Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and redundant phrases. Also, use correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. For example, say 'I don't usually go to the library because there isn't one conveniently located near my house. Instead, I listen to podcasts on my phone and read ebooks.'

예시: I don't often go to the library because there isn't one near my house. Instead, I prefer listening to podcasts on my phone and reading ebooks at home.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by correcting some grammar. For example, use 'while' to contrast your kids' activities with yours, and say 'I prefer to look for books that help me improve myself.'

예시: When I go to the library, I usually take my kids to the children's section, while I look for books that help me improve myself in daily life.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and try to make your answer more fluent and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words. For example, 'I don't remember going to the library as a child. However, my mum used to buy books, and we would read them together at home, which was a special time for us.'

예시: I don't recall going to the library when I was a child. However, my mum often bought books, and we spent time reading them together at home.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I believe going to the library is part of Chinese culture. Children often go there to study, have fun with friends, and spend time together.'

예시: Yes, I believe visiting the library is part of Chinese culture. Children often go there to study, enjoy time with friends, and be around others.

× No, really. Umm, I don't usually go to the library because it doesn't have any library around my house, umm, that's conveniently located for me to go every day.

✓ No, really. Umm, I don't usually go to the library because there isn't any library around my house that's conveniently located for me to go to every day.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it doesn't have any library around my house' which is unclear and ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'there isn't any library around my house' to indicate the absence of a library nearby. Also, 'to go every day' needs the preposition 'to' after 'go' to be grammatically correct.

× I instead I listen podcast in my phone and I try to read some ebooks.

✓ Instead, I listen to podcasts on my phone and try to read some ebooks.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object, so 'listen podcast' should be 'listen to podcasts'. Also, 'podcast' should be plural 'podcasts' to match general usage. 'In my phone' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on my phone'. The sentence is also improved by removing the repeated 'I' and adding a comma after 'Instead'.

× When I go to the library, I usually go with my kids and they are in the kids sections.

✓ When I go to the library, I usually go with my kids and they are in the kids' section.

The phrase 'kids sections' should be possessive singular 'kids' section' to indicate the section belonging to or designated for kids. Also, 'sections' plural is less common here; usually, libraries have a single kids' section.

× We have a look in the books around there, but for myself, I prefer to look for books that will make me improve myself in my daily life.

✓ We have a look at the books around there, but for myself, I prefer to look for books that will help me improve myself in my daily life.

The correct preposition with 'have a look' is 'at', not 'in'. Also, 'make me improve myself' is awkward; 'help me improve myself' is more natural and correct.

× but for myself, I prefer to look for books that will make me improve myself in my daily life.

✓ but for myself, I prefer to look for books that will help me improve in my daily life.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is used incorrectly here. It is unnecessary after 'help me improve' and sounds awkward. Removing 'myself' after 'improve' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× I'm not quite sure. I don't remember any time that I went to the library when I was a kid.

✓ I'm not quite sure. I don't remember any time when I went to the library as a kid.

The phrase 'any time that I went' is acceptable but 'any time when I went' is more natural. Also, 'when I was a kid' can be simplified to 'as a kid' for smoother expression.

× Umm, but I believe my mom used to buy some books and I used to read the books at home with her.

✓ Umm, but I believe my mum used to buy some books and I used to read them at home with her.

'Mom' is American English; in Australian English, 'mum' is preferred. Also, 'the books' is repetitive; 'them' is better to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I believe the Chinese kids go to the library in and that's into their culture.

✓ Yes, I believe Chinese kids go to the library and that's part of their culture.

The phrase 'go to the library in' is incorrect; 'in' should be removed. 'That's into their culture' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'that's part of their culture' to express that going to the library is a cultural practice.

× They go to start and have fun with the friends and just be around I guess.

✓ They go to study and have fun with their friends and just be around, I guess.

The phrase 'go to start' is incorrect; it should be 'go to study'. Also, 'the friends' should be 'their friends' to indicate possession. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.