Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 문장이 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 명확한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 구체적인 이유와 경험을 간결하게 연결어를 사용해 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I love singing because I have been singing since I was a child. Whenever I felt happy, I would sing songs. Also, I joined a choir at school, which gave me many opportunities to improve my singing skills.

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 명확하지 않으며, 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 경험과 배운 점을 간결하게 연결어와 함께 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in the third grade. I joined a children's choir that was divided into three groups, which helped me practice different singing techniques.

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 불완전하며, 명확한 이유와 구체적인 내용을 포함하지 못했습니다. 주제 문장으로 시작해, 연결어를 사용하여 구체적인 상황과 이유를 명확히 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: I would like to sing for my future husband at our wedding. Also, I plan to sing at my sister's and brother's weddings because they are both adults now and might get married soon.

제안: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 연결어와 함께 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because when I sing for my family and friends, they smile and laugh. Singing creates a joyful atmosphere that lifts everyone's mood.

× This I love singing 'cause since I was really young, I started to sing a lot like whenever my mom was happy or I was happy, I started to sing every day an especially I was in choir so that I was like I had a lot of opportunity to learn how this thing.

✓ I love singing because since I was really young, I started to sing a lot, like whenever my mom was happy or I was happy. I started to sing every day, and especially when I was in the choir, I had a lot of opportunities to learn how to do this.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect use of 'an' instead of 'and'. Also, 'this thing' is vague; 'how to do this' is clearer. The sentence was fragmented and needed to be split for clarity. The verb forms needed adjustment to fit the context and improve fluency.

× Guys, as I mentioned at the first questions, I was in the children choir when I was only three grades, third grades an elementary school.

✓ As I mentioned in the first question, I was in the children's choir when I was in third grade in elementary school.

The phrase 'three grades, third grades' is incorrect; it should be 'third grade'. 'Children choir' should be 'children's choir' to show possession. 'At the first questions' should be 'in the first question'. These corrections fix tense and noun form errors.

× So I was I had a lot of opportunity to learn how to sing an.

✓ So I had a lot of opportunities to learn how to sing.

The sentence contains redundant words 'was I had' and incorrect use of 'an' instead of 'and'. Also, 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match the context. The sentence was simplified for clarity and correctness.

× And there was a little tin the separated 3 tins so I could learn more.

✓ And there was a small section separated into 3 parts, so I could learn more.

The phrase 'a little tin the separated 3 tins' is unclear and incorrect. Likely, the speaker meant 'a small section divided into 3 parts'. 'Tin' is incorrect here; 'section' or 'part' is appropriate. Prepositions and articles were corrected for clarity.

× Most likely I want to sing for my future husband when I get married. Anne Anne I always thinking to sing for my for my sister and my brother's wedding too because my sister and brother is there over 20 years old so they're like they will.

✓ Most likely, I want to sing for my future husband when I get married. And I am always thinking of singing at my sister's and brother's weddings too because my sister and brother are over 20 years old, so they probably will have weddings soon.

'Anne Anne' is a mishearing or typo for 'and'. 'I always thinking' should be 'I am always thinking' or 'I always think'. 'For my for my sister and my brother's wedding' is awkward; corrected to 'at my sister's and brother's weddings'. 'My sister and brother is' should be 'are' for subject-verb agreement. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I think singing as most part is the most powerful way that I can bring happiness to my people around me because whenever is thing my mom and my dad if they always smiled Anne and I went to the carryout giving my friends and there always laughing because I.

✓ Yes, I think singing is the most powerful way that I can bring happiness to the people around me because whenever I sing, my mom and dad always smile, and when I go to gatherings with my friends, they are always laughing because of me.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains many errors: 'as most part' should be 'is the most'; 'whenever is thing' is unclear, likely 'whenever I sing'; 'if they always smiled Anne' should be 'they always smile, and'; 'went to the carryout giving my friends' is unclear, corrected to 'go to gatherings with my friends'; 'there always laughing because I' corrected to 'they are always laughing because of me'. Pronouns and sentence structure were corrected for clarity and grammar.