Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct grammar: say "I have several hobbies" or "My hobbies are..." Keep it concise (max 4–5 short sentences). Group similar hobbies and use linking words (for example, "and", "also", "besides") to make the answer coherent. Avoid filler words ("umm", repetition) and incorrect phrases like "any hobbies" or "play any kind of instruments."

예시: I have several hobbies. I enjoy singing and composing songs, and I also play the guitar and other instruments. Besides music, I like hiking and riding motorcycles. I also enjoy trying new foods when I travel.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense: say "Yes, they were similar to now" or "Yes, I had similar hobbies as a child." Use linking words to explain briefly why or give one example. Avoid awkward phrases such as "my habits right now also."

예시: Yes, my hobbies were similar when I was a child. For example, I loved singing and drawing as a child, and I still enjoy singing today. Because I started young, music feels natural to me.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations: say "Yes, singing" and then give one or two specific supporting details (when, how often, or why). Keep sentences short and correct tenses. For the drawing comment, be concise and confident: ‘‘I also like drawing, though I am still improving."

예시: Yes, singing is a hobby I've had since childhood. I used to sing in school performances and I still practice every week to improve. I also enjoy drawing, though I am still learning and practicing.

제안: Be concise and avoid contradiction. Start with a clear statement: "Yes, some family members share my hobbies." Then give a brief example and a linking phrase such as "however" to contrast skill level. Avoid repeating and using negative mixed messages ("not that good" then "they can't sing").

예시: Yes, several family members enjoy singing too. My parents and some relatives like to sing at family gatherings; however, they are amateur singers and sing more for fun than professionally.

× Yes, I have any hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have some hobbies.

'Any' is typically used in negative sentences and questions; in affirmative statements use 'some' for unspecified plural items. Replace 'any' with 'some' to be grammatically correct.

× I can sing, umm, I compose a song, I play guitar, I play any kind of instruments.

✓ I can sing, I compose songs, I play the guitar, and I play different kinds of instruments.

Use plural for general activities (compose songs) and include the definite article with musical instruments when speaking generally ('the guitar' or simply 'guitar' is acceptable, but 'play any kind of instruments' is incorrect). Replace 'any kind of instruments' with 'different kinds of instruments' or 'various instruments'.

× I love to eat, I love to go, I love to to hike and do motorcycles.

✓ I love to eat, I love to travel, I enjoy hiking, and I like riding motorcycles.

Use parallel verb forms and correct collocations: 'go' is vague—replace with 'travel'; 'do motorcycles' is incorrect—use 'ride motorcycles'. Also remove duplicate 'to' and make verbs parallel ('love'/'enjoy'/'like').

× Yes I think it just the same like before.

✓ Yes, I think it is just the same as before.

Missing verb 'is' for the clause; use 'the same as' not 'the same like'. Ensure correct present tense 'think' with appropriate linking verb 'is'.

× The several hobbies that I do have in my childhood is my habits right now also.

✓ The various hobbies that I had in my childhood are my habits now as well.

Subject 'hobbies' is plural so use plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Use past tense 'had' for childhood, and rephrase 'right now also' to 'now as well' for natural order.

× Umm yes, umm, maybe like singing. I, I love to sing when I was younger and right now I love to sing also I love to to draw but that's I'm not that good enough to draw, but I I can draw.

✓ Yes, maybe singing. I loved to sing when I was younger, and I still love to sing now. I also like to draw, although I'm not that good at drawing, but I can draw.

Mix of tenses: use past tense 'loved' for past habit and present 'still love' for current. Fix repetition and duplicate 'to'. Use 'good at drawing' rather than 'good enough to draw.' Clean up redundancy.

× Umm yes, my parents can sing also my relatives can sing and but they are not that good enough to sing.

✓ Yes, my parents can sing, and my relatives can sing too, but they are not very good at it.

Remove unnecessary 'and' before 'but'; use 'too' for addition. Use 'good at it' to refer back to singing. 'Can sing' is fine but phrasing improved for fluency.

× But they Can't Sing.

✓ But they can't sing very well.

Capitalization error and abrupt statement; add 'very well' to soften and make consistent with previous sentence. Contractions should be lowercase 'can't' in sentence.

× Yes, although they are not very skilled enough but they can sing.

✓ Yes, although they are not very skilled, they can still sing.

Do not use both 'although' and 'but' together; choose one. 'Skilled enough' is redundant with 'not'; use 'not very skilled' and add 'still' to indicate ability despite limited skill.