Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical errors; use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'during weekdays' twice) and refine vocabulary (use 'devices' instead of 'gadgets', 'submitted' not 'submit').

예시: Yes. Students are not allowed to use electronic devices on weekdays. We hand our phones to the dormitory deans, who keep them securely until Sunday, which helps us focus on studies.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrasing like 'execute goodness and kindness'; choose concrete benefits (discipline, safety, fairness). Use linking words (however, for example).

예시: Yes, I think more rules can help students develop discipline and maintain safety. For example, strict study schedules can reduce distractions and improve exam performance. However, rules should be fair so they do not stifle creativity.

제안: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g., 'Yes, I had a dedicated...'), then add a specific example of how the teacher was dedicated. Use linking words ('for example', 'in particular').

예시: Yes, I had a very dedicated science teacher in high school. For example, he stayed after class to supervise our experiments and helped us plan science fair projects, which greatly improved our results.

제안: Give a direct preference and support it with concrete, relevant reasons. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'executes students ability'; instead say 'helps students learn to follow rules' and mention possible limits or balance.

예시: I prefer more rules because they teach students responsibility and create a safe learning environment. For instance, punctuality rules encourage time management, though there should also be flexibility for creativity.

제안: Use correct tense and smoother linking: start with 'Yes' and then give one specific detail about strictness and one about friendliness. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes. My 7th-grade English teacher was very strict — she insisted we speak only English in class. Outside lessons she was friendly and approachable, which made it easier to ask for help.

제안: State your position clearly, then give two specific consequences with linking words. Avoid repetition ('they would... they would') and tighten phrasing.

예시: No. Without rules, students might skip lessons and cheat on exams, which would harm learning. In short, rules are necessary to ensure fairness and a productive classroom.

× One rule at my school is we are not allowed to have gadgets during weekdays.

✓ One rule at my school is that we are not allowed to have gadgets during weekdays.

A subordinating conjunction 'that' is needed to introduce the content of 'One rule is...'. Omitting it makes the sentence less grammatical and can cause confusion. Suggestion: include 'that' after 'is' when stating a rule or fact (e.g., 'One rule is that students must...').

× We're only able to use it during Sundays.

✓ We're only able to use them on Sundays.

'Gadgets' is plural, so the pronoun must be 'them', not 'it'. Also, use the preposition 'on' with days and the plural 'Sundays' for a habitual action. Suggestion: match pronoun number to its antecedent and use 'on' for days (e.g., 'on Mondays').

× So during the weekdays we submit it to our dormitory Deans and they lock it inside a secret hall.

✓ So during the weekdays we submit them to our dormitory deans and they lock them in a storage room.

Pronoun must agree in number with 'gadgets' (them). 'Deans' should be lowercased unless a title and 'dormitory deans' is a common noun. 'Lock it inside a secret hall' is awkward: 'lock them in a storage room' uses 'in' for enclosed spaces and a more natural noun. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number agreement and choose appropriate prepositions for location ('in' for enclosed places).

× Yes, I believe more rules means more responsibilities for the administration as well as the students alike.

✓ Yes, I believe more rules mean more responsibilities for the administration as well as the students.

The subject 'more rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'mean', not 'means'. Also 'alike' is redundant after 'as well as the students'. Suggestion: match verb number to the subject and avoid redundant words ('as well as' or 'alike', not both).

× Having rules is very important to execute goodness and kindness.

✓ Having rules is very important for encouraging good behavior and kindness.

'Execute goodness' is not natural English; use 'encourage' with 'good behavior' or 'virtue'. Also 'for encouraging' fits purpose. Suggestion: choose collocations common in English (encourage + noun) and use accurate nouns ('good behavior' instead of 'goodness').

× I do. My science teacher in a high school is very dedicated, especially helping his students achieve their goals.

✓ I do. My science teacher in high school was very dedicated, especially in helping his students achieve their goals.

If referring to a past teacher, use past tense 'was'. If current, keep present but 'in a high school' is awkward; 'in high school' is idiomatic. Also add 'in' before 'helping' to show manner. Suggestion: confirm whether teacher is current or past and use consistent tense; use idiomatic prepositions ('in high school').

× He helped us with a lot of our projects and we're very grateful for that teacher.

✓ He helped us with many of our projects, and we were very grateful to that teacher.

Tense should match previous sentence (past: 'helped' → 'were'). 'A lot of our projects' is informal; 'many of our projects' is more appropriate. 'Grateful to' is the usual preposition for a person. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense across related sentences and use appropriate prepositions with 'grateful'.

× I think more rules would be fine for the reason that it executes students ability to follow those rules.

✓ I think more rules would be fine because they develop students' ability to follow those rules.

'It executes students ability' is ungrammatical: 'execute' is wrong verb and 'students' needs possessive apostrophe. Use 'develop' or 'help develop' and plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'rules'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations ('develop ability') and mark possession correctly (students' ability).

× It also creates space for them to be obedient.

✓ It also encourages them to be obedient.

'Creates space for them to be obedient' is awkward; 'encourages' better conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: use verbs that naturally collocate with behavior change (encourage, promote, foster).

× I did, my English teacher in 7th grade was so strict that during our class we need to speak only English, but outside she's very friendly and very approachable.

✓ I did. My English teacher in seventh grade was so strict that during our class we had to speak only English, but outside she was very friendly and very approachable.

Run-on sentence: split into two. Use past tense consistently ('was', 'had to', 'was') because referring to past experience. 'Need to' is present; use 'had to' or 'we were required to'. Spell out numbers in formal speech ('seventh'). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid run-on sentences; use past obligation forms ('had to').

× No, Without rules, students would be able to do anything they want.

✓ No. Without rules, students would be able to do anything they wanted.

Capitalization and punctuation: start a new sentence after 'No.' Use past form 'wanted' to match the conditional 'would be'. Suggestion: punctuate responses properly and use backshifted verbs in unreal conditional statements ('would... wanted').

× They would cheat, they would cut class and those things that students do.

✓ They would cheat, cut class, and do other things that students do.

Repetition of 'they would' is unnecessary; parallel structure improves readability. Use 'do other things' instead of awkward 'those things'. Suggestion: use parallel lists and concise phrasing in conditional clauses.