Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific details linked logically (use linking words). For example, state past hobby, current situation, and reason concisely.

예시: I used to enjoy playing the guitar because it helped me relax. However, at the moment I am preparing for an entrance exam, so I spend most of my free time studying. When I have time, I try to practice the guitar for about thirty minutes to keep improving.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Use simple linking words and be specific about what you watched and why it appealed to you. Avoid repetition and pronunciation markers in writing.

예시: When I was a child I loved watching YouTube videos, especially comedy sketches and romantic films. They made me feel happy and entertained, and I enjoyed imitating the funny characters with my friends. This helped me relax after school.

제안: Answer directly and correct tense and vocabulary. State the hobby, say how long you've had it, and give a specific reason or example using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes, I have loved music since I was young. I have played the guitar and listened to many kinds of music for over ten years because it cheers me up and helps me concentrate. For example, when I feel stressed I play a few chords and instantly feel calmer.

제안: Be concise and logical: start with a direct statement about whether your hobbies match your family's, then give a specific example and a reason using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement) and avoid hesitations.

예시: Yes, my father and I share a love of music. He often listens to jazz while driving, so I grew up hearing jazz at home and now I enjoy it too. For instance, I sometimes play jazz guitar pieces when I am relaxing because they make me feel comfortable.

× Uh, in the past my hobby is playing the guitar and I feel comfortable when I play guitar.

✓ Uh, in the past my hobby was playing the guitar and I felt comfortable when I played the guitar.

Tense mismatch: the speaker refers to a past time ('in the past') so present tense verbs 'is' and 'feel' should be past ('was', 'felt'). Also 'play guitar' needs the article 'the' before 'guitar' in this context. Use consistent past tense for actions that occurred in the past. Suggestion: When referring to past habits, use past simple (was, liked, felt) and include articles where necessary.

× However, recently I have to prepare for my entrance exam.

✓ However, recently I have had to prepare for my entrance exam.

Modal/time expression and tense: 'recently' with the obligation expressed by 'have to' is better in present perfect ('have had to') to indicate an action that began in the recent past and continues up to now. Alternatively, use simple present 'I have to prepare' if the obligation is current. Suggestion: Use 'have had to' for recent past obligations continuing to the present, or 'I have to' for current obligations.

× So recently my hobby is studying maybe perhaps.

✓ So recently my hobby is studying, maybe.

Redundancy and modality: keep tense consistent for a current habit ('is studying' or better 'has been studying') and remove redundant words ('maybe perhaps'). Suggestion: Use either 'maybe' or 'perhaps', not both, and consider 'has been studying' to emphasize a recent change.

× My I was a child I like to watching YouTube such as comedy and romantic romance movies and it makes me feel comf, feel happy and delightful and also I want to be fun.

✓ When I was a child, I liked watching YouTube videos such as comedies and romantic movies; they made me feel comfortable, happy, and delighted, and I wanted to have fun.

Multiple issues: sentence order ('When I was a child' is correct), tense (past habit -> 'liked', 'made'), verb form ('watching' correct after 'liked'), word choice ('comedy' -> 'comedies', 'romantic romance movies' redundant -> 'romantic movies'), informal/incorrect 'comf' -> 'comfortable', and awkward phrase 'I want to be fun' -> 'I wanted to have fun'. Suggestion: Break long sentences into clearer clauses, use past tense for childhood habits, correct pluralization and word choice.

× I think I'm still a child, however I really like to listen music, listen to music and also I really like playing the guitar and therefore I think I love MO music.

✓ I don't think I'm still a child, but I really like listening to music, and I also enjoy playing the guitar, so I think I love music.

Logical and grammatical issues: the original 'I think I'm still a child' conflicts with context; likely the speaker meant the opposite. Repetition 'listen music' should be 'listening to music'. 'Therefore' and 'so' used redundantly. 'MO music' unclear -> 'music'. Use parallel gerunds ('listening', 'playing'). Suggestion: State the intended meaning clearly, use 'listening to' + noun, and avoid repeated words.

× It's remind me feel happy.

✓ It reminds me and makes me feel happy.

Subject-verb agreement and verb usage: 'It' requires 'reminds' (third person singular). The verb 'remind' needs an object and a following clause ('makes me feel'). Also 'feel happy' should be connected properly. Suggestion: Use correct third-person singular form 'reminds' and combine verbs appropriately: 'reminds me and makes me feel...'. Also ensure subject and verb agree.

× My father like to also like to listen to music and while he driving his car, therefore I think I like to use I like listen to music also I'll he he likes jazz MU music.

✓ My father also likes to listen to music while he is driving his car; he likes jazz music, and I also like to listen to music.

Multiple errors: third person singular requires 'likes'. 'Like to also like to' is redundant. Progressive form needed: 'while he is driving'. Word order and pronoun use are confused ('I like to use I like listen' is incorrect). 'MU music' -> 'music'. Suggestion: Use 'likes' for he/she/it, simplify redundant phrases, use present continuous 'is driving' for ongoing actions, and keep clauses clear and ordered.

× It makes me feel comfort cozy.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable and cozy.

Wrong word form: 'comfort' is a noun; need the adjective 'comfortable'. Missing conjunction between adjectives 'comfortable' and 'cozy'. Suggestion: Use adjectives to describe feelings and connect them properly (comfortable and cozy).