Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, conciseness and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say what kind of photography you like and why, and give one brief example.

예시: Yes, I have a hobby: photography. I enjoy taking portraits and street photos because they capture people's emotions and everyday life. For example, last month I photographed a local market and was able to capture lively expressions on vendors' faces.

제안: Clarify meaning, correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize into a topic sentence plus supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and avoid unclear words. Mention the hobby, when you learned it, and one short detail about the experience.

예시: Yes, I had a hobby as a child: playing the violin. I started lessons in middle school because my parents enrolled me, and I practiced for an hour every day to improve my technique.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly why the childhood hobby stopped. Use clear past and present tenses and avoid vague phrases. Offer one specific reason and one example of a current hobby to show change.

예시: Not really — I don't have a hobby that has lasted since childhood. As I grew older my schedule became busier with school and work, so I stopped practicing the violin regularly. Now I prefer photography because it fits my current routine better.

제안: Answer directly about current situation, correct grammar and word choice, and present one clear supporting detail. Mention who in your family shared the hobby and give a brief consequence or memory to make it specific.

예시: Yes, when I was a child several members of my family played the violin. My parents and both my older and younger brothers learned it too, so we often practiced together and sometimes performed at family gatherings.

× Yes, I do have hobbies. I believe that everybody have hobbies since even they don't know that it's a hobby but even might have that.

✓ Yes, I do have hobbies. I believe that everybody has hobbies even if they don't know it's a hobby.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun clarity: 'everybody' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 1). 'Since even they don't know that it's a hobby but even might have that' is unclear and uses an incorrect pronoun reference; simplify to 'even if they don't know it's a hobby' for clarity and correct conditional structure.

× So for me my hobbies is take photography is take a photo I love and I take a photograph of things or people and.

✓ For me, my hobby is photography. I love taking photographs of things or people.

Plural/singular and verb form errors: 'hobbies is' should be 'hobby is' because the sentence refers to a single activity (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 27). 'Take photography' is ungrammatical; use the noun 'photography' or the gerund 'taking photographs.' End the sentence clearly without trailing 'and.' Use commas to separate introductory phrase.

× Yes I do have happy when I was shy my hobbies when I was a child paying welding because when I was in middle school my parents let uh let me learn violin so that's why and I need to pay all day.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child. My hobby was playing the violin because when I was in middle school my parents let me learn the violin, so I practiced all day.

Tense and word choice errors: The student mixes present and past incorrectly; childhood hobbies should be in past tense 'had' and 'was playing' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 and 6). 'Paying welding' is incorrect word choice — likely meant 'playing violin.' 'Need to pay all day' should be 'practiced all day.' Also fix pronoun/auxiliary repetition ('let uh let me') and add articles ('the violin').

× Oh that's quite hard, I think it's since I hood I don't have that anymore because when I grow up and like enrollment and my routine is chill so that's why my hobbies also change respectively.

✓ Oh that's quite hard. I don't have that anymore because when I grew up and started working (or enrolling in university), my routine became more relaxed, so my hobbies changed accordingly.

Tense and word choice: The student mixes present and past; refer to past change with past tense 'grew up' and 'started' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 5). 'Since I hood' is unclear; likely 'since childhood' or 'since I was young' — here the meaning is better expressed by stating change after growing up. 'Enrollment' is the wrong noun for starting studies; choose 'starting school' or 'enrolling in university.' 'Chill' is informal; use 'more relaxed.' 'Respectively' is misused; use 'accordingly' or 'as a result.'

× When I was a child, I have the same hobby, it was a violin.

✓ When I was a child, I had the same hobby: the violin.

Tense and article/pronoun consistency: Use past tense 'had' for childhood (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'It was a violin' is awkward; use 'the violin' with a colon or rephrase. Also use the definite article 'the' before an instrument when referring generally.

× So there's like a quite funny thing that all of my family member, my old B, my older brother and my younger brothers, all of them can parents.

✓ There's a funny thing: all of my family members — my older brother and my younger brothers — can play the violin.

Grammar and structure: Many errors here — pluralization 'family member' should be 'family members' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). 'My old B' is unclear; assume 'my older brother.' 'Can parents' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'can play' or 'are players.' Reorganize sentence for clarity and correct verb phrase 'can play the violin.' Use dashes or commas to set off the list.

× So we are kinda like the violinist family.

✓ So we are kind of a family of violinists.

Register and adjective use: 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of' or 'a family of.' 'The violinist family' is awkward in English; 'a family of violinists' is natural. Also use plural 'violinists' when referring to multiple people (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 1).