Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Tránh tiếng ừ/ờ lặp lại; luyện phản xạ trả lời mạch lạc. (2) Sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng để trả lời trực tiếp, rồi cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. (3) Chú ý ngữ pháp (số nhiều/số ít và thì): “hobbies” vs “hobby”, “reading isn’t my number one hobby”, “I have read as many books as possible” không chính xác. (4) Giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp các hoạt động theo thứ tự hợp lý.

예시: I enjoy several hobbies, such as hiking, golfing and climbing. However, my main hobby is reading — I’ve been reading regularly since I was 15. Reading helps me relax and learn new things, so I try to read at least one book a month.

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn: “Yes, I did” hoặc “When I was a child I enjoyed…”. (2) Sử dụng thì quá khứ chính xác: “we went biking” thay vì “we go biking”. (3) Tránh câu mơ hồ như “I don't know how can I get these strengths” — nếu muốn, diễn đạt rõ: “I was surprised I could manage such long rides.” (4) Giữ mạch nói, giảm tiếng phá vỡ như “umm”.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I loved biking with my friends and we sometimes rode as far as 20 kilometres in one trip. I was proud that I could complete those long rides even though they were challenging.

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Tránh sự không chắc chắn: dùng “Yes” hoặc “Yes, reading has been my hobby since childhood.” (2) Chú ý ngữ pháp và collocation: “it helped me relax” → “it helps me relax”; “enrich my soul” (không cần số nhiều). (3) Tránh các cách diễn đạt mơ hồ/kỳ lạ như “borrow the eye” — thay bằng ví dụ cụ thể về sách/kiến thức. (4) Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thể loại sách, một cuốn sách yêu thích).

예시: Yes, reading is a hobby I have had since childhood. It helps me relax and I learn a lot from books about different cultures and ideas. For example, I enjoy historical novels because they make me understand the past and improve my vocabulary.

제안: Cải thiện: (1) Chú ý ngữ pháp cơ bản: “family” (không thêm s), “my sister loves”, “my brother enjoys”, “I love spending time”. (2) Trả lời rõ ràng và ngắn gọn trước khi giải thích: “No, my hobbies are different from my family’s.” (3) Giải thích lý do ngắn gọn nếu cần, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý: “whereas / while”. (4) Tránh tiếng lắp và câu không hoàn chỉnh.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. For instance, my sister enjoys reading romantic novels while my brother prefers fishing, whereas I prefer staying at home and reading a variety of books.

× But reading isn't actually my number one hobbies.

✓ But reading isn't actually my number one hobby.

'Hobby' should be singular because the phrase 'number one' refers to a single item; use 'hobby' not 'hobbies'. Suggestion: match singular/plural with quantifiers (e.g., 'one', 'each', 'every').

× I read up many a possible ever since.

✓ I have read as many books as possible ever since.

The present perfect tense ('have read') is required to express an action continuing from the past until now. 'Read up many a possible' is ungrammatical; use 'as many...as possible' and the past participle 'read' with auxiliary 'have'. Suggestion: use 'have/has + past participle' for experiences up to now.

× When we go biking, umm, we sometimes go far, like 20 kilometers, uh, back and forth.

✓ When we went biking, we sometimes went far, like 20 kilometers, back and forth.

The question asked about childhood hobbies (past time), so past simple should be used ('went') rather than present simple ('go'). Suggestion: use past simple to describe habitual actions in the past.

× I don't know how can I get these strengths to complete the route.

✓ I don't know how I can get the strength to complete the route.

The embedded question word order should be subject + verb ('I can') not auxiliary before subject ('can I'). 'Strength' should be singular and 'these strengths' is awkward. Suggestion: use correct word order in indirect questions and choose appropriate noun number.

× I love it because it helped me relax.

✓ I love it because it helps me relax.

Mixing present ('I love') with past ('helped') is inconsistent. Use present simple ('helps') to explain a general effect. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when giving reasons or general truths.

× I can learn a lot through books and it's helped me to enrich my souls and emotions.

✓ I can learn a lot from books and they've helped me enrich my soul and my emotions.

Use 'from books' rather than 'through books' for learning. 'It's helped me' is singular while referring to books (plural), so use 'they've helped me'. 'Souls' should be singular 'soul'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agreement with referenced noun and correct singular/plural of abstract nouns.

× I it's like borrow the eye.

✓ It's like borrowing someone else's perspective.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Use a gerund 'borrowing' after 'like' and clarify the metaphor: 'someone else's perspective' or 'seeing through someone else's eyes.' Suggestion: restructure metaphorical expressions for clarity and grammaticality.

× No, I don't know anyone in my families that have the same hobbies as me.

✓ No, I don't know anyone in my family who has the same hobbies as I do.

Use 'family' (collective noun) not 'families' when referring to one's own family. Use 'who has' for singular 'anyone' and prefer 'as I do' or 'as me' (formal: 'as I do'). Suggestion: match pronouns/verbs to singular 'anyone' and use singular collective nouns where appropriate.

× Umm, my sister love reading uh romantic novels.

✓ My sister loves reading romantic novels.

Third person singular subject 'my sister' requires the verb 'loves' with -s. Also remove filler words and extra pauses. Suggestion: add -s for he/she/it in present simple.

× Uh, why My brother enjoy fishing.

✓ My brother enjoys fishing.

Remove extraneous 'why' and correct verb for third person singular: 'enjoys'. The sentence should be simple declarative. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary interjections and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I don't like outdoors activities much.

✓ I don't like outdoor activities much.

Use adjective 'outdoor' to modify 'activities' rather than adverb 'outdoors'. Suggestion: use correct form (adjective) before a noun.

× I love spend time at home with my books.

✓ I love spending time at home with my books.

After 'love' when referring to an activity in general, use the gerund 'spending'. Suggestion: use verb + -ing (gerund) after verbs like 'love', 'like', 'enjoy' when stating preferences.