Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and add a concise specific example. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., "whom I am with every day" → "who I am with every day") and avoid filler phrases. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because they are the people I spend most of my time with and help me learn new things. For instance, last week we discussed a documentary about climate change and I learned several useful facts about recycling.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and organize the supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases ("When I'm in my parents here in school"). Be specific about one or two frequent topics rather than listing many ideas unclearly.

예시: At school we usually talk about our courses and professors. For example, we often discuss assignment deadlines and teaching styles, and sometimes plan what to do after class, such as studying together or grabbing a snack.

제안: Good structure and clear idea. Improve naturalness by smoothing wording and reducing repetition. Use a concise linking phrase to contrast the two situations.

예시: I’m fine with both, but it depends on my mood. If I have lots of energy, I enjoy group chats for the lively atmosphere; however, when I’m tired or feeling down, I prefer a one-on-one conversation with a close friend.

제안: Clarify opening phrase (use "It depends"), avoid repetition, and give a concise reasoned contrast with a specific example. Use linking words like "for example" and "however" to organize the response.

예시: It depends on the situation. For example, I prefer face-to-face meetings for group work because decisions are made faster and misunderstandings are avoided; however, I use social media for casual or asynchronous chat when people have different schedules.

제안: Good content and clear position. Improve naturalness by tightening sentences and using a specific example to illustrate a serious reason for arguing. Avoid vague phrases like "having a stand."

예시: I rarely argue with friends, but when I do it’s because the issue is important to me. For instance, I once argued with a friend about cheating on a group project because I wanted everyone to be fair and contribute equally.

× Yes I I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

The original contains a repeated word 'I' causing redundancy and an awkward pause. Remove the duplicate to produce a grammatically correct and fluent response. Also add a comma after 'Yes' to reflect natural spoken punctuation.

× friends are whom I am with everyday and I believe in the saying no man is an island.

✓ friends are whom I am with every day and I believe in the saying 'no man is an island'.

'Everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning ordinary; the correct adverbial phrase is 'every day' (two words). Also punctuation around the proverb improves clarity. The sentence structure is otherwise acceptable.

× And so yes I like chatting with friends and they also help me to broaden my knowledge about something or any specific topic.

✓ And so, yes, I like chatting with friends, and they also help me broaden my knowledge about various topics.

'Something or any specific topic' is vague and unidiomatic. Replace with 'various topics' for clarity. Remove the infinitival 'to' before 'broaden' when 'help' is used (help + base verb is common). Add commas for natural pauses.

× When I'm in my parents here in school, we usually chat about our professors, the subjects we are taking, our thoughts on how the professors are actually teaching us, and our random thoughts on what are we gonna do after the class.

✓ When I'm with my parents here at school, we usually chat about our professors, the subjects we are taking, our thoughts on how the professors are teaching us, and our random ideas about what we are going to do after class.

'In my parents' is incorrect; use 'with my parents' or 'at my parents' house'. 'Here in school' conflicts with 'parents'—likely 'with my parents here at school'. Avoid informal 'gonna' in formal responses; use 'going to'. 'After the class' should be 'after class' for general reference. Simplify 'thoughts on how the professors are actually teaching us' to 'thoughts on how the professors are teaching us.'

× Actually I'm OK with both, but sometimes it depends on my mood.

✓ Actually, I'm OK with both, but sometimes it depends on my mood.

This sentence only needed punctuation: add a comma after 'Actually' to reflect natural speech pause. No grammatical issue beyond that.

× If I still have the energy to talk with a lot of people then I would prefer to chat with a group of people.

✓ If I still have the energy to talk with a lot of people, then I prefer to chat with a group of people.

Use present simple in the result clause (prefer) when the condition is realistic and general. Using 'would' suggests a hypothetical; present 'prefer' matches the real conditional. Add a comma after the subordinate clause.

× But then if I'm tired or I'm feeling down, I would prefer to talk with only one friend.

✓ But if I'm tired or feeling down, I prefer to talk with only one friend.

Same reasoning: for real situations use present 'prefer' rather than 'would prefer'. Also omit the second 'I'm' before 'feeling' for conciseness.

× Permit depends on what the topic is all about because if for example, we have a group work, I would prefer to talk face to face because things are done quickly.

✓ It depends on the topic: for example, if we have group work, I prefer to talk face to face because things get done more quickly.

'Permit' is incorrect — use 'It' or 'It depends'. 'Group work' is the correct term. Use 'prefer' for real situations instead of 'would prefer'. 'Things are done quickly' is grammatically okay but 'things get done more quickly' is more natural.

× While if social media we we have our own distractions and we have our own we have our own time.

✓ On social media, we have many distractions and our own schedules, so responses can be delayed.

The original has repetition ('we we', 'we have our own' repeated) and awkward structure. Rephrase to a clear, concise sentence. 'On social media' begins the clause; explain the consequence (delayed responses) to make the idea complete.

× I don't usually argue with friends, but if I do, I'm very sure that the reason is acceptable because I am a person who doesn't actually want to argue over small things.

✓ I don't usually argue with friends, but if I do, I'm very sure the reason is acceptable because I'm someone who doesn't want to argue over small things.

Change 'a person who' to 'someone who' for naturalness; contractions are acceptable. No major grammatical number error, but wording improved for fluency.

× So if I do argue with someone, I think that I am really having a stand.

✓ So if I do argue with someone, I think I am firmly taking a stand.

'Having a stand' is unidiomatic. Use 'taking a stand' or 'standing my ground'. 'Firmly' clarifies the speaker's conviction. This fixes idiom and improves clarity.