Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise, up to 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why singing is important to you with specific feelings or reasons.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my feelings when I find it hard to speak. Music touches my heart and allows me to share emotions that words cannot. Singing makes me feel happy and relaxed, so I enjoy it a lot.

제안: Improve your answer by organizing your ideas clearly and using linking words to connect them. Use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Keep your answer natural and concise, focusing on your experience with singing.

예시: No, I have never attended a singing school, but I often practice at home. I use a microphone and sing along with songs on TV by reading the subtitles. Although my voice is not perfect, I enjoy singing very much.

제안: Make your answer clearer by using proper sentence structure and linking words. Be specific about your feelings and reasons. Avoid repetition and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I want to sing for my dad because whenever I listen to music, I think of him. We have not seen each other for a long time, so singing songs about missing someone helps me express my feelings. I hope to sing for him when we meet soon.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically. Use simple and correct sentences to explain how singing affects emotions. Avoid confusing phrases and keep your answer focused and natural.

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because music affects our emotions. Sometimes, songs can make us feel happy or sad, like a swing between feelings. Singing helps people express their emotions and feel better.

× I love musics and all type of music is actually for me.

✓ I love music and all types of music are actually for me.

The word 'musics' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Also, 'all type of music' should be 'all types of music' to agree in number. The verb 'is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'types'.

× Singing, touch my feelings, say what I can't say because I'm a person that.

✓ Singing touches my feelings and says what I can't say because I'm a person who doesn't know how to speak.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and incomplete structure. 'Touch' should be 'touches' to agree with singular subject 'Singing'. Also, 'say' should be 'says' to agree with 'Singing'. The phrase 'I'm a person that' is incomplete; it should be 'I'm a person who doesn't know how to speak' for clarity and correctness.

× Not knowing how to speak so singing just give me what I feed without saying it.

✓ I don't know how to speak, so singing just gives me what I feel without saying it.

The sentence lacks a subject and has incorrect verb forms. 'Not knowing' should be 'I don't know' to form a complete sentence. 'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Feed' is incorrect; the intended word is 'feel'.

× No I haven't been to a singing school before but I always saying at home with my microphones and open the TV and see the subtitles and start to sing the song that I would love to hear an and I know that my voice is not the best in singing but I love to sing.

✓ No, I haven't been to a singing school before, but I always sing at home with my microphone, open the TV, see the subtitles, and start to sing the songs that I love to hear. I know that my voice is not the best at singing, but I love to sing.

The phrase 'I always saying' is incorrect; it should be 'I always sing' (present tense). 'Microphones' should be singular 'microphone' if referring to one. 'An and' is a typo and should be removed. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity. 'In singing' should be 'at singing'.

× I always saying at home with my microphones and open the TV and see the subtitles and start to sing the song that I would love to hear an and I know that my voice is not the best in singing but I love to sing.

✓ I always sing at home with my microphone, open the TV, see the subtitles, and start to sing the songs that I love to hear. I know that my voice is not the best at singing, but I love to sing.

'Microphones' should be singular 'microphone' if referring to one. 'The song' should be 'the songs' to match the plural context. 'In singing' should be 'at singing' for correct preposition use.

× I know that my voice is not the best in singing but I love to sing.

✓ I know that my voice is not the best at singing, but I love to sing.

The correct preposition to use with 'best' in this context is 'at' rather than 'in'.

× Whenever I listen to music or a song I always remember my dad so I would love to sing to him when I see him soon.

✓ Whenever I listen to music or a song, I always remember my dad, so I would love to sing to him when I see him soon.

Missing commas for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct in singular/plural usage.

× Because it's very it's been a long time not seeing him.

✓ Because it has been a long time since I last saw him.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses proper tense and structure to express the idea clearly.

× So I love to hear the music San the sing the songs that have a feeling of missing someone.

✓ So I love to hear the music and sing the songs that have a feeling of missing someone.

'San' is a typo and should be 'and'. The phrase 'hear the music San the sing the songs' is incorrect; it should be 'hear the music and sing the songs'.

× Now I will speak in a Muslim way in our religion and it is and I can feel it without treating a religion.

✓ Now I will speak from a Muslim perspective in our religion, and I can feel it without following a religion.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Speak in a Muslim way' is better expressed as 'speak from a Muslim perspective'. 'Without treating a religion' is incorrect; 'without following a religion' is clearer.

× When you hear us song or music, you're feeling started to mix up your feeling store it.

✓ When you hear a song or music, your feelings start to mix up and store it.

'Us song' is incorrect; it should be 'a song'. 'You're feeling started' is ungrammatical; it should be 'your feelings start'. The phrase 'mix up your feeling store it' is unclear; corrected to 'mix up and store it' for clarity.

× You start to have a feelings that not NU so you start to feel sad and extremely sad from hapiness prosad.

✓ You start to have feelings that are not new, so you start to feel sad and extremely sad from happiness to sadness.

'A feelings' is incorrect; 'feelings' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Not NU' is unclear; assumed to mean 'not new'. 'Hapiness prosad' is a typo; corrected to 'happiness to sadness' to express emotional change.

× So it's like swing so I don't like.

✓ So it's like swinging, so I don't like it.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Swing' should be 'swinging' (gerund) to describe the feeling. 'I don't like' needs an object 'it' to complete the sentence.