Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'before sleep' or 'during my commute').

예시: Yes, I love reading and consider myself a bookworm. For example, I read novels during long journeys and spend at least 30 minutes reading before going to bed. Because reading helps me relax, I try to keep a regular reading habit.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid vague phrases like 'very convenient' and 'we'. Give a specific reason and one brief example, and use linking words (because, however).

예시: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because paper causes less eye strain. For instance, when I read printed novels for an hour I don't get headaches, unlike reading on my phone for the same time.

제안: Form a full topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Reduce hesitations and be specific about situations (studying, technical reports) and why careful reading is needed (to understand terminology).

예시: I need to read carefully when I study or when a text contains complex vocabulary because I must understand precise meanings. In contrast, I skim light fiction or short news articles to get the main idea quickly.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to contrast the two approaches (whereas, however). Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors; use concise, varied vocabulary ('skim' vs 'read in detail').

예시: It depends on the material: I usually skim light stories or simple messages to capture the main idea, whereas I read academic articles in detail because their vocabulary and concepts are dense and require careful attention.

× I always, uh, read books when traveling or in my free time and even uh, I spend at least 30 minutes in reading before going to bed.

✓ I always read books when traveling or in my free time, and I even spend at least 30 minutes reading before going to bed.

Unnecessary commas and the phrase 'in reading' is unidiomatic. Use present simple 'read' for habitual actions and the gerund 'reading' after 'spend' (spend time doing something). Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity.

× I prefer reading on a paper than on a screen because on paper reading is very convenient and moreover we will not feel much strain on our eyes which we can feel on a screen so. Yeah.

✓ I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen because paper is more convenient and causes less strain on the eyes than screens do.

Use 'reading on paper' not 'on a paper' (article error). Use the correct comparative structure 'prefer A to B' (preposition choice tied to article). Replace 'we will not feel much strain' with 'causes less strain' for natural expression and correct comparison. Remove filler 'so. Yeah.'

× While I am studying something looking for a information or uh umm the text is very high in vocab. I have to concentrate on the writings umm to understand the meaning.

✓ While I am studying something, looking for information, or when the text has a high level of vocabulary, I have to concentrate on the writing to understand the meaning.

Use 'information' without an article (uncountable noun) and correct phrase 'high in vocab' to 'has a high level of vocabulary' or 'is vocabulary-dense'. 'Writings' is awkward; 'writing' or 'the text' is better. Add commas and conjunctions for clarity and correct present continuous usage for ongoing actions.

× It depends on the text. If I if the stories are light or messages are easy to understand, I usually skim to get the main idea. But for instance when when there are academic articles where do very high vocabulary and dense text, for that I have to read carefully.

✓ It depends on the text. If the stories are light or the messages are easy to understand, I usually skim to get the main idea. But for instance, when there are academic articles with very high-level vocabulary and dense text, I have to read carefully.

Remove repeated words 'if I if' and 'when when'. Use 'the messages' for specificity. Replace 'where do very high vocabulary' with 'with very high-level vocabulary' to correct structure and word choice. Maintain present simple for habitual actions and add commas for clarity.