List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but to improve, try to avoid minor grammatical errors and use linking words more effectively. For example, instead of 'helps me remind what to buy', say 'helps me remember what to buy'. Also, use linking words like 'which' to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because it helps me remember what to buy, which saves me a lot of time by preventing unnecessary wandering in the store.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has a punctuation error and could be more coherent. Avoid sentence fragments like 'which in turn. Improves my concentration.' Instead, connect the ideas properly and use linking words to show cause and effect.

예시: I don't usually make a list for household chores, but I always make one when I study because it helps me choose topics and stay organized, which in turn improves my concentration.

제안: Your answer has some redundancy and grammatical issues. Avoid using both 'furthermore' and 'so' together as they serve similar purposes. Also, maintain consistent verb tense and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively.

예시: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they find it tedious and prefer to avoid reminders of their responsibilities.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer linking. Instead of 'or obtainable', use 'easily accessible'. Also, try to combine sentences for better flow.

예시: It depends on the situation; sometimes I write lists on paper if I have it handy, but I usually use my phone because it's always with me and easily accessible, which is very convenient.

× I don't usually make a list for household chores, but I always make one when I study because it helps me choose topics and stay organized, which in turn. Improves my concentration.

✓ I don't usually make a list for household chores, but I always make one when I study because it helps me choose topics and stay organized, which in turn improves my concentration.

The sentence was incorrectly split into two parts with a period after 'in turn', causing a sentence fragment. The phrase 'which in turn improves my concentration' should be a continuous clause without a period to maintain sentence structure and clarity.

× Furthermore, since lists remind them of their responsibilities, so they often preferred to avoid making them.

✓ Furthermore, since lists remind them of their responsibilities, they often prefer to avoid making them.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'since' and 'so' together, which is redundant. Also, 'preferred' should be 'prefer' to maintain present tense consistency. Removing 'so' and correcting the verb tense improves grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Sometimes I write lists on paper if I have it handy, but I use my phone because it's always with me or obtainable and very convenient.

✓ Sometimes I write lists on paper if I have it handy, but I use my phone because it's always with me, easily obtainable, and very convenient.

The phrase 'or obtainable' is incorrect here; 'easily obtainable' is the correct expression. Also, adding commas improves readability. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the prepositional phrase.