Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two or three specific hobbies with brief reasons or frequency. Avoid unclear phrases like "I have such AI." Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words (for example, "also", "and").

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing basketball and football because they keep me fit, and I often go cycling at weekends to relax. I also like walking in the forest for fresh air, and I usually play tennis with my wife once or twice a week.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then add two specific supporting details: your role in the team and how long or how frequently you played. Avoid repetitive phrasing and grammar errors (e.g. "When I was a child"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain significance.

예시: When I was a child, my main hobby was playing basketball. I played for my school team for several years, often training three times a week, which helped me improve a lot. Because of that experience, I still play basketball regularly today.

제안: This answer is fairly clear but can be tightened and made more natural. Start with a concise statement about how long you've played, then add specific details (age started, team experience, current routine). Use correct tenses and linkers like "since" and "now".

예시: Yes — I've played basketball for about 15 years. I started when I was six and used to play on my school team. Now I'm not on a team, but I play pickup games with friends a few times a week.

제안: Clarify relationships and facts and correct factual errors (father cannot be 15). Give a clear topic sentence, then explain similarities and differences with specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and incorrect vocabulary ("physical conditions", "playing basket").

예시: No, my hobbies are different from most of my family. My mother prefers quiet activities and isn't interested in sports, while my father used to enjoy basketball but can no longer play because of health problems. Therefore I usually play sports with friends rather than family.

× Yes, I have such AI, have a lot of hobbies such as playing basketball, playing football, riding a cycle and also walking in the forest.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, such as playing basketball, playing football, riding a bicycle, and walking in the forest.

Original uses 'such AI' which is incorrect and unclear (incorrect pronoun/determiner). Also 'have a lot of hobbies' should be 'I have many hobbies' for natural English; 'riding a cycle' is unnatural — use 'riding a bicycle'. Use commas and 'and' before last item in a list for clarity.

× And generally I prefer playing tennis with my wife.

✓ Generally, I prefer playing tennis with my wife.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary; remove 'And'. Add a comma after 'Generally' for natural adverb placement.

× When was when I was a child, my biggest hobby was playing basketball.

✓ When I was a child, my biggest hobby was playing basketball.

Phrase 'When was when I was a child' is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove the extra 'was' to create a correct time clause: 'When I was a child'. This fixes sentence structure.

× I was in the school team and at that time period I was playing basketball very well and also now still I am continue playing basketball.

✓ I was on the school team, and at that time I played basketball very well; even now I still continue playing basketball.

Use 'on the school team' not 'in the school team'. 'At that time period' is wordy — 'at that time' suffices. Use simple past 'played' to describe past ability. 'Now still I am continue playing' is ungrammatical; change to 'even now I still continue playing' or 'I still play'.

× Yes, I have played basketball for around 15 years.

✓ Yes, I have been playing basketball for around 15 years.

When indicating an activity started in the past and continuing to the present, use present perfect continuous ('have been playing') rather than present perfect simple ('have played') for natural emphasis on duration and ongoing action.

× I started playing basketball when I was approximately 6 years old.

✓ I started playing basketball when I was approximately 6 years old.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included to acknowledge correctness and avoid omitting expected items.)

× At that time period I was at school team and now I am not in a team but I play basketball with my friends in my free times.

✓ At that time I was on the school team, and now I am not on a team, but I play basketball with my friends in my free time.

Use 'on the school team' rather than 'at school team'. 'Not in a team' -> 'not on a team'. 'Free times' is incorrect; use the uncountable 'free time'. Remove 'period' after 'time' which is redundant.

× No, I don't have a hobby like I family members because my mother doesn't like playing basketball.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because my mother doesn't like playing basketball.

'Like I family members' is incorrect pronoun and word order. Use comparative structure 'the same hobbies as my family members' to express similarity.

× My father likes playing basketball, but unfortunately he's not able to play basketball due to the physical conditions.

✓ My father likes playing basketball, but unfortunately he is not able to play because of his physical condition.

'He's' expanded to 'he is' is fine; 'due to the physical conditions' is awkward and vague. Use 'because of his physical condition' for natural phrasing. Avoid repeating 'play basketball' twice.

× He's around 15 years old and now he's quite, quite old for playing basket.

✓ He is not around 15 years old; he is quite old to play basketball.

Sentence contains contradictory and incorrect age information (likely meant '75' or similar). 'Around 15 years old' conflicts with 'quite old'. Also 'playing basket' is incorrect — use 'play basketball'. If intended age is different, replace '15' with correct number. I corrected to remove the incorrect age and made wording natural: 'he is quite old to play basketball'. If a specific age is intended, use that number and 'years old'.