Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, limit to 3–4 short sentences, and add specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say you enjoy skating and chatting online, explain when and why, and avoid unclear phrases like 'Hoping the Internet'.

예시: I enjoy skating and chatting with my friends online. I usually skate in the park twice a week to relax after school, and I video-chat with friends in the evenings. These activities help me unwind and keep me connected to people.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, and give specific examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons. Keep it concise (max 4 sentences).

예시: Yes, as a child I loved watching cartoons and reading comic books. I especially liked stories with funny characters because they made me laugh. For example, I read comics about a family of animals that always had silly adventures.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and tense. If saying you studied a lot as a child, state it clearly and explain briefly why or how it became a hobby. Avoid repetition and confusion about 'high school'.

예시: Not really. As a child I spent most of my time studying, and I came to enjoy learning new things. For instance, I liked reading science books and doing experiments, which kept me interested throughout school.

제안: Start with a clear statement, correct grammar, and add specific details about shared activities and frequency. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to explain reasons. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: Yes, my family and I share some hobbies. For example, we often watch TV together in the evenings or browse the internet after work. These activities help us relax and spend time together.

× Yes, I have some hobby like skating or chatting with my friends.

✓ Yes, I have some hobbies, like skating or chatting with my friends.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because 'some' and the list indicate multiple activities (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also add a comma after 'hobbies' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural when referring to more than one activity and punctuate lists correctly.

× Hoping the Internet they make me happier and let my head out after school.

✓ I hope the Internet helps me feel happier and lets me clear my head after school.

Original sentence lacks a proper subject-verb structure and uses 'Hoping' incorrectly as a sentence fragment (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'They' incorrectly refers to 'the Internet' which is singular, so use 'it' and adjust verbs to third person singular 'helps' and 'lets' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2). Also 'let my head out' is not idiomatic; use 'clear my head'. Suggestion: use full clauses with correct subject-verb agreement and idiomatic expressions.

× Yes, I knew well try.

✓ Yes, I tried many things when I was a child.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Knew well try' is incorrect word order and verb choice. Use past tense 'tried' to describe childhood activities (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Suggestion: express past habits with 'tried' or 'used to try' and include a time reference.

× I really liked to watch cartoon or reading comic book because I really like the character here.

✓ I really liked watching cartoons or reading comic books because I liked the characters in them.

Use gerund 'watching' after 'liked' or use 'liked to watch' consistently; singular 'cartoon' and 'comic book' should be plural when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type ID 8 and 1). Also tense consistency: use past 'liked' for childhood. 'The character here' is unclear; 'the characters in them' is clearer (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use gerunds or infinitives properly, and pluralize general nouns.

× They are family and always make me laugh and smile.

✓ They were like family and always made me laugh and smile.

When talking about childhood, use past tense 'were' and 'made' for consistency (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'Are family' is present and mismatches context. Also 'like family' is a clearer expression. Suggestion: maintain past tense when describing past situations.

× No, when I'm childhood I always study so my hobby just study and when I have high school it makes me very happy.

✓ No, when I was a child I always studied, so my hobby was studying, and being in high school made me very happy.

Use 'was a child' or 'when I was a child' not 'when I'm childhood' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 11). Use past tense 'studied' and 'was' for past habits (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'When I have high school' is incorrect; use 'being in high school' or 'when I was in high school'. 'It makes me very happy' should be past 'made me very happy' to match timeframe. Suggestion: use correct time expressions and past tense for past situations.

× So I think that my hobby is studying and have high school.

✓ So I think that my hobby was studying and being in high school.

Sentence mixes present 'is' with past context; use 'was' for past (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'Have high school' is ungrammatical; use 'being in high school' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: align verb tense with the time being described and use correct noun phrases for experiences.

× Yes, we are sometimes have some hobby uh, similar to another like uh watching TV or surfing the Internet every day after school or work because it make my mind unwind.

✓ Yes, sometimes we have similar hobbies, like watching TV or surfing the Internet every day after school or work, because it helps my mind unwind.

Remove 'are' which is unnecessary and incorrect here (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Use plural 'hobbies' and 'similar' with 'to one another' or 'similar to each other' if comparing (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 16). 'Make' should be 'helps' to agree with singular 'it' or change to 'help' if referring to 'hobbies' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 2). Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct comparative phrasing.