Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant and provides reasons, but it contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words like "I" and "library" unnecessarily, and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I visit the library once or twice a week because it is a quiet place where I can focus without distractions. Additionally, I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them, which helps me save money.

제안: Your answer is too long and contains run-on sentences, which affects clarity. Try to limit your response to about 4-5 sentences and use linking words like "and", "also", or "besides" to connect ideas logically. Avoid repeating the same idea about the library being quiet multiple times.

예시: In the library, I usually read books and participate in group discussions. I also attend events hosted there. Sometimes, I take my children who enjoy listening to stories during special sessions.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words like "I" unnecessarily. Also, use linking words such as "because", "and", or "moreover" to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: When I was a kid, I didn't have the chance to go to the library because there wasn't one nearby. Also, I preferred playing outside rather than reading. Moreover, we had many books at home, so I didn't feel the need to visit the library.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Also, some phrases are incorrect or informal, such as "ain't going". Try to speak clearly, avoid filler words, and organize your ideas logically. Use appropriate vocabulary and correct grammar to express your opinion.

예시: Yes, Chinese children often go to the library because schools, teachers, and parents encourage them. Many libraries provide digital labs and resources, which help students learn and support their future career development.

× I visit the library once or twice in a week because the library is a quiet place where I can focus without distractions.

✓ I visit the library once or twice a week because the library is a quiet place where I can focus without distractions.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'a week'. The correct expression is 'once or twice a week' without 'in'.

× Moreover, I can concentrate better in library and I I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them, which helps me save money additionally.

✓ Moreover, I can concentrate better in the library and I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them, which helps me save money as well.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' here. Also, 'additionally' is better replaced with 'as well' for naturalness in this context.

× I usually do in the library reading books and participate in the group discussion and attend the events hosted by the library, and I take my children there who enjoy listening to stories during the special sections, and it is a quiet place where I can concentrate better.

✓ I usually read books, participate in group discussions, and attend events hosted by the library. I also take my children there; they enjoy listening to stories during special sessions. It is a quiet place where I can concentrate better.

The original sentence is a run-on with improper conjunctions and structure. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When I was a kid, I didn't get the chance to go to the library because there was not a library nearby.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't get the chance to go to the library because there was no library nearby.

The phrase 'there was not a library' is awkward; 'there was no library' is the correct and natural expression.

× And also I I prefer playing outside rather than go to the library.

✓ And also, I preferred playing outside rather than going to the library.

Since the sentence refers to past time ('when I was a kid'), the verb should be in past tense 'preferred'. Also, after 'rather than', the gerund form 'going' is correct instead of 'go'.

× I'm not interested in reading at that time and moreover I have we have a lot of books in our home so we don't I don't need to go.

✓ I wasn't interested in reading at that time and moreover, we had a lot of books at home so I didn't need to go.

The sentence refers to past time, so past tense verbs 'wasn't', 'had', and 'didn't' should be used. Also, 'at home' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Of course they ain't going to the library because they were very advanced and they're very intelligent.

✓ Of course, they don't often go to the library because they are very advanced and very intelligent.

'Ain't' is informal and incorrect here; 'don't often go' is appropriate. Also, mixing past 'were' and present 'are' is inconsistent; present tense 'are' fits better here.

× They're, they're, they're very intelligent.

✓ They are very intelligent.

Repetition of 'they're' is unnecessary and incorrect; a single 'They are' suffices.

× Uh, so schools, teachers and parents encourage them to do so and their, their library provide digital labs and resources.

✓ So schools, teachers, and parents encourage them to do so, and their libraries provide digital labs and resources.

'Library' should be plural 'libraries' to agree with plural possessive 'their'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× So they, when they participate in that, uh, in that type of things, the, the, it, it helps the career growth.

✓ So when they participate in those types of activities, it helps their career growth.

'That type of things' is incorrect; 'those types of activities' is correct. Also, 'the career growth' should be 'their career growth' to indicate possession.