Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors (e.g., “so much happy suggest”) and limit to at most five sentences. Use linking words like “for example” or “also.”

예시: I enjoy several hobbies, especially reading books and watching movies. For example, I read fiction to relax and learn new ideas, and I watch films to study storytelling. I also sometimes listen to music when I’m working because it helps me concentrate.

제안: Be direct and specific: state the hobby clearly and give concise supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., “I wasn’t good at drawing, so I preferred coloring”) and avoid filler phrases like “Let me remember.” Use linking words such as “but” or “so” to show contrast.

예시: When I was a child I enjoyed coloring in picture books. I liked filling in the shapes with bright colors, but I wasn’t confident with freehand drawing, so I preferred using coloring books instead.

제안: Clarify the hobby and give a logical reason. Fix sentences so they are grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence: name the hobby and say you’ve kept it since childhood, then explain why you started and why you still enjoy it. Use connectors like “because” and “therefore.”

예시: Yes. I have loved reading since childhood. I often read alone because I didn’t play with friends much, and reading helped me pass the time. I still enjoy books today because they are interesting and help me learn new things.

제안: Give a concise comparison with specific examples and correct grammar (e.g., “each family member has different hobbies” and “my parents enjoy socializing”). Use linking words like “however” or “for example” to structure the answer and avoid vague phrases like “it depends on the character.”

예시: No, my family members have different hobbies. For example, I enjoy reading, while my parents prefer socializing and going out with friends. My siblings each have their own interests, such as sports or video games, so we don’t all share the same hobbies.

× Yes, I have so much happy suggest reading books, writing journalism, watching movies or sometimes listening to music is enough for me.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies such as reading books, writing journalism, watching movies, or sometimes listening to music; these are enough for me.

The phrase 'so much' is incorrect when describing countable items like hobbies; use 'many'. 'happy suggest' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'hobbies such as'. Also separate items with commas and use a clear clause 'these are enough for me' to finish the sentence. Suggestion: use 'many' for countable nouns and connect examples with 'such as' or 'for example'.

× The reason why I have so much hobbies is I like to change my hobbies from time to time so that I can have many experiences.

✓ The reason I have so many hobbies is that I like to change them from time to time so that I can gain a variety of experiences.

Use 'so many' instead of 'so much' with the countable noun 'hobbies'. Also avoid repeating 'hobbies' twice; use a pronoun 'them'. 'Have many experiences' is improved to 'gain a variety of experiences' for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: use 'many' with plural countable nouns and replace repeated nouns with pronouns.

× Let me remember.

✓ Let me think.

'Let me remember' is not idiomatic here; when trying to recall information in a conversation, English speakers say 'Let me think'. Suggestion: use common conversational phrases like 'Let me think' to indicate recalling.

× I really like to draw and color at that time, however, I'm good.

✓ I really liked to draw and color at that time; however, I wasn't good at it.

The sentence refers to childhood, so past tense 'liked' should be used instead of present 'like'. 'I'm good' conflicts with 'at that time' and should be 'I wasn't good at it' to express lack of skill in the past. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently when describing past events and use 'at it' to refer back to drawing.

× I wasn't good at drawing, so I preferred to coloring only, especially the color book.

✓ I wasn't good at drawing, so I preferred coloring only, especially coloring in a coloring book.

After 'preferred' you can follow with a gerund ('coloring') or the infinitive ('to color'), but not 'to coloring'. Also 'the color book' should be 'a coloring book' (article and noun form). Suggestion: use 'preferred coloring' or 'preferred to color' and say 'a coloring book'.

× Here's one hobby that I remember since childhood is spreading because when I was a child I barely play with my friends so I read book at that time to not interrupt my parents.

✓ One hobby I have remembered since childhood is reading, because when I was a child I rarely played with my friends, so I read books to avoid interrupting my parents.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and word choice: 'spreading' is wrong; likely 'reading'. 'I barely play' should be past tense 'I rarely played'. 'Read book' needs plural or article: 'read books'. 'To not interrupt' is awkward; use 'to avoid interrupting'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past for childhood), choose correct verbs (reading, played), and use natural expressions like 'rarely' and 'avoid'.

× However, currently I'm still great books it was it is interesting for me.

✓ However, I'm still into books; they are interesting to me.

Original is ungrammatical. 'Currently I'm still great books' is incorrect; use 'I'm still into books' or 'I still like books'. Maintain present tense for current preferences and use 'they are interesting to me' to refer to books. Suggestion: use natural present-tense expressions for current habits and clear subject references.

× I guess each family members have a different taste of hobby because they're only in the different generation.

✓ I guess each family member has a different taste in hobbies because they are in different generations.

'Each' is singular so use 'member' and singular verb 'has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Taste of hobby' should be 'taste in hobbies'. 'They're only in the different generation' is awkward; say 'they are in different generations' or 'of different generations'. Suggestion: match 'each' with singular noun and verb, and use idiomatic prepositions like 'taste in'.

× So for me, I like to read books, but for my parents they'd like to socializing with their friends, hang out and for my siblings they may have their own hobbies.

✓ So for me, I like to read books, but my parents like socializing with their friends and hanging out, and my siblings may have their own hobbies.

'They'd like to socializing' is incorrect: use 'like socializing' or 'they like to socialize'. Also coordinate verbs correctly: 'like socializing and hanging out'. Ensure parallel structure and remove unnecessary contracted 'they'd'. Suggestion: use base verb after 'like' or gerund 'socializing', and keep parallel verb forms.

× It depends on the character.

✓ It depends on each person's character.

'It depends on the character' is vague; use 'each person's character' to indicate individual differences. This clarifies the subject and uses appropriate possessive form. Suggestion: specify whose character you mean with 'each person's' or 'the individual's'.