Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., “especially” twice) and minor grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” is good, but vary structure).

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes occasionally for special events. For example, I often choose four-inch heels because they make me look taller and improve my posture, which boosts my confidence.

제안: Correct grammar and make the story clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct answer, then explain briefly what happened, using linking words like “because” or “so”. Avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Yes, I have. Once I bought a pair online, but the size was incorrect, so I now prefer to buy shoes in-store where I can try them on first.

제안: Use consistent tense and correct noun forms. Give a clear general amount and contrast categories with linking words like “usually” and “however” or “but”. Be specific about types (sneakers, heels) rather than vague labels.

예시: I usually spend about $200 on shoes. For example, I might pay around $200 for good-quality sneakers, but I tend to spend more on heels because I want them to look elegant and last longer.

제안: Answer directly and fix pronoun and article errors (“your” → “comfortable shoes”; “a comfortable shoes” → “comfortable shoes” or “a comfortable pair”). Give one clear condition and a brief example using linking words like “however” or “for example”.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes for daily wear. However, for special occasions I might choose fashionable shoes; for example, I wear flats or trainers for walking but pick stylish heels for parties.

× I like buying shoes every now and then, especially if there's an occasion.

✓ I like buying shoes every now and then, especially if there is an occasion.

The contraction 'there's' is acceptable in speech, but in careful grammar correction keep 'there is' to match formality; no grammatical error otherwise. Suggestion: use 'there is' in formal responses.

× I especially like heels with four inches because I'm too short, so it elevates my whole appearance.

✓ I especially like four-inch heels because I'm too short, so they elevate my whole appearance.

Use of quantifier and noun order is incorrect. 'Four inches heels' should be 'four-inch heels' (compound adjective before noun, singular 'inch' used in compound adjectives). Also pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'heels' so use 'they'. Suggestion: form compound adjectives with singular unit and agree pronoun number.

× Yes, there was a times that I bought 1 shoes online but it's not accurate with the size.

✓ Yes, there were times when I bought shoes online, but they were not the right size.

Multiple issues: 'there was a times' mismatches number and verb (use 'there were times'). '1 shoes' is singular/plural error—use 'shoes' without numeral or 'one pair of shoes'. 'It's not accurate with the size' is unnatural; use 'they were not the right size'. Suggestion: match number with verb and use natural collocations: 'the right size' or 'didn't fit'.

× So now I just wanted to just buy in the store so that I can try it.

✓ So now I just want to buy in the store so that I can try them on.

'Wanted' (past) conflicts with 'now' and 'can'—use present 'want'. Duplicate 'just' should be reduced. Use 'buy in the store' is acceptable but more natural 'buy in a store' or 'buy from a store'. 'Try it' should be 'try them on' to refer to shoes and use phrasal verb for trying clothing/shoes. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with 'now' and use correct object and phrasal verb.

× I spent around $200 for a shoes, specially if it's a rubber shoes but if it's a heels I spend it a lot more.

✓ I spend around $200 on a pair of shoes, especially if they're rubber, but if they're heels I spend much more.

Tense inconsistency: 'spent' (past) vs general habit should be present 'spend'. Article and number: 'a shoes' incorrect; use 'a pair of shoes' or 'shoes' without 'a'. Preposition 'for' should be 'on'. 'specially' should be 'especially'. Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it's a rubber shoes' wrong—use 'they're rubber' or 'a rubber pair'. 'if it's a heels' incorrect; use plural agreement 'if they're heels'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct articles/agreements.

× I really prefer your comfortable shoes, but it depends on the occasion and everyday use.

✓ I really prefer comfortable shoes, but it depends on the occasion and everyday use.

Use of 'your' is incorrect in this context; speaker should use first-person preference 'I prefer comfortable shoes' not addressing the examiner's shoes. 'It depends' is fine. Suggestion: remove 'your' when stating one's own preference.

× I would use a comfortable shoes for everyday walking.

✓ I would use comfortable shoes for everyday walking.

Article-noun agreement error: 'a comfortable shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes'. Use 'a comfortable shoe' for singular or 'comfortable shoes' for plural. Context implies general plural, so omit 'a'. Suggestion: match article with noun number or use plural without article.