Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I prefer reading academic books to fiction. I was encouraged to read textbooks from childhood to do well at school, so I enjoy learning facts and theories rather than following fictional stories.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with two concise reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and duplicate words.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because I find it more comfortable and less straining on my eyes. Also, since I already wear glasses, the screen’s blue light bothers me, so paper feels easier for long reading sessions.

제안: Answer directly with a general rule, then give a specific example and explain why careful reading is needed. Avoid filler words and repeat key words smoothly.

예시: I need to read carefully when the information has serious consequences, such as a patient’s medical history, because mistakes could affect someone’s health. By contrast, I skim routine news or casual social media posts when accuracy isn’t critical.

제안: Start with a direct preference, then explain when you scan and when you read in detail using linking words. Remove hesitations and vague phrases, and provide a brief concrete example.

예시: I usually prefer scanning because newspapers and online news often contain routine items that don’t need close attention. However, if I find an interesting headline or an in-depth report, I pause and read it in detail to understand the facts and implications.

× I like reading academics rather than novels and journals because from my childhood I grew up uh, reading those books to score good grades in my exams.

✓ I like reading academic books rather than novels and journals because, from my childhood, I grew up reading those books to score good grades in my exams.

Use 'academic' as an adjective before 'books' rather than the plural noun 'academics' which usually means scholars. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use the adjective form 'academic' when describing books; keep plural 'books' to match meaning.

× I prefer reading on paper because, uh, I was a traditional reader.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because I am a traditional reader.

The student uses past tense 'was' with a present preference 'prefer'. Use present tense 'am' to match ongoing habit. Suggestion: match verb tense to current states or habitual actions.

× Now if I choose to read on a screen, uh, it affects my eyes and I, I already have glasses, so I don't like to see that blue screen and, uh, get affected by the lights.

✓ If I choose to read on a screen, it affects my eyes and I already have glasses, so I don't like looking at the blue light and getting affected by it.

Use 'looking at' instead of 'see' for continuous exposure; 'blue screen' is better expressed as 'blue light' and 'getting affected by it' matches gerund usage. Also remove filler words and keep present tense consistent. Suggestion: use gerunds ('looking at', 'getting') for actions resulting from choosing to read on screen.

× Let's say if I'm reading an article related to medical history of a patient, then I need to be very cautious, uh, because it's related to the health of, uh, a person.

✓ Let's say if I'm reading an article related to a patient's medical history, then I need to be very cautious because it's related to a person's health.

Use possessive form 'patient's medical history' for natural English and 'person's health' rather than awkward 'the health of a person'. Also remove fillers. Suggestion: prefer possessive constructions for body/medical contexts and keep gerund/progressive where needed.

× I prefer scanning because most of the news that we read on newspapers is not into very detail and I like to skip those lines and if I find any, some, anything interesting then I will pause.

✓ I prefer scanning because most of the news we read in newspapers is not very detailed, and I like to skip those parts; if I find anything interesting, I pause.

Use 'in newspapers' instead of 'on newspapers'; 'not very detailed' is correct adjective use; avoid 'is not into very detail'. Replace 'lines' with 'parts' for meaning. Also use present simple 'pause' to match habitual action. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions ('in' for publications) and use adjectives ('detailed') rather than noun phrases ('into detail').

× I will take more time in reading detail.

✓ I take more time reading in detail.

Use present simple 'take' to express habitual action; 'reading in detail' is the correct phrase rather than 'reading detail'. Suggestion: use 'in detail' as an adverbial phrase and present simple for habits.