Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good content and clear opinion. Improve cohesion by using a topic sentence then 1–2 concise supporting details with linking words. Vary vocabulary slightly and avoid minor redundancy ("expand my cultural horizons" and "enrich my knowledge" are similar). Keep within 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading; I usually read about three books a month. I mainly read historical fiction and non-fiction because they broaden my cultural horizons and deepen my knowledge. For example, historical novels help me picture past societies, while non-fiction gives factual insights.

제안: Answer is clear and gives reasons, but is slightly repetitive and wordy. Use linking words to make it more cohesive and replace vague phrases like "can cause stress" with more precise wording. Limit to 2–3 sentences and combine similar ideas to avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because long periods on a screen give me eye strain and neck pain. For this reason, I usually choose print books, especially for long reading sessions.

제안: The answer is direct but a bit unclear and repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and use linking words. Avoid repeating synonyms ("attentively" and "scrutinize") without adding new information. Also expand briefly on when casual reading is acceptable.

예시: I need to read carefully when the material is difficult or technical, for example when studying textbook chapters with complex concepts. In contrast, I skim articles or light fiction when I just want general ideas or relaxation.

제안: Good stance, but phrasing is slightly awkward and repetitive. Use a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Replace vague phrases like "one of the purposes" with direct reasons and avoid absolute statements about scanning — acknowledge its usefulness sometimes.

예시: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand the ideas and learn the background information. However, I sometimes scan when I need to find a specific fact quickly, such as a date or name in an article.

× I usually read about 3 books per month.

✓ I usually read about three books per month.

Use of numerals is acceptable, but in formal writing numbers from one to nine are normally written as words; this is a stylistic recommendation rather than a grammatical error. No change in plurality needed. Write 'three' for consistency and formality.

× I like historical fiction and non fiction because they expand my cultural horizons and enrich my knowledge so I always learn something new.

✓ I like historical fiction and non-fiction because they expand my cultural horizons and enrich my knowledge, so I always learn something new.

The term 'non-fiction' should be hyphenated as a compound noun. Additionally, the sentence needs a comma before 'so' because it connects two independent clauses. These are punctuation and word-formation issues affecting clarity.

× I would rather read on paper because reading on screen can cause stress.

✓ I would rather read on paper because reading on a screen can cause stress.

Add the article 'a' before 'screen' because 'screen' is a countable noun here and refers to any screen in general. This corrects article usage along with adjective/adverb classification.

× For instance, it can cause stiff shoulder or eye strains.

✓ For instance, it can cause stiff shoulders or eye strain.

Use plural 'shoulders' when speaking generally or 'a stiff shoulder' for a single side; 'eye strain' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Correct noun forms improve grammatical accuracy.

× Therefore, in order to mitigate the stress, I prefer to read on paper.

✓ Therefore, to mitigate the stress, I prefer to read on paper.

The phrase 'in order to' is wordy; 'to' is more concise and natural. This is a style/structure improvement rather than a strict grammatical correction; it improves fluency.

× I need to read attentively when I don't understand the context and I have to scrutinize the sentences written in the textbooks.

✓ I need to read attentively when I don't understand the context, and I have to scrutinize the sentences written in textbooks.

Use 'textbooks' without the definite article 'the' when speaking generally. Also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. This fixes general reference and punctuation.

× Otherwise I do not have to read carefully.

✓ Otherwise, I do not have to read carefully.

Add a comma after 'Otherwise' because it is an introductory adverbial. The tense is fine; this corrects punctuation for standard written English.

× I would rather read in details because it is one of the purposes of reading to get the better understanding of the contents or getting knowledge behind it.

✓ I would rather read in detail because one purpose of reading is to gain a better understanding of the content and the knowledge behind it.

Use the singular adverbial phrase 'in detail' (not 'in details'). 'One purpose' is clearer than 'it is one of the purposes'; 'to gain' is a better verb choice than 'to get'; 'a better understanding' requires 'a'; use singular 'content' when referring to material collectively; rephrase 'getting knowledge behind it' to 'the knowledge behind it' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× The scanning does not help in this respect.

✓ Scanning does not help in this respect.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before gerund 'scanning' when speaking about the general activity. Removing 'the' makes the noun phrase general and grammatically natural.