Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer covers the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear expressions, such as "ridiculous 1" and "under 136C". Try to use clearer and more natural phrases, and avoid vague terms like "and so on". Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

예시: There are several rules at my secondary school. For example, we must wear school uniforms, keep our fingernails trimmed, and are not allowed to dye our hair. Additionally, when the temperature drops below 13 degrees Celsius, we have to wear our school coats and are not permitted to shorten our dresses.

제안: Your answer attempts to discuss both advantages and disadvantages, which is good. However, the sentence structure is confusing and some phrases are awkward, such as "bitter sweet issue" and "will will lack creativity of students". Try to use clearer linking words and correct grammar to express your ideas more effectively.

예시: I think this is a bittersweet issue. On the one hand, having more rules helps students look united and improves the school's reputation because everyone appears tidy and obedient. On the other hand, too many rules might limit students' creativity and freedom to express themselves.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains many grammatical errors and incomplete sentences, such as "who's UMM had really has his her own personality" and "She not only teach her English well and explain theory to us clearly as well as." Try to form complete sentences with correct verb forms and clearer expressions.

예시: Yes, I do. When I was in secondary school, one of my English teachers had a very strong personality. She was lively, outgoing, and quite dramatic. She not only taught English well but also explained the theories clearly to us.

× But some really ridiculous 1 is that under 13°C we must wear our school coat and then we should not shorten our dress.

✓ But some really ridiculous rules are that under 13°C we must wear our school coats and then we should not shorten our dresses.

The original sentence uses '1' which seems to be a typo for 'rules' and mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'Rules' should be plural to match 'some', and 'coat' and 'dress' should be plural to refer to multiple students' items. Correct plural forms improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I think this is a bitter sweet issue for the upside is that students it looks more united and school reputation looks better when school students follow the rules, because they look tidy, looks really obedient, but on the other side, only following the rules will will lack creativity of students.

✓ I think this is a bittersweet issue because on the upside, students look more united and the school's reputation improves when students follow the rules, as they look tidy and really obedient. However, on the other side, only following the rules will cause students to lack creativity.

The original sentence has several structural problems including awkward phrasing, repeated words ('will will'), and unclear subject references ('students it looks'). The correction improves sentence flow, subject-verb agreement, and clarity by restructuring the sentence and fixing redundancy.

× When I was in my secondary school one of my English teacher who's UMM had really has his her own personality.

✓ When I was in my secondary school, one of my English teachers had really his own personality.

The phrase 'who's UMM had really has his her own personality' is confusing and contains incorrect pronoun usage. 'Who's' should be 'who', and 'his her' is contradictory. The correction removes unnecessary words and uses the correct possessive pronoun 'his' to match 'one of my English teachers'.

× She is lively, outgoing, really dramatic person.

✓ She is a lively, outgoing, really dramatic person.

The original sentence misses the indefinite article 'a' before 'lively, outgoing, really dramatic person'. Adding 'a' is necessary because 'person' is a singular countable noun and requires an article.

× She not only teach her English well and explain theory to us clearly as well as.

✓ She not only teaches English well but also explains the theory to us clearly.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms ('teach' instead of 'teaches'), missing conjunctions, and awkward phrasing ('as well as' at the end). The correction uses the correct third person singular verbs and the correlative conjunction 'not only... but also' to improve sentence structure and clarity.