Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains contradictions. You say you go to the library very often but then say you do not have time to go. Try to give a clear, direct response with a topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I don't often go to the library because I have a very demanding job. However, I love reading, so I try to read ebooks whenever I have free time.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by starting with a topic sentence and using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating the word 'there' unnecessarily.

예시: In the library, I usually use the study space to complete my assignments, and I also look for new books to read to expand my knowledge.

제안: Your answer is good but can be more concise and natural. Try to combine sentences using linking words and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: When I was a kid, my school had a small library, and we had a designated period every week to visit it, so I went almost every week.

제안: Your answer covers the topic but could be more coherent by using linking words and avoiding abrupt sentence breaks. Also, try to be more specific and avoid generalizations.

예시: Chinese children used to go to the library often because of the wide range of educational materials available. However, nowadays, with the rise of technology, many resources like ebooks and assignments are accessible online, so they don't need to visit the library as frequently.

× Go to the library very often because I work a very demanding job so I do not have time to go to a library, although I love reading books and try to read ebooks whenever I get time.

✓ I don't go to the library very often because I work a very demanding job, so I do not have time to go to the library, although I love reading books and try to read ebooks whenever I get time.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper sentence structure. Starting with 'Go to the library very often' is incomplete. Adding 'I don't' clarifies the subject and verb, making the sentence grammatically correct and coherent.

× Go to the library very often because I work a very demanding job so I do not have time to go to a library, although I love reading books and try to read ebooks whenever I get time.

✓ I don't go to the library very often because I work a very demanding job, so I do not have time to go to the library, although I love reading books and try to read ebooks whenever I get time.

The phrase 'go to a library' should be 'go to the library' to refer to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Using 'the' is appropriate here to specify the library in general.

× The library. I use the studying space available there to complete my assignments and I try to find new books to read there.

✓ The library: I use the study space available there to complete my assignments, and I try to find new books to read there.

The original sentence starts with 'The library.' as a fragment. Changing the period to a colon connects the ideas properly. Also, 'studying space' is better expressed as 'study space' for natural usage.

× I was just a kid in my school. There was a small library, so every week we used to have one period designated for going to the library.

✓ I was just a kid in my school. There was a small library, so every week we used to have one period designated for going to the library.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× So I used to go there almost every week.

✓ So I used to go there almost every week.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× Chinese children go to the library very often due to the vast availability of educational material there.

✓ Chinese children go to the library very often due to the vast availability of educational materials there.

'Educational material' should be pluralized to 'educational materials' to correctly refer to multiple types of materials, which is more natural in this context.

× But nowadays everything is available online, all the ebooks, assignments.

✓ But nowadays, everything is available online: all the ebooks and assignments.

Adding a comma after 'nowadays' improves readability. Using a colon introduces the list properly. Also, adding 'and' between 'ebooks' and 'assignments' is necessary for correct list structure.

× So they don't need to go to library that often, Instead they can get everything because of the technology at their homes.

✓ So they don't need to go to the library that often. Instead, they can get everything because of technology at their homes.

'Go to library' should be 'go to the library' to specify the place. Also, 'Instead' should start a new sentence and be followed by a comma. 'The technology' is better as 'technology' in general sense here.