Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers clear and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details linked coherently. Focus on correct verb forms and concise phrasing. For this answer, say you jog, why you started, and what you like about it. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid unnecessary fragments.

예시: I enjoy jogging, and I started because I wanted to lose weight. Over time I began to like it because it helps me clear my mind and I don’t need to talk to anyone while running, which feels relaxing.

제안: Answer directly, correct grammar and be specific: use past tense consistently and give concrete details. Explain briefly why you liked that hobby and describe one clear example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect nouns.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I liked playing with toy guns because I was fascinated by the military. For example, I had several plastic and model rifles that I kept on a shelf and I would pretend to be a soldier with friends.

제안: Use correct tense and word order: begin with a clear topic sentence and then give specific details. Name the genres you like and say how often you watch and what you do (discuss, recommend). Use linking words like "and" or "also."

예시: Yes, I have enjoyed watching movies since childhood. I am especially interested in action and romantic films, and I usually watch one or two movies every week. I also discuss new films with my friends to share opinions and recommendations.

제안: This answer is clear and coherent but can be tightened and made more natural: start with a topic sentence, then add a specific detail about routine or why you enjoy it. Use correct adjectives (newest → the latest) and smoother phrasing.

예시: Yes, we all enjoy watching soap operas. Every afternoon we sit together to watch the latest episodes, which is a nice family routine and gives us something to talk about.

× Yes I enjoy myself in jogging when I began to run firstly I just am that lose my weight but I find I enjoying it because when I run. No I didn't need to cater others or talk to anyone.

✓ Yes, I enjoy jogging. When I began running, at first I was just trying to lose weight, but I found I enjoyed it because when I run I don't need to take care of others or talk to anyone.

Multiple issues primarily involve incorrect use of verb+ -ing and verb forms. 'Enjoy myself in jogging' is incorrect; native usage is 'enjoy jogging' (enjoy + gerund). 'When I began to run' should be 'when I began running' (begin + gerund). 'Firstly I just am that lose my weight' contains wrong verb forms and structure; correct: 'at first I was just trying to lose weight' (past continuous/ progressive idea requires 'was trying' and 'trying to lose'). 'I find I enjoying it' should be 'I found I enjoyed it' to match past narrative and use 'enjoyed' not 'enjoying' here. 'No I didn't need to cater others' is incorrect verb choice and structure; 'didn't need to' plus base verb 'cater to others' would be possible, but better: 'I don't need to take care of others or talk to anyone' (present general habit while running). Suggestion: use 'enjoy + gerund' consistently, match tense across clauses (past for beginnings), and use correct verbs ('try to lose weight', 'take care of').

× Yes, when I was a child I really like to play gun toys because I was a Royal military fans.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really liked playing with toy guns because I was a fan of the royal military.

Tense and agreement errors: the speaker refers to childhood (past), so 'like' should be past 'liked'. 'Play gun toys' is unnatural; use 'play with toy guns' (verb + object). 'Royal military fans' has plural noun and article issues; correct: 'a fan of the royal military' or 'a fan of the military'. Also maintain singular/plural agreement ('a fan' not 'fans'). Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and natural collocations 'play with toy guns' and 'a fan of'.

× There are many model gun like pastry or refill in my room.

✓ There were many model guns, like replicas or airsoft guns, in my room.

Plural agreement and word choice: 'model gun' should be plural 'model guns' to match 'many'. 'Like pastry or refill' is incorrect vocabulary; likely intended to say 'replicas' or 'refills' (if meaning ammunition). Also tense should match previous past context: 'were' instead of 'are'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'many' and choose accurate nouns (replicas, models, or airsoft guns).

× Yes, I enjoy the watch movies signs my childhood.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed watching movies since my childhood.

Incorrect verb form and connector: 'enjoy the watch' is wrong; use 'enjoy watching' or in past 'enjoyed watching'. 'Signs my childhood' likely intended 'since my childhood' (preposition error). Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'since my childhood' context. Suggestion: use 'enjoy(ed) + -ing' and correct prepositions like 'since'.

× I I'm interested in action movie and romantic film.

✓ I'm interested in action movies and romantic films.

Count noun and adjective agreement: 'action movie' and 'romantic film' should be plural when speaking generally: 'action movies' and 'romantic films'. Also remove duplicated 'I' and use 'I'm' once. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general preferences ('I like action movies').

× I always discuss movie companies with my friend and I watch one or two movie every.

✓ I always discuss movies with my friends, and I watch one or two movies every week.

Several structure and word choice issues: 'discuss movie companies' is likely wrong; intended 'discuss movies' or 'film companies'. 'My friend' probably 'my friends' if habitual. 'One or two movie every' missing plural and time expression: should be 'one or two movies every week'. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('movies'), pluralize when needed, and include an appropriate time period ('every week').

× Yes, all my family members enjoy watching soap operas.

✓ Yes, all my family members enjoy watching soap operas.

This sentence is correct; it uses present simple appropriately to describe a habitual action. No change needed.

× We always sit in front of the television every afternoon together to wait for the update of newest soap operas.

✓ We always sit in front of the television every afternoon together to wait for updates on the newest soap operas.

Word choice and article order: 'the update of newest soap operas' is awkward. Use 'updates on the newest soap operas' or 'updates of the newest soap operas'. Also 'newest' needs an article or pluralized noun 'the newest soap operas' is fine. Suggestion: use 'updates on' and keep plural 'soap operas'.

× It's a great family time.

✓ It's a great family time.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. If preferred, more natural phrasing is 'It's great family time' or 'It's a great time for the family', but the original is acceptable.