Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and keep present and past ideas clearly separated. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "when I was younger" used twice) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often these days. However, when I was younger I enjoyed shopping for new basketball shoes because I played a lot and wanted good support. Now I only buy shoes when I really need them.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and explain briefly with a logical connector. Correct grammar (tense and sentence structure) and avoid repeating words. Add a short specific reason or example about how you check sizes.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but only after trying the same model in a store. Because sizes can vary, I try them on first and then order the correct size online to ensure a good fit.

제안: Answer directly with a clear estimate or description and use linking words to connect ideas. Fix incomplete sentences and be specific about typical spending or savings habits (e.g., approximate amount or frequency).

예시: I usually spend very little on shoes because I keep them for a long time and often buy second-hand pairs. For example, I might spend around $20–$40 every two or three years when I need a replacement.

제안: State your preference clearly in one topic sentence, then give a concise reason and a contrasting example using linking words. Avoid vague metaphors like "part of my body" and use natural phrasing.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I value foot support and long-term comfort. However, when I attend formal events I choose fashionable shoes to match my outfit, while for daily activities I always pick comfort.

× I don't like buying shoes recently, but when I was younger I really enjoyed buying new shoes.

✓ I haven't liked buying shoes recently, but when I was younger I really enjoyed buying new shoes.

The adverb 'recently' indicates a time period continuing up to now, so the present perfect ('have/has' + past participle) is appropriate: 'I haven't liked' or 'I don't like' can both be used, but 'I haven't liked' fits better with 'recently' to show change from past to present. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions or states that started in the past and continue or have relevance now.

× I love basketball, so when I was younger I enjoyed my basketball shoes.

✓ I love basketball, so when I was younger I enjoyed wearing my basketball shoes.

The verb 'enjoy' is typically followed by a gerund ('-ing') when describing activities. 'Enjoyed my basketball shoes' is missing the verb 'wearing'. Use 'enjoyed wearing' to express pleasure in the activity of wearing the shoes.

× Yes, I bought shoes online, but I have to check the size of shoes before buying them, so I only bought shoes that I I tried it before.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I have to check the size before buying them, so I only buy shoes that I have tried before.

Mixing past simple ('bought') and present habits ('I have to') is inconsistent. Use present perfect ('have bought') to talk about life experience up to now. 'I only bought' should be a habitual present 'I only buy' if it is a general practice. Also 'tried it before' has pronoun redundancy and tense error; use 'have tried before'. Remove the extra 'I'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense (present perfect for experiences, present simple for routines) and remove redundant pronouns.

× Actually, I don't spend money on my shoes. I try to wear shoes as long as possible and. Additionally, I sometimes buy used shoes.

✓ Actually, I don't spend much money on shoes. I try to wear them as long as possible. Additionally, I sometimes buy used shoes.

The original has awkward phrasing and a sentence fragment ('and.'). 'Spend money on my shoes' is better as 'spend much money on shoes' for natural English. Use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'shoes' and complete the fragment as a full sentence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use appropriate pronouns for clarity.

× Both are important, but for me I prefer comfortable shoes because shoes are part of my body so the sense of comfortable is essential.

✓ Both are important, but for me I prefer comfortable shoes because shoes are part of my body, so the feeling of comfort is essential.

'The sense of comfortable' is incorrect because 'comfortable' is an adjective. Use the noun 'comfort' or phrase 'feeling of comfort'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: when turning adjectives into nouns, use correct noun forms ('comfort') and maintain natural collocations ('feeling of comfort').

× But I also like fashionable shoes. It depends on the situation.

✓ But I also like fashionable shoes; it depends on the situation.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable, but combining the two short sentences into one with a semicolon or conjunction improves flow. No -ing correction needed here; this is a style suggestion. Suggestion: connect related short sentences for smoother speech.