Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how often you buy and what you look for). Use linking words if adding reasons. Correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "give me more beauty" → "make me look more stylish"; "it's also give" → "they also give").

예시: Yes — I love buying shoes, especially sneakers. I usually buy new pairs every 2–3 months because I follow trends and need comfortable everyday shoes. For example, I prefer brands like Nike and Adidas for their comfort and style.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then add one or two specific details. Avoid unclear or incorrect names and filler words. Describe the platform simply and explain why you trust it (e.g., reviews, authenticity guarantees). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct grammar ("it identifies" not "it will identify").

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online. I usually use a popular app in China that verifies sellers and shows customer reviews, so I trust the quality. Because of these guarantees, I feel confident buying sneakers there.

제안: Give a direct, coherent range or typical amount and explain briefly with clear grammar. Avoid confusing phrases and unnecessary thanks. If parents pay sometimes, state that clearly. Use linking words like "usually", "but", or "however" to contrast typical versus maximum spending.

예시: Usually I spend around $100 on a pair of shoes, but the most I've paid is about $500. My parents sometimes help pay for them, so I can afford higher-end brands occasionally.

제안: This answer is generally clear and well-structured. To improve, make the topic sentence firmer, reduce repetition, and add a short linking phrase to connect examples (e.g., "for example"). Use accurate vocabulary ("fashionable" instead of "a fashion sneakers").

예시: It depends on the situation. For example, I wear comfortable shoes for running or sightseeing, but I choose fashionable sneakers for dinners or going to the mall to look more stylish.

× Yes, I'm a big fan of shoes, especially sneakers. I have lots of Nike AG, Adidas, Yazi because I think fashion shoes can give me more, uh, more beauty and it's also give me lots of fashion.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of shoes, especially sneakers. I have lots of Nikes: Nike Air, Adidas, and Yazi because I think fashionable shoes can make me look better and they also give me a strong sense of fashion.

Article and noun-form errors: 'Nike AG' is likely a brand name misuse; plural brand forms like 'Nikes' are appropriate when referring to many pairs. 'Fashion shoes' is awkward; use the adjective 'fashionable' before 'shoes'. 'Give me more beauty' is unnatural — 'make me look better' is idiomatic. Also 'it's also give' is subject-verb agreement and verb form error; changed to 'they also give'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms for brands, use adjectives correctly, and ensure subject and verb agree.

× Yes, in China, dear uh, shoes app like stock S is called poison. I bought lots of things on it is a big platform for us to buy shoes and uh, it will identify the quality of the shoes. So it's very good.

✓ Yes, in China there are shoe apps like StockX and Pinduoduo. I bought lots of things on them; they are big platforms for buying shoes and they can help identify the quality of the shoes, so they are very useful.

Preposition and demonstrative errors: 'in China, dear uh, shoes app like stock S is called poison' is unclear and misuses prepositions and demonstratives ('in' vs 'there are') and brand names. 'On it is a big platform' incorrectly combines clauses and uses 'it' for multiple apps. Correct by using 'there are' to introduce existence, 'on them' for plural platforms, and 'for buying shoes' as the appropriate prepositional phrase. Also split into clearer sentences.

× I bought lots of things on it is a big platform for us to buy shoes and uh, it will identify the quality of the shoes.

✓ I bought lots of things on it; it is a big platform for us to buy shoes, and it can identify the quality of the shoes.

Tense and modal choice: The original mixes past tense 'bought' with future 'will identify' incorrectly. Since identifying quality is a present ability of the platform, use 'can identify' or present simple 'identifies'. Also fix sentence splitting and pronoun reference ('it' should clearly refer to the platform). Suggest using consistent tense and clearer pronoun references.

× The most is $500.00 at least I think is $100 because my parents disappoint me this hobby so they can spend lots of money on buying shoes for me. Thanks to him, thanks to them.

✓ The most I've spent is $500; at least I think the minimum is $100 because my parents support this hobby, so they are willing to spend a lot of money buying shoes for me. Thanks to them.

Present tense and word choice errors: 'The most is $500.00' lacks a verb—use present perfect 'I've spent'. 'At least I think is $100' needs a subject and verb. 'My parents disappoint me this hobby' uses wrong verb; should be 'support' rather than 'disappoint'. 'They can spend' better expressed as 'they are willing to spend'. 'Thanks to him, thanks to them' inconsistent pronoun; use 'them'. Suggest using proper verb forms and correct collocations like 'support a hobby' and 'spend money on'.

× I think it depends on the usage. If I go for running or visit some places I will wear comfortable shoes.

✓ I think it depends on the usage. If I go running or visit some places, I will wear comfortable shoes.

Gerund usage: 'go for running' is unidiomatic; use 'go running' (verb + -ing) after 'go'. Also add a comma before the conditional clause end for clarity. Suggest learning common verb+ -ing patterns like 'go running', 'go shopping'.

× But if I have a dinner with my friends or go to the shopping mall I will wear a fashion sneakers. So it depends on the situations.

✓ But if I have dinner with my friends or go to the shopping mall, I will wear fashion sneakers. So it depends on the situation.

Article and adjective-noun agreement: 'have a dinner' should be 'have dinner' (no article). 'A fashion sneakers' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'fashion sneakers' or 'a fashionable sneaker' (singular). 'Situations' should be singular 'situation' when referring generally. Suggest matching articles to countability and ensuring adjective placement ('fashion' as an adjective is okay but 'fashionable' is more natural).