Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang alami dan agak bertele-tele. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih langsung dan jelas, serta gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan efektif.

예시: No, I don't often go to the library because there aren't many libraries in my city, and the facilities are not very good.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan agak membingungkan. Cobalah untuk menjelaskan kegiatan Anda di perpustakaan dengan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan mudah dipahami.

예시: I usually read books and do my assignments in the library while listening to my favorite music to help me concentrate.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus dan ada beberapa kalimat yang tidak jelas. Cobalah untuk menjawab langsung dengan struktur yang jelas dan detail yang relevan.

예시: I didn't often go to the library when I was a kid, but my parents sometimes took me to the biggest bookstore in my city.

제안: Jawaban Anda cukup baik tapi ada pengulangan dan kalimat yang kurang alami. Cobalah gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

예시: In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library to study because they have many assignments. I have seen on TV and social media that they usually focus on their work at the library.

× Not really 'cause in my city there is not a lot of access to go to the library, just like their facility was not truly effective.

✓ Not really, because in my city there is not much access to the library, and their facilities are not truly effective.

The phrase 'there is not a lot of access' is acceptable but 'a lot of' is informal; 'much' is more appropriate here. Also, 'their facility was not truly effective' should be plural 'facilities are' to agree with the plural subject and present tense to match the context.

× Not really 'cause in my city there is not a lot of access to go to the library, just like their facility was not truly effective.

✓ Not really, because in my city there is not much access to the library, and its facilities are not truly effective.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect when referring to the library; 'its' should be used as the library is singular.

× I usually read at library doing all of my tags and just like hearing some of my favorite music just to feel a main character at the time and why I sound actually serious.

✓ I usually read in the library, doing all of my tasks and listening to some of my favorite music just to feel like the main character at the time and to explain why I sound serious.

The preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to being inside the library. 'Tags' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'tasks'. 'Hearing' should be 'listening to' when referring to music. 'Just like' is informal and should be 'just to feel like'. The phrase 'why I sound actually serious' is unclear and corrected to 'to explain why I sound serious'.

× Based on what I remember, I didn't go to the library as usual, but my parents always picked me to remedy.

✓ Based on what I remember, I didn't usually go to the library, but my parents always took me to the remedy.

The phrase 'didn't go to the library as usual' is awkward; 'didn't usually go' is better. 'Picked me to remedy' is unclear; assuming 'remedy' is a place, 'took me to the remedy' is correct past tense usage.

× Based on what I remember, I didn't go to the library as usual, but my parents always picked me to remedy.

✓ Based on what I remember, I didn't usually go to the library, but my parents always took me to the remedy.

The preposition 'to' is correct here, but the phrase 'picked me to remedy' is incorrect; 'picked me up to go to the remedy' or 'took me to the remedy' is better. 'Remedy' as a noun here is unclear; if it refers to a bookstore, it should be clarified.

× It's just like a bookstore in my city, like the biggest store actually.

✓ It's like a bookstore in my city, actually the biggest store.

The phrase 'just like' is informal and redundant here; 'like' suffices. 'Like the biggest store actually' is awkward; 'actually the biggest store' is clearer.

× In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library. Why 'cause based on what I see in television, social media and others, we can see just like Chinese kids with a focusing kid that always have a lot of text to do.

✓ In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library because based on what I see on television, social media, and other sources, we can see Chinese kids who are focused and always have a lot of tasks to do.

'Why 'cause' is informal and redundant; 'because' is sufficient. 'In television' should be 'on television'. 'Just like Chinese kids with a focusing kid' is unclear; corrected to 'Chinese kids who are focused'. 'Text' should be 'tasks'.

× In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library. Why 'cause based on what I see in television, social media and others, we can see just like Chinese kids with a focusing kid that always have a lot of text to do.

✓ In my opinion, Chinese kids often go to the library because based on what I see on television, social media, and other sources, we can see Chinese kids who are focused and always have a lot of tasks to do.

The phrase 'a focusing kid that always have' is incorrect; 'a kid' is singular but 'have' is plural. It should be 'kids who are focused and always have' to agree in number.

× Like they just like sitting in their table and do a lot of text writing.

✓ They just sit at their tables and do a lot of text writing.

'Sitting in their table' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at their tables'. Also, 'do a lot of text writing' is awkward; 'do a lot of writing' or 'write a lot of texts' is better.

× Like they just like sitting in their table and do a lot of text writing.

✓ They just sit at their tables and do a lot of writing.

The pronoun 'their' is correct for plural, but 'table' should be plural 'tables' to match 'their'. Also, 'text writing' is awkward; 'writing' is better.