Chatting— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce filler words (uh), keep sentences concise, and include one specific example to make the answer more concrete. Aim for 2–3 clear sentences: a direct topic sentence plus one supporting detail with a short example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it brings me a lot of joy. For example, last weekend we reminisced about a trip we took together, which made me laugh and feel closer to them.

제안: Start with a direct, natural phrasing (I usually talk about...), avoid modal awkwardness (‘I should chat’), and add a specific detail or example showing how you support each other.

예시: I usually talk about our aspirations and goals, such as career plans or study projects. For instance, we often discuss job applications and give each other feedback when one of us is preparing for an interview.

제안: Use natural collocations (‘deeper’ not ‘more deep’) and provide a brief reason with a specific example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct minor grammar (that → which/making).

예시: I prefer chatting with just one friend because conversations tend to be deeper and more personal. For example, when I talk one-on-one I can discuss sensitive topics without worrying about others listening.

제안: Eliminate fillers, use correct pronouns (their), and be more specific about benefits of face-to-face communication. Give one concise example of what you notice or do in person.

예시: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read their facial expressions and body language. For example, when we meet I can tell if a friend is upset and offer comfort immediately, which is harder online.

제안: Avoid fillers and redundant phrases. Offer a brief explanation of how you handle disagreements and give a short example to demonstrate maturity and language range.

예시: I rarely argue with friends because I try to stay calm and resolve conflicts by talking things through. For example, when we disagree about plans, I suggest compromises and we discuss pros and cons until we reach an agreement.

× I like chatting with friends because it, uh, brings me a lot of, uh, joy and, uh, we can share memories with each other. So it, uh, it's such an enriching experience.

✓ I like chatting with friends because it brings me a lot of joy and we can share memories with each other, so it's such an enriching experience.

Unnecessary filler words 'uh' interrupt the sentence flow; removing them clarifies the present participle 'chatting' used correctly. Also combine clauses with commas to improve sentence structure and fluency. Suggestion: avoid fillers and join related clauses for clarity.

× I should chat about our own aspirations and goals. We support each other in complicated and uncomfortable situations.

✓ I usually chat about our aspirations and goals. We support each other in complicated and uncomfortable situations.

'Should' implies obligation, which doesn't fit the intended meaning of habitual action; use 'usually' for routine. 'Our own' is redundant; 'our' suffices. Suggestion: use adverbs of frequency (usually/often) to describe habits.

× I prefer chatting with only one friend because it makes communication more deep and I actually don't like noisy friend groups that makes me feel uncomfortable.

✓ I prefer chatting with only one friend because it makes communication deeper, and I actually don't like noisy friend groups that make me feel uncomfortable.

'More deep' is incorrect comparative form; use adverb/adjective 'deeper' for comparative. Subject-verb agreement error in 'groups that makes' corrected to 'groups that make' (also relates to ID27 but primary issue requested here is adjective/adverb). Suggestion: use proper comparative ('deeper') and check verb agreement with plural subjects.

× I prefer communicating face to face because when I chat with my friend, uh, offline, I can, uh, watch, uh, your or his real emotions and we can also walk together and something like this.

✓ I prefer communicating face to face because when I chat with my friend offline, I can see his real emotions, and we can also walk together or do things like that.

Pronoun 'your or his' is incorrect and inconsistent; use the correct third-person possessive 'his' or 'their' depending on gender. 'Watch emotions' is unnatural; use 'see emotions'. 'Something like this' should be 'things like that' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: choose the correct pronoun and use natural verb collocations (see emotions; do things like that).

× I'm a really peaceful person, so I try to avoid arguments. So, uh, they happen quite, uh, rarely.

✓ I'm a really peaceful person, so I try to avoid arguments. So, they happen quite rarely.

Placement of adverb 'rarely' should follow the auxiliary or verb; 'quite rarely' is correct but filler 'uh' removed. Also avoid repeating 'so' unnecessarily. Suggestion: remove fillers and place adverbs correctly (e.g., 'they happen quite rarely' or 'they rarely happen').