Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by making it more concise and structured. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific examples using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy such as "as of now" and try to use more varied vocabulary.

예시: At my university, there are a few dress code rules; for instance, girls should avoid wearing crop tops or low-waist jeans, and boys are not allowed to wear torn jeans. Additionally, all students must arrive before 9:00 AM. These rules help maintain a respectful environment.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will make your response more natural and effective.

예시: I believe that more rules are necessary mainly for younger children because they need guidance and discipline. However, older students are more capable of making their own decisions, so additional rules might not benefit them as much.

제안: Your answer is positive and relevant but can be improved by combining sentences and using linking words for better flow. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy like "very good teacher" and "very nice."

예시: Yes, I have a teacher who excels at her job. She is our class teacher and programming instructor, and she supports us in every way. Moreover, she makes an effort to remember all her students, which creates a friendly and encouraging learning environment.

× you should not be wearing a crop top or low waist jeans for girls and no torn jeans for boys

✓ you should not wear a crop top or low waist jeans for girls and no torn jeans for boys

The modal verb 'should' is followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'should not be wearing' should be corrected to 'should not wear'. This is a common rule in English modal verb usage.

× We also have to arrive before 9:00 AM in the morning.

✓ We also have to arrive by 9:00 AM in the morning.

The preposition 'before' indicates any time earlier than 9:00 AM, but 'by' is more appropriate to indicate the deadline time. 'By 9:00 AM' means at or before 9:00 AM, which fits the intended meaning better.

× In my opinion, I think the rules are to be established for younger children as older children can make their own decisions, Younger children can be groomed, can be thought about discipline through rules while older children are already well.

✓ In my opinion, I think the rules should be established for younger children as older children can make their own decisions. Younger children can be groomed and taught discipline through rules, while older children are already well-disciplined.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with comma splices and awkward phrasing. It needs to be split into two sentences and rephrased for clarity. 'Can be thought about discipline' is incorrect; it should be 'taught discipline'. Also, 'already well' is incomplete and should be 'already well-disciplined'.

× She helps us in everything and also she is one of the teachers who remember everyone of her students, so that is very nice.

✓ She helps us in everything and also she is one of the teachers who remembers every one of her students, so that is very nice.

The relative clause 'who remember' refers to 'one of the teachers' which is singular, so the verb should be 'remembers' to agree with the singular subject. Also, 'everyone' should be two words 'every one' when referring to individual students in this context.