Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid repetition and filler words, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Mention 2–3 hobbies and give one brief detail for each using linking words (for example, “For example,” or “Also,”). Pronounce names and verbs correctly (e.g., “listening to songs,” “playing volleyball,” “writing songs”).

예시: I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy reading novels, especially contemporary fiction, which helps me relax. I also play volleyball regularly; it keeps me fit and helps me make friends. Additionally, I like listening to and writing songs in my free time.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific examples. Avoid vague or unclear phrases like “spend that time in army.” Use linking words to structure your response (e.g., “When I was a child…” then “For example,”). Mention particular activities and who you spent time with.

예시: When I was a child I enjoyed several hobbies. For example, I used to play outdoor games with my friends on weekends, such as football, which helped me stay active. I also spent free time with my family, often reading stories together or going for short trips.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the hobby you've kept since childhood and explain why with specific reasons. Remove hesitations and fillers. Use linking words like “because” and “also” correctly. Give one or two concise, relevant benefits of the hobby with correct vocabulary (e.g., “physical fitness,” “discipline”).

예시: Yes, I have played sports since childhood, especially volleyball. Because sports keep me physically fit and teach me teamwork and discipline, I still play regularly. Also, playing sports helps me relieve stress and stay energetic.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a couple of specific examples that show how you share hobbies with family. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (e.g., “my whole family” not “my all family members”). Use linking words like “for example” and “we often” to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I share several hobbies with my family. For example, my whole family enjoys reading—every evening we often discuss the books we are reading. We also like listening to music together, especially on weekends when we relax and sing along.

× listening song

✓ listening to songs

Missing plural and preposition: 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match general activity, and 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' before the object (listen to something). Use 'listening to songs.'

× I like to a singing songs

✓ I like singing songs

Incorrect insertion of article 'a' and wrong verb form sequence. Use either 'I like to sing songs' (infinitive) or 'I like singing songs' (gerund). Remove 'a' and correct verb form.

× Now I am writing a songs

✓ Now I am writing songs

Article error and number agreement: 'a' cannot be used with the plural noun 'songs.' Use 'writing songs' or 'writing a song' if singular. Choose based on meaning.

× I like to spend that time in army

✓ I liked to spend that time in the army / I liked spending that time in the army

Preposition and article: English requires 'in the army' with the definite article 'the.' Also for past habit use past tense 'liked' or 'used to.' Adjust tense to match question about childhood.

× I like to spend time with my friends on weekend

✓ I like to spend time with my friends on weekends / at the weekend

Preposition and number: use 'on weekends' for general habit or 'at the weekend' for British English. 'on weekend' is incorrect.

× When I was free I spent that time with my family on weekend

✓ When I was free I spent that time with my family on weekends

Tense is past so 'spent' is fine but 'on weekend' is incorrect; use 'on weekends' for habitual weekends in the past.

× sports give us uh, uh, cheap cheapness, uh, sports, sports remove our uh

✓ Sports keep us healthy and cheap to play; sports remove our stress / bad habits

Sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Cheap cheapness' is not a correct phrase. Provide clear noun phrases like 'cheap to play' and complete the idea, e.g., 'remove our stress' or 'remove bad habits.' Use full sentences and remove filler sounds.

× my favorite game is a volleyball uh

✓ My favorite sport is volleyball

Article and noun choice: 'volleyball' as an uncountable sport does not need 'a.' Also 'game' can be 'sport.' Use 'My favorite sport is volleyball.'

× My all family members like to read books, playing and listening songs

✓ All my family members like reading books, playing, and listening to songs

Word order and parallel structure: 'My all family members' is incorrect; use 'All my family members.' Maintain parallel gerund forms 'reading, playing, and listening to' and include 'to' after 'listening.'

× I have many hobbies uh, like reading books, uh, reading books, listening song and uh singing a song and play

✓ I have many hobbies, like reading books, listening to songs, singing songs, and playing games

Article and parallelism: 'listening song' needs 'to' and plural; 'singing a song and play' mixes forms. Use parallel gerunds and correct prepositions: 'listening to songs, singing songs, and playing games.'