Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and unclear, with some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Since I was a child, I often sang loudly in the bathroom, which my parents noticed and encouraged by enrolling me in a music school.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly whether you have learned singing or not, then add a reason or effect using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep your sentences concise and coherent.

예시: No, I haven't formally learned how to sing, but I enjoy singing in my free time because it helps me relax and improve my voice gradually.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

예시: If I had the chance, I would definitely sing for my mother because she loves music. We often spend time together singing when we are both free, which strengthens our bond.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing ideas. Try to express your opinion clearly with logical reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and provide specific examples or explanations to support your point.

예시: I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and improves their mood. For example, when I sing my favourite songs, I feel more cheerful and less stressed.

× Well I love tools as I love to sing a song and even when I was in my childhood I usually prefer to sing a song in very loud voice is specially in the washroom and my my parents were used to they were noticing me that I am singing very properly and they put me in the school as well where I can.

✓ Well I love tools as I love to sing a song and even when I was a child I usually preferred to sing a song in a very loud voice, especially in the washroom, and my parents used to notice that I was singing very well and they put me in a school where I could.

The pronouns 'my my parents were used to they were noticing me' are incorrectly used and redundant. The correct form is 'my parents used to notice that I was singing very well.' Also, 'when I was in my childhood' should be 'when I was a child' for natural English usage.

× Well I love tools as I love to sing a song and even when I was in my childhood I usually prefer to sing a song in very loud voice is specially in the washroom and my my parents were used to they were noticing me that I am singing very properly and they put me in the school as well where I can.

✓ Well I love tools as I love to sing a song and even when I was a child I usually preferred to sing a song in a very loud voice, especially in the washroom, and my parents used to notice that I was singing very well and they put me in a school where I could.

The verb tenses are inconsistent. 'I usually prefer' should be 'I usually preferred' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child.' Also, 'they put me in the school as well where I can' should be 'they put me in a school where I could' to maintain past tense and correct modal verb usage.

× Oh well, I haven't learned how to sing as I just in my spare time I usually preferred to sing a song in my voice and it makes me much more satisfied as it helps me to improve it.

✓ Oh well, I haven't learned how to sing, but in my spare time I usually prefer to sing a song in my voice and it makes me much more satisfied as it helps me to improve it.

The phrase 'I usually preferred' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action in the present, so it should be 'I usually prefer.' Also, 'I just in my spare time' is incomplete and corrected to 'but in my spare time.'

× It also refresh my mode as well whenever I sing a song of my interest and I you.

✓ It also refreshes my mood whenever I sing a song of my interest.

The pronoun 'I you' is incorrect and unclear; it should be removed. Also, 'refresh my mode' should be 'refreshes my mood' for correct word choice and subject-verb agreement.

× Oh well, if I get a chance to sing a song then I for sure I will sing a song for my mother.

✓ Oh well, if I get a chance to sing a song, then I will definitely sing a song for my mother.

The phrase 'I for sure I will' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'I will definitely' to express certainty clearly.

× And I love my mother a lot and he is also fond of singing and she always asked me to sing a song for her whenever she is free and I am free And we always, you know, spend time together by singing.

✓ And I love my mother a lot. She is also fond of singing and she always asks me to sing a song for her whenever she is free and I am free. We always spend time together by singing.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrectly used for 'my mother' and should be 'she.' Also, verb tenses should be consistent: 'asked' should be 'asks' to indicate habitual action. The sentence is also split for clarity.

× In my perspective, singing can increase happiness to people because it has to increase their circulation as when they remember when they're singing a song, they will they will keep remembering in their mind. What's the paragraph?

✓ From my perspective, singing can increase happiness in people because it improves their circulation. When they sing a song, they keep remembering it in their mind.

The phrase 'In my perspective' should be 'From my perspective.' Also, 'increase happiness to people' should be 'increase happiness in people.' The sentence about circulation is unclear and corrected to 'improves their circulation.' The last sentence is simplified for clarity and correctness.