Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific examples. Use correct verb forms and reduce redundancy. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

예시: Yes, there are several important rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to smoke or run in the hallways, and we are expected to be polite to both teachers and classmates. These rules help keep everyone safe and respectful.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Use simple, correct phrases rather than vague expressions. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I think students can benefit from some additional rules because rules teach discipline and good habits. For example, a rule about homework deadlines can help students manage time and become more responsible.

제안: Start with a clear statement saying whether you have. Then describe one teacher briefly with specific behaviors that show dedication. Avoid unclear metaphors and incomplete sentences; use linking words like 'for instance' and 'also'.

예시: Yes, I have. My English teacher at college was very dedicated; he always stayed after class to explain difficult points and gave helpful feedback on essays. For instance, he spent extra time helping me improve my writing when I felt discouraged.

제안: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then support it with two concise, specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid incorrect words ('roads' -> 'rules') and vague phrases.

예시: I prefer having more rules at school because they promote safety and good behaviour. For example, rules about respecting others reduce bullying, and clear safety rules prevent accidents in corridors.

제안: Answer yes/no plainly, then describe one or two concrete examples of the teacher's strictness and positive impact. Use correct tense and clearer nouns. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

예시: Yes, I have had a strict teacher. He insisted on high standards in class and made us practice problems until we understood them, which helped me learn to be persistent and careful. For example, he would correct our homework line by line until it was accurate.

제안: Give a clear stance (yes/no/unsure) in the first sentence, then explain reasons and future plans with specific details. Avoid confusing phrases and tense errors. Use connectors like 'because', 'however', and 'in the future'.

예시: I'm not sure I would want to teach in a rule-free school because some rules are necessary for safety and learning. However, I do hope to become a teacher in about ten years and I would focus on creating a supportive classroom with clear, fair guidelines.

× Is there my roles in school to visit students such as don't smoking and don't run in the hallway?

✓ Are there rules at my school for students, such as 'no smoking' and 'no running in the hallway'?

The original uses 'Is there' which is incorrect for plural 'roles/rules'. Use 'Are there' for plural existence. Also 'roles' is wrong word; 'rules' fits the context. Use noun phrases 'no smoking' and 'no running' for prohibitions.

× And you must be polite to students and teachers.

✓ Students must be polite to other students and to teachers.

The original 'you' is conversational but inconsistent in an answer describing school rules. Use 'students' as the subject to match the context and maintain clarity.

× It's very important rules in school.

✓ These are very important rules in school.

'It's' (it is) is singular and cannot introduce plural 'rules'. Use 'These are' to refer to plural 'rules'.

× It's asking students to benefit from the rules because these rules can help them grow up correctly and help them stand a great value, and also can help them to do something imply.

✓ Students benefit from rules because they help them grow up properly, develop strong values, and behave appropriately.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and vague. Recast to subject-first 'Students benefit' and use clear verbs and adjectives: 'properly' instead of 'correctly', 'develop strong values' instead of 'stand a great value', and 'behave appropriately' instead of 'do something imply'.

× Is there had ever had a really dedicated teacher is my English teacher in my college.

✓ I have had a really dedicated teacher: my English teacher in college.

The original mixes existential 'Is there' and past perfect 'had ever had' incorrectly. Use simple past/present perfect 'I have had' or 'I had' and a clear subject 'I'.

× He is very reliable and just like a solid back and forth when I feel so dressed.

✓ He is very reliable and like a solid support when I feel stressed.

'Just like a solid back and forth' is incorrect metaphor and 'dressed' should be 'stressed'. Replace with 'solid support' to convey reliability and correct the adjective.

× Another teacher like bacon and also help me escape from the depression and he is very.

✓ Another teacher, Mr. Bacon, also helped me overcome depression; he was very supportive.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Identify the teacher's name if intended ('Bacon' capitalized), use past tense 'helped' to match life experience, and complete the sentence with 'supportive'.

× I prefer to have more roads in the school because morals are more helpful for students.

✓ I prefer to have more rules in the school because rules help students.

'Roads' is the wrong word (likely 'rules'). 'Morals are more helpful' is vague; simplify to 'rules help students'.

× The rules is like a platform for students to restrict them and have some safety thinking patterns for them.

✓ The rules are like a platform to guide students and help them develop safe thinking patterns.

Use plural verb 'are' with 'rules'. 'Restrict them' has negative connotation; 'guide' is better. Rephrase for clarity and natural collocation.

× So I think he is.

✓ So I think that is better.

Original fragment 'So I think he is.' lacks clear referent and verb agreement. Replace with complete clause 'So I think that is better' to express preference.

× Yes, I hide my to attract teacher is my my teacher.

✓ Yes, my strict teacher was my homeroom teacher.

Original is ungrammatical with repeated words and incorrect pronouns. Clarify intended meaning: identifying who was strict and their role.

× He is very clever and taught me lots of knowledge to restrict the questions and he is very determined and persistent.

✓ He was very knowledgeable and taught me a lot; he was determined and persistent.

'Clever' is acceptable but 'taught me lots of knowledge' is awkward—use 'knowledgeable' and 'taught me a lot'. Ensure consistent past tense 'was' if describing a past teacher.

× When he encounters some difficult my screens, he never give up and try to find the correct answer.

✓ When he encountered difficulties, he never gave up and always tried to find the correct answer.

Pronoun and noun phrases are garbled ('difficult my screens'). Use 'difficulties'. Maintain past tense agreement: 'encountered', 'gave', 'tried'.

× Oh, I'm not sure about it, because the future is full of uncertainty lies.

✓ I'm not sure, because the future is full of uncertainties.

'Uncertainty lies' is incorrect; use the plural noun 'uncertainties'. Remove extra filler 'about it' for clarity.

× If I must choose by cute, it may be a teacher.

✓ If I had to choose now, I might become a teacher.

Original 'choose by cute' is nonsensical. Use conditional 'If I had to choose' and modal 'might become' to express possibility.

× About 10 years later, it is one of my dream job to be a teacher, and I will pull my attention.

✓ In about ten years, one of my dream jobs will be to be a teacher, and I will focus my attention on it.

Use future tense 'will be' for a plan in the future. 'Dream job' should be plural or 'one of my dream jobs'. 'Pull my attention' is incorrect; use 'focus my attention on it'.