Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence naming at least one hobby, then add one or two brief specific details (why you enjoy it or how often you do it). Use linking words if you add more than one detail. Keep it natural and avoid one-word answers.

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies, such as reading and cooking. I usually read fiction in the evenings because it helps me relax, and I cook at weekends to try new recipes.

제안: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence naming specific hobbies you had as a child. Then give one or two concrete supporting details (for example, what you read or what games you played, and why it was meaningful). Use correct tense and avoid vague or repeated words like 'harvest' or 'habits'.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed reading and playing outdoor games. For example, I read fairy tales every night and I often played football with friends after school, which helped me make friends and stay active.

제안: Answer directly in present perfect or simple present to show continuity (e.g. 'I have enjoyed X since childhood'). Choose a real hobby (not sleeping/eating) and explain briefly how it continued into adulthood with one specific example. Use correct grammar and concise phrasing.

예시: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child. I used to draw cartoons, and I still sketch in my free time now, usually once a week to relax.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether your hobbies are the same as your family’s. Then provide one or two specific examples of shared activities and explain briefly how you do them together. Avoid awkward words like 'harvest' and use natural vocabulary such as 'family tradition' or 'we enjoy'.

예시: Yes, some of my hobbies are the same as my family's interests, especially cooking. For instance, we often cook traditional meals together on weekends, and each person helps with a different dish.

× Yes, I have many harvest when I was a child and it was reading, playing, sleeping, eating and so on.

✓ Yes, I had many hobbies when I was a child, including reading, playing, sleeping, eating, and so on.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' for past habits. Also 'harvest' is incorrect word choice; 'hobbies' fits the context. List items should follow 'including' and use commas for clarity.

× And for me doing my habits when I was a child is very meaningful experience for me.

✓ For me, doing those activities as a child was a very meaningful experience.

The original sentence is wordy and ungrammatical: 'doing my habits' is unnatural and 'is' conflicts with past time. Change to past tense 'was', replace 'habits' with 'activities', and reorder for clarity. Add commas around introductory phrase.

× I think the hobbies that I have since when I was a child, it's that I sleeping and eating until now I'm used to do that, harvest that habits.

✓ I think the hobbies I have had since childhood are sleeping and eating; I am still used to doing those activities.

Mixed tenses and incorrect forms: use present perfect 'have had' to indicate activities continuing from childhood to now. 'It's that I sleeping' is ungrammatical; use noun phrases 'are sleeping and eating'. Use 'used to doing' instead of 'used to do', and replace 'harvest that habits' with 'those activities'.

× I think the same harvest that we have in our family is that the eating, the cooking and the serving.

✓ I think the same habits in our family are eating, cooking, and serving.

'Harvest' is the wrong word; use 'habits'. Article 'the' before list items is unnecessary. Use plural verb 'are' to agree with plural subject 'habits'. Simplify wording for natural expression.

× So for us it is the habits that each of my family member will also have and also that habits is we still practice.

✓ So for us, these are the habits that each family member also has, and we still practice them.

Tense and agreement issues: use present simple 'has' for habitual states. 'Each of my family member' should be 'each family member' and requires singular verb, but here rephrased to 'each family member also has'. Avoid 'will' which implies future. Use pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'habits'.