Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency and coherence by using complete sentences, avoiding repetition, and adding a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "usually" or "because") to connect ideas and be specific about frequency. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: I do like buying shoes, but I only buy them occasionally—about once every few months. Usually I choose practical styles like trainers or sandals because they suit Singapore's climate. I prefer comfortable, versatile shoes that I can wear for work and casual outings.

제안: Work on accuracy and clarity: use correct verb forms (e.g., "I have bought"), remove filler words, and organize reasons logically with linking words like "because" and "however." Provide a concise example of a positive and a negative experience. Keep answers within 3–4 clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because they are often cheaper and I know my size. However, sometimes the fit is not perfect, so I return them. For example, I once returned a pair of sneakers because they were too narrow despite matching my usual size.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about spending habits, use correct currency and amounts, and avoid repetition. Use linking words such as "for example" or "whereas" to contrast different types. Be specific about ranges and reasons for the price differences.

예시: How much I spend depends on the type of shoe. For example, I might spend around CN¥500 on a good pair of trainers because they last several years, whereas I usually spend less than CN¥100 on sandals since they wear out faster.

제안: Express your preference clearly with a topic sentence, give specific reasons and one brief example, and avoid redundant repetitions. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to show cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them all day for work and exercise. They need to be versatile for different situations, for example, a cushioned pair of trainers that I can wear to the gym and when running errands.

× I buy. I buy a new shoes every few months.

✓ I buy new shoes every few months.

Use plural without the indefinite article: 'shoes' is plural so do not use 'a'. Use 'buy new shoes' to express a habitual action. Suggestion: remove 'a' when the noun is plural or change to 'a new pair of shoes' for singular idea.

× Most time these are they.

✓ Most of the time they are.

Word order and articles: 'Most of the time' requires 'of the' and the clause should be 'they are' following it. The original mixes pronouns and incorrect order. Suggestion: use 'Most of the time they are...' or 'Most of the time, they are practical.'

× These shoes are trainers or sandals because they are useful in Singapore.

✓ These shoes are trainers or sandals because they are useful in Singapore.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. However, ensure clarity: if meaning is 'I usually buy trainers or sandals' consider revising to that phrasing.

× They are more useful in Singapore.

✓ They are more useful in Singapore.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical correction required. Maintain as is.

× Yes, I have ever bought shoes online because buying shoes online is cheaper than uh offline and I remember my size of my feet, so it is a real realistic to buy my shoes online but sometimes umm the.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because buying shoes online is cheaper than buying offline and I remember my shoe size, so it is realistic to buy shoes online.

Use of present perfect with 'ever' is unnecessary here: say 'I have bought' or 'I have never bought'; remove 'ever' in affirmative. Compare 'cheaper than buying offline' for parallel structure. 'Size of my feet' should be 'my shoe size' for natural collocation. 'A real realistic' is redundant; use 'realistic'. Suggestion: simplify and make comparisons parallel.

× Can't these shoes count? Perfectly? Fit my shoe, fit my feet, so I will reject them and return.

✓ They don't fit my feet perfectly, so I will reject them and return them.

Use a single clear clause: 'They don't fit my feet perfectly' is the correct negation and word order. 'Can't these shoes count?' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'They don't fit' or 'They can't fit'. Include direct object 'them' with 'return'. Suggestion: form complete sentences and keep subject then verb then object.

× The money I spend on shares depends on the type of shoes.

✓ The money I spend on shoes depends on the type of shoes.

'Shares' is a wrong word here—probably intended 'shoes'. Replace with 'shoes'. Article 'the' is acceptable but could be omitted: 'Money I spend on shoes depends...' Better: 'The amount I spend on shoes depends on the type.' Suggestion: use 'amount' for money quantities.

× If I'm buying a A trainers I will spend about CN¥500 on it because I can wear shoes for many years.

✓ If I'm buying trainers I will spend about CN¥500 on them because I can wear the shoes for many years.

Plural agreement: 'trainers' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. Remove extra article 'a'. Use 'the shoes' or 'them' for reference. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun number.

× But if if it's a sandal or if it's a pair. Sandals I will spend about a below than 100, lower than 100.

✓ But if it's a pair of sandals, I will spend less than CN¥100.

Correct structure: 'a pair of sandals' is the proper noun phrase. Use 'less than' for amounts rather than 'below than' or 'lower than'. Remove repeated 'if'. Suggestion: combine fragments into one complete sentence and use correct comparative phrase 'less than'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because usually I wear shoes a pair of shoes for a day and I would work and training with it so it it have to sew.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I usually wear a pair of shoes all day and I work and train in them, so they have to be durable.

Use 'a pair of shoes' correctly and place it before time expression: 'wear a pair of shoes all day'. Pronoun agreement: 'them' for plural shoes, not 'it'. 'Have to sew' is wrong choice; likely meant 'have to be sturdy/durable' or 'have to fit well'. Suggestion: ensure noun-pronoun agreement and choose appropriate adjective for intended meaning.

× The shoes must can fit in different situations and OK and occasions so I prefer.

✓ The shoes must be able to fit different situations and occasions, so I prefer them.

Modal verb sequence 'must can' is incorrect; use 'must be able to' or 'can'. 'Fit in different situations' better as 'fit different situations'. Add object pronoun 'them' after 'prefer'. Suggestion: avoid stacking modals and ensure 'prefer' has an object when needed.

× A comfortable shoes made made me comfortable.

✓ Comfortable shoes make me comfortable.

Article and number: 'shoes' is plural, so do not use 'a'. Use simple present 'make' for habitual preference. Remove duplicated 'made'. Suggestion: use correct article with singular nouns ('a comfortable shoe' or 'a comfortable pair of shoes') or drop article for plural.'