Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and word choice, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct country/language names, use correct tense and articles, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific example of how language learning helped you.

예시: I enjoy learning languages in my spare time, such as French, Korean and Chinese, because they improve my life skills. For example, when I visited Korea last year, knowing basic Korean helped me ask for directions and order food, which made the trip much easier.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (e.g., 'used to love driving and painting'). Use linking words to explain reasons and be specific about what skills improved. Avoid run-on sentences and correct verb forms and articles.

예시: When I was a child, I used to love painting and driving go-karts. Painting helped me become more creative and patient, while driving go-karts improved my concentration and coordination, and both activities helped me relieve stress.

제안: Respond directly and concisely. Use clearer linking words (e.g., 'however' or 'but') and correct grammar ('that doesn't mean I've lost my interest in...'). Specify how you balance these hobbies and give a short example of when you choose one over another.

예시: Yes, I have continued learning languages since childhood, but I haven't lost interest in painting and driving. For example, I usually study languages during the week, but on weekends I go painting to relax and reduce stress.

제안: Answer directly and use correct plural and verb forms ('family members prefer'). Explain briefly why your hobbies differ and give a specific contrast. Avoid colloquial fillers like 'that's all' and use a complete supporting detail.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. My family prefers watching movies or playing sports, whereas I prefer learning languages and painting because I enjoy creative and solitary activities.

× In my spare time, I usually like to practice new languages like France, Korean, Chinese or even English because it's improve my life skill.

✓ In my spare time, I usually like to practice new languages like French, Korean, Chinese, or even English because they improve my life skills.

Use the adjective form 'French' instead of the country name 'France' when describing a language (preposition/adjective error). Also 'it's' is singular but refers to 'languages' (plural), so use 'they improve' and plural 'skills'. Use commas to separate list items.

× When you go to like another country, you can use it.

✓ When you go to another country, you can use them.

Remove the filler 'like' which is unnecessary here; 'languages' is plural so the pronoun should be 'them'. This corrects incorrect use of a filler and pronoun agreement; also simplifies the sentence.

× When I was a kid I used to love to driving and painting and very creative person and I think painting and driving is improve my skill and is can like erase all of the stress when I was a kid.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to love driving and painting and I was a very creative person, and I think painting and driving improved my skills and could erase all of my stress when I was a kid.

After 'used to' use the base verb or gerund: 'used to love driving' (verb+ -ing form). Add missing verbs 'I was' for 'a very creative person' (sentence structure). Use past tense consistently: 'improved' and modal 'could' for ability in the past. 'My stress' requires possessive pronoun. These changes fix verb form, tense consistency, and missing verbs.

× Like I said, I love to practice new languages, that doesn't mean I like lost my interest of driving and painting.

✓ Like I said, I love practicing new languages; that doesn't mean I have lost my interest in driving and painting.

Use gerund 'practicing' for activities. 'Have lost' expresses the present result of a past change (present perfect). Use preposition 'in' after 'interest' and remove 'my' before 'interest of' which is incorrect.

× Umm sometime I prefer driving and painting too because it's help me relaxing and erase all my stress.

✓ Sometimes I prefer driving and painting too because they help me relax and relieve all my stress.

Use plural subject 'they' to refer to 'driving and painting' and plural verb 'help'. Use base verb 'relax' after 'help', not 'relaxing'. 'Relieve' is a better verb collocation with 'stress'. Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and plural agreement.

× Actually no, because my family member always prefer to watch a movie or play sport but I'm not kind of that person and just love to do my things and that's all.

✓ Actually no, because my family members always prefer to watch movies or play sports, but I'm not that kind of person; I just love to do my own things and that's all.

Use plural 'family members' when referring to more than one person. Match plural verb 'prefer'. Use plural 'movies' and 'sports' for general activities. 'Not that kind of person' is the correct idiom; 'my own things' expresses possession. Punctuation improved for clarity.