Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly state your hobby, then give 1–2 clear supporting details using coherent linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and use topic-relevant vocabulary (e.g., fiction, true crime, horror). Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases like “writing books tonight” or “I always profit to read.”

예시: I enjoy reading and writing short stories. In the evenings after work I usually read crime and horror novels because I like the suspense, and I often write my own stories inspired by those books.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood hobby, then add specific supporting details (what you painted, how often, and why). Use correct tense and reduce fillers (uh). Use linking words like "so" or "so I" to make sentences coherent and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I used to love painting as a child. I painted scenes from nature and family portraits every weekend, and I still paint now because it helps me relax and express my creativity.

제안: Be precise about the timeline (since childhood) and explain the connection between painting and fashion design with clear sentences and examples. Avoid awkward phrases like “since my birth” when “since childhood” is sufficient. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and complete your ideas.

예시: Yes, I have painted since childhood and it ties into my interest in fashion design. I use painting to sketch clothing designs and colour schemes, which helps me plan garments more clearly when I actually make them.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then support with a reason or an example. Use correct sentence structure and a linking word (for example, however). Avoid vague phrases like “from where I have an interest.” Instead say how you discovered your interest.

예시: No, my family members don't share my hobby of painting. For example, my parents prefer gardening and my siblings play sports, but I discovered painting at school and kept practising because I enjoyed creating designs.

× Yes, I have a hobby of writing books tonight after finishing up my work.

✓ Yes, I like to write books in the evenings after I finish my work.

The original sentence mixes tense and time expressions incorrectly and uses an odd noun phrase 'a hobby of writing books tonight'. This is a sentence structure issue: 'tonight' conflicts with a general hobby statement. Use a habitual present construction 'I like to write' or 'I have a hobby of writing' and place the time phrase correctly as 'in the evenings' or 'after I finish my work'. Suggestion: say 'I like to write books in the evenings after I finish my work.'

× I always profit to read books about serious in these incidents which happens in people life or some crimes.

✓ I always prefer to read serious books about incidents in people's lives or about crimes.

The student used 'profit to' instead of 'prefer' (word choice) and had incorrect noun phrases and pluralization: 'these incidents which happens in people life' should be 'incidents in people's lives'. This is mainly incorrect use of quantifiers/word choice and pluralization. Correct to 'prefer' and use plural forms and possessive: 'people's lives'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' and plural nouns: 'I always prefer to read serious books about incidents in people's lives or about crimes.'

× I like the horror movie either and I want to always to read the book instead of watching movies.

✓ I also like horror movies, and I always want to read the book instead of watching the movie.

Problems include incorrect article use and word order: 'the horror movie either' is incorrect; use 'also' or 'too' and pluralize 'movies' if talking generally. 'I want to always to read' has extra 'to' and wrong adverb placement. Correct adverb placement is before the main verb or after auxiliary: 'I always want to read'. Suggestion: 'I also like horror movies, and I always want to read the book instead of watching the movie.'

× Yes, I had a hobby of painting.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby of painting when I was a child.

The sentence alone is grammatical, but in response to 'Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?' it is more natural to include the time frame 'when I was a child.' This clarifies tense and context. Suggestion: add the time phrase: 'Yes, I had a hobby of painting when I was a child.'

× I always painting, uh, painted everything which I saw, uh, normally it's not from my childhood.

✓ I was always painting; I painted everything I saw. Normally, it hasn't stopped since my childhood.

Original mixes tenses and uses 'I always painting' (missing auxiliary 'was') and awkward clause 'it's not from my childhood.' Use past continuous 'I was always painting' to describe habitual action in the past, and 'painted everything I saw' for completed actions. To express continuation, use present perfect: 'it hasn't stopped since my childhood.' Suggestion: 'I was always painting; I painted everything I saw. It hasn't stopped since my childhood.'

× I'm still doing the painting like I always love to do painting whatever I saw, whatever I like and I prefer to do every Saturday.

✓ I'm still painting; I have always loved painting whatever I see, and I prefer to paint every Saturday.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the painting', wrong tense 'I always love to do painting' should be present perfect 'have always loved', and 'whatever I saw' should be 'whatever I see' (general present). Also 'do painting' is awkward — use 'paint'. Suggestion: 'I'm still painting; I have always loved painting whatever I see, and I prefer to paint every Saturday.'

× As I mentioned earlier, I have a hobby of painting since my birth.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I have had a hobby of painting since I was born.

When combining 'have' with a starting point 'since', use the present perfect: 'have had' and the correct expression is 'since I was born', not 'since my birth'. Suggestion: 'I have had a hobby of painting since I was born.'

× I always prefer to paint because I have an interest in fashion designing and in fashion designing it's a main part of the painting.

✓ I always prefer to paint because I am interested in fashion design, and painting is a main part of fashion design.

Awkward preposition/phrase: 'interest in fashion designing' is better as 'interested in fashion design'. Repetition and word order 'in fashion designing it's a main part of the painting' is incorrect. Use 'painting is a main part of fashion design.' Suggestion: 'I am interested in fashion design, and painting is a main part of fashion design.'

× So we are painting the designs we are making the dresses to.

✓ So we paint the designs that we use to make the dresses.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and awkward infinitive 'making the dresses to.' Use a relative clause: 'the designs that we use to make the dresses' or 'the designs for the dresses.' Suggestion: 'So we paint the designs that we use to make the dresses.'

× For that we have a good.

✓ That helps us a lot.

Original is fragmented and unclear: 'For that we have a good' is incomplete. Replace with a complete clause expressing benefit, e.g., 'That helps us a lot.' Suggestion: 'That helps us a lot.'

× To be honest, now I'm totally different than my family members.

✓ To be honest, I am quite different from my family members now.

Use 'different from' rather than 'different than'. Word order: place 'now' after the subject or at end for clarity. Also 'totally different' is fine but 'quite different' is more natural. Suggestion: 'I am quite different from my family members now.'

× In my family, no one interested in painting, but I really don't know from where I have an interest in painting.

✓ In my family, no one is interested in painting, but I really don't know where my interest in painting comes from.

Missing auxiliary 'is' for present tense 'no one is interested'. 'From where I have an interest' is unnatural; better: 'where my interest comes from.' Suggestion: 'No one in my family is interested in painting, but I don't know where my interest comes from.'