List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và tính mạch lạc bằng cách rút gọn, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và một liên kết để kết nối ý thứ hai. Tránh lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'catches my eyes' nên là 'catches my eye') và giới hạn số câu không quá năm. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ tình huống.

예시: I don't usually make a shopping list because I know what I need. However, if I see something that catches my eye, I pause to decide if it's necessary and worth the price, for example, when I spot a new kitchen gadget that I might only use occasionally.

제안: Tốt về cấu trúc chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ; để tốt hơn, sửa một vài lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng/cụm từ (ví dụ: 'crossing tasks of the list' → 'crossing tasks off the list') và sử dụng liên từ để làm mạch văn mượt hơn. Có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể và đo lường để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: Yes. I make a daily to-do list for my study tasks, and it helps me stay organized. For instance, by listing and crossing tasks off the list each day, I complete about five study goals and feel more motivated to continue.

제안: Cần cải thiện sự chính xác ngôn ngữ, mạch lạc và cụt nghĩa ở một vài chỗ. Thay 'making this' bằng 'making lists', sửa 'do with things' → 'deal with things' và 'remember their tags' → 'remember things'. Thêm liên từ để câu rõ ràng hơn và một ví dụ cụ thể sẽ giúp tăng điểm.

예시: Some people avoid lists because they find making lists time-consuming and prefer to deal with things as they come. For example, a busy freelancer might rely on memory and spontaneous decisions rather than planning everything in advance.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa một số lỗi nhỏ ('cross completed tests of the list' → 'cross completed items off the list') và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một câu liên kết ngắn giải thích lợi ích cụ thể của giấy so với điện thoại để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: I prefer paper lists because writing by hand helps me remember tasks better, and crossing completed items off the list feels satisfying. Although phone lists are convenient, I often get distracted by social media when I use my phone.

× If I come across something that catches my eyes, I'll think carefully about whether I really need it and whether it's worth the money before deciding to buy it.

✓ If I come across something that catches my eye, I'll think carefully about whether I really need it and whether it's worth the money before deciding to buy it.

'Catches my eyes' is incorrect collocation; the correct phrase is 'catches my eye' (singular). Use 'eye' because the idiom refers to attention, not multiple eyes.

× Crossing tasks of the list also gives me a sense of achievement so I feel more motivated to keep going.

✓ Crossing tasks off the list also gives me a sense of achievement, so I feel more motivated to keep going.

Use the phrasal verb 'cross off' to mean removing items from a list; 'of' is incorrect. Also add a comma before 'so' when joining two independent clauses for clarity.

× Yes I do, I make a daily To Do List of everything I need to study and it really helps me stay organized.

✓ Yes I do. I make a daily to-do list of everything I need to study and it really helps me stay organized.

Use lowercase for 'to-do list' in normal sentence and use a period or semicolon to separate independent clauses; using a comma splice is incorrect punctuation. This falls under article/determininer and sentence structure—here corrected punctuation and capitalization.

× I think some people find making this too time consuming or unnecessary.

✓ I think some people find making this too time-consuming or unnecessary.

Compound adjective 'time-consuming' requires a hyphen when used before a noun or as complement. 'This' is vague but acceptable; hyphenation fixes grammatical form.

× They prefer to be more flexible and just do with things as they come instead of planning everything in advance.

✓ They prefer to be more flexible and just deal with things as they come instead of planning everything in advance.

'Do with things' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb is 'deal with'. This is a pronoun/verb collocation error.

× Also, some people can remember their tags easily so they don't see much value in writing everything down.

✓ Also, some people can remember things easily so they don't see much value in writing everything down.

'Remember their tags' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'remember things'. Replace 'their tags' with 'things' for clarity and correctness.

× For some reason I remember things better when I write them by hand.

✓ For some reason, I remember things better when I write them by hand.

Add a comma after introductory phrase 'For some reason' for correct punctuation and natural rhythm.

× I also find it more satisfying to physically cross completed tests of the list.

✓ I also find it more satisfying to physically cross completed items off the list.

'Completed tests of the list' is incorrect; use 'completed items' and the phrasal verb 'cross off' to indicate removing items from a list.