Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Reduce repetition (e.g. avoid repeating 'when I am traveling'). Use a linking word to connect idea and reason.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially while traveling. For example, I often read short novels or travel journals on trains because they help me relax and pass the time.

제안: Avoid hesitations and fragmented sentences. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Improve phrasing (e.g. 'reduce screen time and ease eye strain'). Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because it reduces screen time and eases eye strain. For instance, I usually take a paperback on short trips instead of using my tablet.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence covering both parts, then give one contrasting example using a linking word like 'whereas' or 'but'. Avoid informal phrases like 'time pass'—use 'to pass time'.

예시: I read carefully when I need to learn something, such as studying a textbook for an exam, whereas I skim light articles or magazines to pass the time on a commute.

제안: Make the contrast succinct and use clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'scan' vs 'read in detail'). Limit repetition like 'concept or logic' and 'in depth knowledge or logic'. Use a linking word such as 'however' to contrast.

예시: I usually scan articles when I only need a general idea, however I read in detail when preparing for exams so I can fully understand the arguments and remember key points.

× I like to read books or journals when I travel because I think it can help me relax and calm down when I am traveling.

✓ I like reading books or journals when I travel because I think it helps me relax and calm down.

Use consistent verb forms: 'like to read' and 'like reading' are both possible, but repeating 'travel'/'traveling' is redundant. Also use simple present 'helps' to state a general truth instead of 'can help' which is weaker; the original also had unnecessary progressive 'am traveling'. Suggestion: choose one form ('like reading') and use simple present for habitual actions.

× I always try to carry a book along with me when I, uh, go for short travel.

✓ I always try to carry a book with me when I go on short trips.

'Travel' as an uncountable noun is incorrect here; use 'trip' (countable) and plural 'trips' for repeated occasions. Use the preposition 'on' with 'trips' and omit filler sounds like 'uh'.

× So long travels.

✓ I do the same for longer journeys.

Fragment 'So long travels.' is not a complete sentence. Replace with a full clause that fits context. 'Long travels' is awkward; 'longer journeys' or 'long trips' with subject and verb makes it grammatical.

× Even though screens are something which I am used to, I prefer reading from paper because it can reduce the screen time and thereby give good efforts to our eyes.

✓ Even though I am used to screens, I prefer reading from paper because it reduces screen time and is better for our eyes.

Awkward pronoun and clause order: 'screens are something which I am used to' is wordy; use 'I am used to screens.' 'Reduce the screen time' should be 'reduce screen time' (no article). 'Give good efforts to our eyes' is incorrect—use 'is better for our eyes' to express benefit. Also use simple present 'reduces' for general truth.

× In my personal view, I try to concentrate on reading when I want to study about it, but when I am just reading for the sake of time pass, I don't give much attention or concentration.

✓ In my view, I try to concentrate on reading when I want to study something, but when I am just reading to pass the time, I don't pay much attention.

'Study about it' is incorrect; use 'study something' or 'study it'. 'Time pass' is Indian English; correct phrase is 'pass the time'. Use 'pay attention' rather than 'give attention or concentration'. Keep verbs in simple present for habitual actions.

× I would prefer scanning when I don't want to thoroughly understand the concept or logic within that article, but if I want to write or study for an exam then I will go with the detailed reading, understanding the in depth knowledge or logic of whatever is described in that article.

✓ I prefer scanning when I don't want to fully understand the concept or logic in an article, but if I want to write or study for an exam I will choose detailed reading to understand the in-depth knowledge or logic described in the article.

Use consistent verb choices: 'would prefer' is conditional and here simple present 'prefer' fits habitual preference. 'Thoroughly understand' okay but 'fully understand' is smoother. 'Within that article' -> 'in an article'. 'Go with the detailed reading' -> 'choose detailed reading'. 'Understanding the in depth knowledge' needs hyphen 'in-depth' and clearer structure: use infinitive 'to understand'.