Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place where I can concentrate and study effectively during my free time.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific activities you do in the library using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and filler words.

예시: In the library, I usually read books and work on projects with my friends to complete our assignments.

제안: Make your answer more fluent and structured. Start with a clear statement, then explain the reason using linking words like 'because'. Avoid hesitation and repeated words.

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, my dad preferred me to go to the library instead of playing with friends because it helped me gain more information.

제안: Your answer is informative but a bit confusing. Use simpler sentence structures and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words.

예시: Yes, many Chinese children often visit libraries because they provide a quiet environment and a wide range of books that help with their schoolwork and interests.

× In my opinion it's a source of information and it's a quiet place to visit in our free time to concentrate and and it's and we can study there and we can.

✓ In my opinion, it's a source of information and a quiet place to visit in our free time to concentrate, and we can study there.

The sentence has repeated conjunctions 'and and' and an incomplete phrase 'and it's and we can'. This causes confusion and disrupts sentence flow. Removing redundant conjunctions and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Reading books and usually bring we go with my friends to complete our projects and our assignments and make a story to I don't know, Oh my God.

✓ I usually read books and go with my friends to complete our projects and assignments, and sometimes we make stories.

The original sentence has incorrect word order ('bring we go'), incomplete phrases, and lacks proper sentence structure. Rearranging words to subject-verb-object order and completing ideas makes the sentence grammatically correct and understandable.

× my dad prefer me to go to the library than playing with my friends 'cause it's better, 'cause we can get more information and and yeah, I think.

✓ My dad preferred me to go to the library rather than play with my friends because it's better, as we can get more information.

The verb 'prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'than playing' should be 'rather than play' to correctly express preference. Removing repeated 'and' and clarifying conjunctions improves sentence correctness.

× Yes, many Chinese children frequently visit libraries, especially in Europe, areas where access to such a easier libraries proved a quiet environment for studying and offer a wide range of books that support their schoolwork and personal interests.

✓ Yes, many Chinese children frequently visit libraries, especially in urban areas where access to such libraries provides a quiet environment for studying and offers a wide range of books that support their schoolwork and personal interests.

The phrase 'in Europe, areas' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'urban areas' fits better. 'a easier libraries' is incorrect; 'such libraries' is correct. Verb agreement errors with 'proved' and 'offer' should be 'provides' and 'offers' to agree with singular 'access'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.