Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some redundancy and filler words like 'like' and 'I'm calling to elaborate all sorts of everyday' which do not fit well. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, and avoid unnecessary phrases. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I am a master's student at the University of Toronto. I enjoy studying there due to its quiet environment, which helps me focus without distractions. I usually visit the Oasis library since it has many teaching resources and I prefer using physical books over digital ones.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many filler words such as 'like' and informal phrases. Try to use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with clear linking words to improve coherence. Also, provide more specific details to enrich your response.

예시: Usually, I study and work on my essays in the library because I have a research paper to complete. Additionally, I sometimes consult the librarian to find resources on topics like gender bias and cultural identity, which are related to my research.

제안: Your answer has good content but is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical errors and filler words. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because my mom often took me there. I enjoyed reading Disney Princess stories at that time. Later, when I was about ten years old, I became interested in Peter Rabbit books. Since I was majoring in illustration, I even copied some of the drawings to practice.

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but has grammatical mistakes and repetitive filler words like 'like'. Try to use correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library. For example, the Beijing Library near Wangfujing Street is very crowded. It offers a wide variety of genres, including fiction, romance, and children's stories. Therefore, children can easily find many books that interest them there.

× Yes, of course, I'm calling to elaborate all sorts of everyday because as I mentioned it before, I'm a masters student at U of T and I really enjoyed like studying the library, especially the quiet environment without like any distractions.

✓ Yes, of course, I often go to the library every day because, as I mentioned before, I'm a master's student at U of T and I really enjoy studying in the library, especially the quiet environment without any distractions.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm calling to elaborate' which is not appropriate here; the present participle 'calling' is misused. The phrase 'masters student' should be 'master's student' to indicate possession. Also, 'enjoyed like studying the library' is awkward; it should be 'enjoy studying in the library'. The sentence is corrected to use present simple tense to match the habitual action and proper possessive form.

× I always go to the Oasis one because I can find all the teaching and instruction there and I prefer actual books instead of like.

✓ I always go to the Oasis one because I can find all the teaching and instruction there, and I prefer actual books instead of digital ones.

The phrase 'the Oasis one' is unclear; assuming 'Oasis' is a place, 'the' is acceptable. The sentence ends abruptly with 'instead of like.' It is corrected to complete the thought with 'digital ones' to clarify the comparison. Also, a comma is added before 'and' to separate clauses properly.

× Well, most of the time I'm just like studying, like working on my essay 'cause I have like a research paper that I have to work out.

✓ Well, most of the time I'm just studying, working on my essay because I have a research paper that I have to work on.

The use of 'like' as filler is unnecessary and informal; it is removed for clarity. 'Work out' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is 'work on' a paper. The sentence is simplified for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× I might reach out to the librarian about how to find a certain topic about like gender bias and cultural identity.

✓ I might reach out to the librarian to find information on a certain topic like gender bias and cultural identity.

The phrase 'reach out to the librarian about how to find a certain topic about like' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'about' is misused twice. It is corrected to 'reach out to the librarian to find information on a certain topic like...' for proper prepositional use and clarity.

× Of course, I used to go to the library when I was a kid. My mom always brought me there. I remember at that time I really enjoy about like Disney Princess stories and one of my favorite book after like I grow up a little bit around my age of 10.

✓ Of course, I used to go to the library when I was a kid. My mom always brought me there. I remember at that time I really enjoyed Disney Princess stories, and one of my favorite books after I grew up a little, around the age of 10,

The verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context. 'One of my favorite book' should be plural 'books'. 'After like I grow up' is incorrect; it should be 'after I grew up'. The sentence is corrected to past tense verbs and proper plural form.

× I really, really get into Peter Rabbit because I'm was majoring in illustration and I will copy some of I copied some of the drawings.

✓ I really, really got into Peter Rabbit because I was majoring in illustration and I copied some of the drawings.

The verb 'get' should be past tense 'got' to match the past context. 'I'm was' is incorrect; it should be 'I was'. 'I will copy some of I copied some of the drawings' is confusing; corrected to 'I copied some of the drawings' to maintain past tense and clarity.

× Yes, of course and the library are really crowded especially in Beijing Library, the biggest one close to the Wangfujing St.

✓ Yes, of course, and the libraries are really crowded, especially Beijing Library, the biggest one close to Wangfujing St.

'The library are' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'the libraries are' since it refers to libraries in general. Also, 'the biggest one close to the Wangfujing St.' is corrected to remove 'the' before 'Wangfujing St.' as street names do not take 'the' in English.

× It carries like many different diverse various genres like fictions, romantic and also like for kids stories.

✓ It carries many different and diverse genres like fiction, romance, and also stories for kids.

The use of multiple adjectives 'different diverse various' is redundant; 'different and diverse' suffices. 'Fictions' should be 'fiction' (uncountable noun). 'Romantic' should be 'romance' to refer to the genre. 'Like for kids stories' is awkward; corrected to 'stories for kids'.

× So you will find out like a lot of books that you are looking for there.

✓ So you will find a lot of books that you are looking for there.

The phrase 'find out like a lot of books' is incorrect; 'find out' is not used with objects like books. The filler 'like' is unnecessary. Corrected to 'find a lot of books' for proper verb usage and clarity.