Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: state your main hobby briefly, use correct tense and avoid odd phrases (e.g. "before going to bed"). Add one supporting detail with a linking word. Watch grammar: use present simple for routines. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I have several hobbies, but I especially enjoy playing basketball with my friends. Besides that, I often watch movies and read books in my spare time, which helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly in past tense and be specific: start with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then give 2–3 examples using past simple and a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like "jumping all over."

예시: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. For example, I used to go biking and hiking with my friends, and I often read adventure books, which kept me very active.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the hobby, use consistent tense, and avoid filler words. Explain briefly why you kept it using a linking word (because/so) and give one specific detail about how often you play now. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have played basketball since I was a child because it keeps me fit and healthy. I still play regularly with friends at weekends, although I don't practice as much as I did when I was younger.

제안: Answer directly and finish the sentence: say whether you share hobbies, then give a reason and a specific example using linking words (because/so). Correct grammar (e.g. "we all love reading"). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, we share the hobby of reading because my parents encouraged it from a young age. For instance, my sister and I often read together in the evenings and sometimes discuss the books afterward.

× Well recently I have been doing a lot of hobbies such as sports.

✓ Well, recently I have been doing a lot of activities such as sports.

The word 'hobbies' is countable but 'doing hobbies' is unnatural; use 'activities' or 'hobbies' with a different structure. Also add a comma after 'Well'. Use present perfect continuous 'have been doing' for recent ongoing actions. Suggestion: say 'I have been doing a lot of activities' or 'I have taken up a lot of hobbies'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I play basketball with my friends before going to bed and also I watch movies in my spare time, read books whenever I feel like.

✓ I play basketball with my friends, watch movies in my spare time, and read books whenever I feel like it.

The original mixes present simple correctly but has punctuation and missing object 'it' after 'feel like'. Also 'before going to bed' is unclear and likely incorrect timing for playing basketball; removed for clarity. Suggestions: use commas and include 'it' after 'feel like'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× I actually have a lot of hobbies, more when I was younger as compared to being a an adult.

✓ I actually had more hobbies when I was younger compared to being an adult.

The sentence mixes present 'have' with past reference 'when I was younger'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also remove duplicated article 'a an'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for time references. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× I do a lot of things when I was younger because I'm more energetic and to name a few, I do biking, hiking, reading, jumping all over.

✓ I did a lot of things when I was younger because I was more energetic; for example, I went biking, hiking, read a lot, and jumped around a lot.

Use past tense 'did' and 'was' to match 'when I was younger'. Activities need correct verbs: 'went biking' not 'do biking'; 'read' (past) and 'jumped around' are natural. 'Jumping all over' is informal and unclear. Suggestion: use past tense and natural collocations for activities. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× It's definitely, I've had this hobby since I was a child and it makes me, uh, fit, healthy and stronger.

✓ Definitely — I've had this hobby since I was a child, and it keeps me fit, healthy, and strong.

Combine clauses properly; 'it makes me ... stronger' should be parallel adjectives 'fit, healthy, and strong'. Use 'keeps me' for ongoing effect. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: maintain parallel adjective form and correct verb for benefit. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× Although I'm more energetic before, so I do it better when I was young, but I'm still young, No, and that would be playing basketball.

✓ Although I was more energetic before and did it better when I was young, I'm still young now, and that hobby is playing basketball.

Mixed tenses: 'I'm more energetic before' should be 'I was more energetic before'; 'do it better when I was young' should be 'did it better'. Remove awkward 'No'. Ensure logical clause connectors: use 'although' with past tense and then contrast with present. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid filler words. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× Umm yeah, uh, we all love.

✓ Yes, we all enjoy it.

'We all love' is incomplete without an object. Add 'it' or specify what is loved. Remove filler sounds 'umm uh'. Suggestion: always include the object of 'love' or 'enjoy'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× We bring books and my parents were the ones who taught me to always read books in order for me to sharpen my mind and that's why me and my sister always read books together and read books individually whenever.

✓ We read books, and my parents were the ones who taught me to always read so I could sharpen my mind. That's why my sister and I always read together and also read on our own.

Use consistent past tense 'were the ones who taught me' and adjust purpose clause to 'so I could' rather than 'in order for me to'. 'Me and my sister' should be 'my sister and I'. Avoid repeating 'read books' too often; streamline wording. The final 'whenever' is incomplete; specify 'on our own' or 'whenever we have time'. Suggestion: use correct pronoun order, smoother purpose clause, and complete time expressions. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22