Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples. Use linking words and correct grammar (e.g., past tense consistency, articles, plural forms). Avoid vague phrases like "and so on."

예시: Yes. My primary school had many rules, mainly about uniform and manners. For example, we had to wear a specific uniform every day and always address teachers as "Sir" or "Ma'am." These rules helped maintain discipline and respect among students.

제안: Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, word choice) and avoid redundancy ("as well as" repeated).

예시: Yes, I believe more rules can help. Firstly, they teach discipline, which improves classroom behavior. Secondly, rules encourage punctuality, so students arrive on time and miss fewer lessons.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then provide two concise specific details showing dedication (teaching methods, extra help). Avoid hesitations and incorrect word forms (e.g., "hard working" → "hardworking").

예시: Yes. My English coach, Mr. Maester, was very dedicated. He offered extra classes after school and recommended educational films to improve our listening skills, which significantly raised my confidence in English.

제안: Begin with a clear preference sentence and then give specific reasons using linking words. Use correct noun forms and concise phrasing ("student behavior" not "students behavior").

예시: I prefer fewer rules. Fewer, clearer rules about behavior and uniform allow students more freedom while still keeping order, and they are easier to enforce consistently.

제안: Be careful discussing corporal punishment; focus on description and personal reflection. Use clearer vocabulary and grammar, avoid awkward phrases ("so-called full answer"). Explain consequences or lessons learned with linking words and sensitivity.

예시: Yes. In 7th grade I had a very strict teacher who punished students harshly. Although his methods were severe, they improved our discipline; however, I now think there were less harmful ways to achieve the same results.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar ("children need to"), avoid repetition, and keep within 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: No, I would not. Children need some rules to ensure good behavior and a focused learning environment, and rules help teachers manage the class effectively.

× Yes, there were so many rules that a student has to follow while studying in school.

✓ Yes, there were so many rules that students had to follow while studying at school.

Mixed tense and number: 'there were' (past) should match 'students had' (past) and plural 'students' fits general statement. Also use 'at school' as more natural. Improve by keeping tense consistent and matching subject number to verb.

× In my case, while I was in my primary school, there were a lot of rules related to dressing as well as how to talk with teacher and so on.

✓ In my case, while I was in primary school, there were a lot of rules about dressing and about how to talk to teachers, and so on.

Use 'in primary school' (no article) and 'about' instead of 'related to'. Use 'talk to teachers' not 'talk with teacher' and plural 'teachers' for generality. This corrects preposition and article use and plurality.

× The main advantage of rules are children learn discipline as well as they are able to know the importance of how to be a punctual man as well as there are a lot of benefits related to rules.

✓ The main advantage of rules is that children learn discipline; they also learn the importance of being punctual, and there are many benefits to rules.

Subject 'The main advantage' is singular so use 'is'. Use 'that' to introduce clause. 'Being punctual' is correct gerund phrase; 'punctual man' is awkward and gender-specific. Replace 'a lot of' with 'many' and 'related to' with 'to' for clarity.

× So yes it is very important.

✓ So yes, it is very important.

Add comma after 'yes' for clarity. The tense is fine; punctuation improves readability.

× I mean, everybody is dedicated to their work, their hard working, but the one whom I will like to talk about is Maester, who was our English coach, who used to teach us a lot about English and he told us what kind of movies we should watch and what things are good.

✓ I mean, everybody is dedicated to their work and hardworking, but the one I would like to talk about is Maester, who was our English coach. He used to teach us a lot about English and told us what kinds of movies were good to watch.

Replace 'whom I will like' with 'I would like' and split long sentence. 'Their hard working' incorrect; use 'hardworking' or 'works hard'. Use 'kinds of movies' and past tense 'were' to match 'used to'. Improves pronoun and verb forms.

× I prefer that a school should have a smaller set of rules regarding the students behavior as well as their clothing.

✓ I prefer that a school should have a smaller set of rules regarding the students' behavior and their clothing.

Use possessive form 'students'' to show rules about their behavior. 'As well as' can be simplified to 'and' for clarity.

× Yes, I remember during my 7th grade there was a so-called full answer who was very strict and used to beat a lot of students but now we think that he was right at every point and we were needed to be beaten.

✓ Yes, I remember during my 7th grade there was a so-called 'full answer' teacher who was very strict and used to beat many students, but now we think he was right in many ways and that we needed to be disciplined.

Original is unclear: 'full answer' likely an idiom for strict teacher—keep in quotes. 'Who' should refer to teacher; add 'teacher'. Use 'many' not 'a lot of' before students. 'Needed to be beaten' is better expressed as 'needed to be disciplined' to avoid awkwardness. Fix sentence structure and clarity.

× No, I will not prefer to go in a rule free school because children's need to be. Need to follow certain kind of rules in order to get good behavior as well as good teaching.

✓ No, I would not prefer to go to a rule-free school because children need to follow certain kinds of rules in order to develop good behavior and receive good teaching.

Use conditional 'would not prefer' for preference. 'Go to' is correct preposition. 'Rule-free' hyphenated; 'children's need to be.' is ungrammatical—replace with 'children need to follow'. Use plural 'kinds' and smoother phrasing 'develop good behavior and receive good teaching.'