Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with correct grammar and avoid unnecessary or confusing phrases. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

예시: I often went to the library when I was a student about 14 years ago because I needed to do research for my surveys and read magazines that were not available online.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and a bit unclear. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid fragmented sentences and provide specific details.

예시: In the library, I usually find exclusive books that I can't find online and read them. Additionally, I take photos of important pages so I can review the details at home. The library is also a quiet place, which helps me concentrate better.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct tenses and smoother expressions. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library. However, I started going there as a student because it was necessary. At that time, the Internet was not widely available, so I couldn't find useful information online and had to rely on the library.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks confidence. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and express your opinion more clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your thoughts.

예시: I am not sure about all Chinese kids, but I believe many of them often go to the library. From my perspective, their families encourage reading more than spending time on gadgets, which motivates them to visit libraries regularly.

× I used to often go to the library when I was a student, about an 20, 14 years.

✓ I used to often go to the library when I was a student, about 14 or 20 years ago.

The phrase 'an 20, 14 years' is incorrect because 'an' is used before words starting with a vowel sound and '20' is plural. Also, the order and clarity of the time expression is confusing. The correct form is 'about 14 or 20 years ago' to indicate approximate time in the past.

× No 'cause I need you to take clothes you magazines for my survey and I made the best research.

✓ No, because I needed to take clothes and magazines for my survey and I did the best research.

The original sentence misuses pronouns 'you' instead of 'my' or omits them incorrectly. Also, the verb tense should be past ('needed', 'did') to match the past context. The sentence is corrected to use proper pronouns and past tense verbs.

× In the library I usually find the exclusive books which I can't find online and read them, make some photos to have opportunity to check some details at home as well.

✓ In the library, I usually find exclusive books which I can't find online, read them, and take some photos to have the opportunity to check some details at home as well.

The phrase 'make some photos' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'take' when referring to photos. Also, adding commas and conjunctions improves sentence clarity and flow.

× And there is best place, quiet place where I.

✓ And there is the best, quiet place where I can study.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'can study' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the best place' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I know when I was a kid I didn't go to the library.

✓ I know that when I was a kid, I didn't go to the library.

Adding 'that' after 'I know' improves sentence structure and clarity. Also, adding a comma after 'kid' separates clauses properly.

× I started going to the library when I was a student 'cause it was very necessary for me and then was not Internet opportunities.

✓ I started going to the library when I was a student because it was very necessary for me and there were no Internet opportunities then.

The phrase 'then was not Internet opportunities' is incorrect. It should be 'there were no Internet opportunities then' to correctly use the existential 'there' and plural verb 'were' with 'opportunities'.

× I could not find useful information on Internet.

✓ I could not find useful information on the Internet.

Adding the definite article 'the' before 'Internet' is necessary because 'Internet' is a unique entity and requires the definite article in English.

× So I used to go there and find the information.

✓ So I used to go there and find information.

The phrase 'the information' is too specific here; 'information' is an uncountable noun and usually used without 'the' unless referring to specific information already mentioned.

× I have no idea about the Chinese kids, about the Chinese families, but I guess they often go.

✓ I have no idea about Chinese kids or Chinese families, but I guess they often go.

Removing 'the' before 'Chinese kids' and 'Chinese families' is more natural when speaking generally about groups. Also, replacing 'about' with 'or' improves sentence flow.

× From my point of view, they often go, and I think their family encourage them to read more than to be in gadgets every time.

✓ From my point of view, they often go, and I think their families encourage them to read more than to be on gadgets all the time.

'Family' should be plural 'families' to agree with 'they' referring to multiple children. Also, 'encourage' needs to agree with plural subject 'families'. The phrase 'to be in gadgets' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on gadgets'. 'Every time' is better expressed as 'all the time' in this context.