Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer first, then add one or two clear supporting details using correct tense and grammar. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid repetition. Correct common mistakes: say 'watch baseball games', 'I played baseball for over twelve years', and give clear frequency like 'two or three times a week.' Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I enjoy watching baseball. I played baseball for over twelve years when I was younger, so I follow professional games closely. For example, my friends and I usually watch two or three games a week in the evenings because it’s a way for us to relax and discuss players’ performances.

제안: Start with a simple topic sentence in past tense, then give specific supporting details with correct vocabulary and linking words. Use 'liked' for past preferences and explain why with clearer phrases like 'battle friends' and 'strategic fun'. Avoid unclear phrases like 'sink what my friends think.'

예시: Yes, I liked playing video games, especially Pokémon. I enjoyed them because I could battle friends and use different strategies. It was exciting to guess my opponents’ moves and try new tactics, which helped me think more strategically.

제안: Answer directly and use clear chronology with correct verbs (e.g., 'I started playing at six and continued until I was nineteen'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'on to pray' and 'rank it.' Use linking words such as 'so' or 'therefore' to connect past and present. Keep it concise and specific about current involvement (playing or watching).

예시: Yes. I have played baseball since I was six years old and continued playing competitively until I was nineteen. Although I no longer play as much, I still follow the sport closely and often watch games with friends and family, so baseball remains an important hobby for me.

제안: Give a direct answer and then provide clear supporting details with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use present perfect or past tense correctly ('have played for over ten years'). Clarify frequency with natural expressions like 'we usually watch games together' or 'we sometimes play at weekends.' Avoid awkward phrases like 'black baseball' and 'at day time.'

예시: Yes. My father and older brother also enjoy baseball. They have played for over ten years, so we usually watch professional games together and sometimes play a friendly match on weekends when we are free.

× Yes, I like to watch baseball game.

✓ Yes, I like to watch baseball games.

The noun 'game' should be plural ('games') because 'watch' refers to watching baseball matches in general, not a single specific game. Use plural for general activities or repeated events.

× Actually, when I was a child, I had played baseball for over twelve years and now I like to watch baseball game.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I played baseball for over twelve years, and now I like to watch baseball games.

Use simple past ('played') to describe a past activity that lasted for a period of time. 'Had played' (past perfect) is unnecessary because there is no earlier past reference. Also change 'baseball game' to plural 'baseball games' for general reference.

× At night, we usually watch baseball games with my friends or family in and I usually three or twice.

✓ At night, we usually watch baseball games with my friends or family, and I usually go three or two times a week.

Sentence had multiple issues: missing verb after 'I usually' and awkward frequency expression. Add verb 'go' and correct quantifier/order to 'three or two times a week'. Also remove stray 'in'. This fits present habitual tense.

× Yes, I like the video games, for example, the Pokemon because it can battle with the friends using the Pokemon.

✓ Yes, I liked video games when I was younger, for example Pokemon, because you can battle friends using Pokemon.

Maintain past reference for childhood hobbies: use 'liked' or specify 'when I was younger'. Also change 'the Pokemon' to 'Pokemon' (proper noun, plural idea) and 'it can battle with the friends' to 'you can battle friends' or 'they can battle with friends' for clarity and correct pronoun/verb agreement.

× It is the strategic and it is the fun to sink what my friends think.

✓ It is strategic and fun to guess what my friends are thinking.

'Strategic' and 'fun' are adjectives used without 'the'. Use 'guess' instead of 'sink' (wrong word), and 'are thinking' (present continuous) fits the ongoing cognitive action. Remove unnecessary 'the' before adjectives.

× Yes, that is baseball.

✓ Yes, it's baseball.

Informal contraction 'it's' is natural here; grammatically either form is acceptable. No major tense error; suggestion improves naturalness.

× I played baseball when I was six years old and I was on to pray before I turned to nineteen years old.

✓ I started playing baseball when I was six years old and continued until I was nineteen.

Original sentence misuses 'was on to pray' and 'turned to nineteen years old'. Use 'started playing' and 'continued until' to express duration correctly in past. Use 'was nineteen' rather than 'turned to'.

× So I continue to play baseball and now even now I like to watch baseball so I rank it.

✓ So I continued to play baseball, and now I like to watch it, so I still enjoy it.

Maintain correct tense sequence: 'continued' for past activity, 'now I like' for present. 'Rank it' is incorrect/unclear; replace with 'enjoy it' for intended meaning.

× Yes, my father and my older brother likes black baseball because they had played baseball over ten years.

✓ Yes, my father and my older brother like baseball because they played baseball for over ten years.

With plural subject 'my father and my older brother', use 'like' (no -s). Remove 'black' (unclear) and use simple past 'played' rather than past perfect 'had played' since no earlier past reference. Add 'for' before duration.

× So we usually watch baseball game together and we sometimes play baseball at day time, even though we are not free.

✓ So we usually watch baseball games together, and we sometimes play baseball during the daytime, even though we are not free.

'Baseball game' should be plural 'baseball games' for general activities. Use 'during the daytime' instead of 'at day time'. Keep present simple for habitual actions. Also keep comma before conjunction for clarity.