Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'we have fun', 'we would like to be like them') and avoid filler words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it’s a fun way to relax. For example, we often talk about K-pop artists and their style, and sometimes discuss how we would like to emulate their looks.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then a specific detail or example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'my friends like it' and 'we often talk about the members, especially...'). Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences; mention a specific topic or member name to be concrete.

예시: I usually chat about K-pop music because it’s very popular at my school. For instance, we often discuss the members of BTS, share videos, and talk about their latest performances.

제안: Answer directly: state your preference, then give a brief reason. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases. Use correct expressions: 'I prefer to talk one-on-one' and 'I'm an introverted person, so I find large groups difficult.' Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

예시: I prefer talking with one friend rather than in a group because I’m introverted and feel more comfortable in private conversations.

제안: State your preference clearly, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'for example'). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing like 'I don't select the time on the place'.

예시: I prefer communicating via social media because I can message people anytime and it’s convenient when I’m busy. For example, I can quickly send a question to a friend while I’m doing homework.

제안: Clarify what you mean by 'argue' versus 'discuss'. Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason or example. Use correct grammar and link ideas (e.g., 'we often discuss social issues such as global warming because summers have become hotter').

예시: Yes, we often discuss social issues rather than argue. For example, we talk about global warming because summers in Japan have become hotter and we worry about heat-related problems.

× I like chatting with my friends because I can have we can have make fun by talking.

✓ I like chatting with my friends because we can have fun by talking.

The sentence contains extra verbs and incorrect verb forms ('have we can have make fun'). The intended meaning is 'we can have fun'. Use 'have fun' (verb + noun) and remove redundant words. Ensure only one modal + base verb form appears if needed: 'we can have fun'.

× For example, I enjoy talking about K pop artists because we we like we would like to be like them.

✓ For example, I enjoy talking about K-pop artists because we would like to be like them.

There are repeated pronouns ('we we like we would like') and inconsistent tense/modal usage. Remove duplicates and use a single modal 'would like' to express desire. Also add a hyphen in 'K-pop' for standard formatting.

× I mean, I will I would we would like to be beautiful.

✓ I mean, we would like to be beautiful.

Multiple subject phrases ('I will I would we would') are redundant and confusing. Choose the correct subject 'we' and modal 'would like' to express a general wish. Remove extra words to form a clear clause.

× My friends likes it is known by many people, especially in Korea.

✓ My friends like it; it is known by many people, especially in Korea.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' is plural, so use 'like' instead of 'likes'. The original also run together two clauses; separate them with a semicolon or period. Maintain present simple for general facts.

× So we often talk about the member one of the member her name is.

✓ So we often talk about a member; her name is ...

The sentence is incomplete and awkward ('the member one of the member her name is'). Rephrase to 'a member' and provide a complete clause 'her name is ...' If unable to recall the name, say 'one member' or 'a member of the group.'

× I've lived a dog alone, a dog a friend because I'm not good at talking with many number of people and I I can't.

✓ I prefer to have one dog or one close friend because I'm not good at talking with many people, and I can't handle large groups.

The original mixes unrelated ideas and has repetitions ('a dog alone, a dog a friend', 'I I can't'). Clarify meaning: indicate preference for one-on-one interactions. Use 'many people' (not 'many number of people') and a clear verb 'handle' for capability.

× I'm introverted person so I'm not good at talking in front of many people.

✓ I'm an introverted person, so I'm not good at talking in front of many people.

Missing article before 'introverted person' — use 'an'. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' when connecting two independent clauses.

× I prefer to talk with on social media because I can talk with anyone and anytime so I don't select the time on the place to talk and I can send a message quickly.

✓ I prefer to talk on social media because I can talk with anyone at any time, so I don't have to choose a specific time or place to talk, and I can send messages quickly.

Incorrect prepositions: use 'on social media' (not 'with on') and 'at any time' (not 'anytime' in this context) or 'anytime' is acceptable informally. Also 'select the time on the place' is incorrect; use 'choose a specific time or place'. Make verbs consistent: 'don't have to choose'.

× So it is very useful since I have to do I have to some things every day so it is very useful.

✓ It is very useful since I have some things to do every day.

Redundant repetition ('I have to do I have to some things', 'so it is very useful' repeated). Simplify to a single clear clause: 'I have some things to do every day' and state usefulness once.

× Yes, I often talk about the social problems such as global warming, because in this century the summer in Japan has the temperature has been increasing and we are afraid to be damaged by the high temperature.

✓ Yes, I often talk about social problems such as global warming, because summers in Japan have been getting hotter in this century, and we are afraid of damage from high temperatures.

Awkward phrasing and tense issues: 'the summer in Japan has the temperature has been increasing' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect progressive 'have been getting hotter' to indicate a trend. Use plural 'summers' and 'high temperatures'. Use 'afraid of damage' rather than 'afraid to be damaged by'.