which made it a pleasant place to relax after a busy week.

× I always try to going my destination by walking whenever.

✓ I always try to go to my destination by walking whenever I can.

The verb 'try' should be followed by the base form 'to go', not the gerund 'going'. Use 'to go to' for destination and add 'whenever I can' to complete the time expression.

× Whenever I go to, I go outside from the home.

✓ Whenever I go out, I leave the house.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundant prepositions. Use the verb phrase 'go out' and 'leave the house' for natural English. This fixes sentence structure errors.

× Besides, whenever I go to, I go to Microsoft Center.

✓ Besides, when I go out I sometimes go to the Microsoft Center.

The phrase 'go to' is incomplete and repeated. Rephrase to 'when I go out' and include frequency 'sometimes' to make a complete, natural sentence.

× Whenever I was a child, I I work with my friends beside my homes and playing with them and sometimes in morning I walking I worked with my friends and my parents and so on.

✓ When I was a child, I worked with my friends near my home, played with them, and sometimes in the morning I walked with my friends and my parents.

The sentence mixes present and past forms. For past-time narration use past tense verbs (worked, played, walked). Also correct plural/singular nouns and prepositions ('near my home') and remove duplicate words.

× people usually like, uh, quite quite place, uh, in Rd. there are many noise and pollution, uh, but in the park, uh, there are quite, quite and no hesitate hesitation.

✓ People usually like quiet places because roads have a lot of noise and pollution, but parks are quiet and relaxing.

'Quite' was incorrectly used for 'quiet' and repeated. 'Noise' is uncountable so use 'a lot of noise'. 'No hesitate hesitation' is incorrect; use 'relaxing' or 'no hesitation' depending on meaning. This corrects adjective/adverb misuse and awkward phrasing.

× in the park, uh, there are quite, quite and no hesitate hesitation.

✓ In the park, there is peace and no hesitation.

Original mixed words. Use nouns or adjectives correctly: 'peace' and 'no hesitation' or 'it is quiet' are correct forms. This addresses incorrect verb/gerund usage and word choice.

× Actually, whenever I get a chance to walk, I I always go to in my field in which is located in my beside our home.

✓ Actually, whenever I get a chance to walk, I always go to the field beside our home.

Remove duplicate 'I', incorrect prepositions ('in my field in which is located in my beside our home') and simplify to natural word order 'the field beside our home'. This fixes sentence structure errors.

× I always go to the go there with my friends or my father or brother.

✓ I always go there with my friends, my father, or my brother.

The sentence had redundant words and inconsistent pronoun/possessive use. Use parallel structure and include possessive 'my' consistently. This corrects pronoun and redundancy issues.

× I went for a walk in the in our coaching center with my friends last weekend.

✓ I went for a walk to our coaching center with my friends last weekend.

Use past tense 'went' is correct but preposition should be 'to' for places. Remove redundant article 'the in'. This corrects preposition and cleans sentence.

× I enjoyed that road because the path is shaded by trees and there are benches where I can't request, which makes it a pleasant, pleasant place to unwind after busy.

✓ I enjoyed that walk because the path is shaded by trees and there are benches where I can rest, which makes it a pleasant place to unwind after being busy.

'Road' changed to 'walk' or 'path' for context. 'can't request' is wrong; 'can rest' conveys intended meaning. Remove repeated 'pleasant' and complete the final phrase 'after being busy'. This fixes adjective/adverb misuse and unclear phrasing.

× there are many noise and pollution,

✓ there is a lot of noise and pollution,

'Noise' is an uncountable noun and requires singular verb 'is' and quantifier 'a lot of'. This fixes subject-verb and quantifier usage.