Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. For example, instead of repeating 'express my feeling' and 'relaxes my mind', you could say: 'Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings to my loved ones and also relaxes my mind, reducing daily stress.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings to my loved ones and also relaxes my mind, reducing daily stress.

제안: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like 'but true' and 'you learn the lyrics'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say: 'I haven't taken any professional singing classes, but I improve my voice by imitating famous singers and learning their lyrics, which helps me convey my emotions to special people.'

예시: I haven't taken any professional singing classes, but I improve my voice by imitating famous singers and learning their lyrics, which helps me convey my emotions to special people.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and a bit confusing. Try to be concise and clear by avoiding repeated phrases. Use linking words to organize your ideas. For example: 'I love singing for my husband because it allows me to express my love in a unique way, especially when words are not enough.'

예시: I love singing for my husband because it allows me to express my love in a unique way, especially when words are not enough.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words. For example: 'Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When we sing a special song for someone or perform in a group, it makes them feel appreciated and joyful.'

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When we sing a special song for someone or perform in a group, it makes them feel appreciated and joyful.

× Yes, I like singing because it gives me a way to express my feeling to my loved ones and also it relaxes my mind and reduces the stress of the whole day.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it gives me a way to express my feelings to my loved ones and also it relaxes my mind and reduces the stress of the whole day.

The word 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' because it refers to multiple emotions or sentiments. Using the singular form here is incorrect as it does not match the intended meaning.

× I haven't taken any professional classes for syncing, but true.

✓ I haven't taken any professional classes for singing, but true.

The word 'syncing' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'singing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it is necessary for clarity.

× I imitate the songs of famous singers so that I can improve my voice and you learn the lyrics.

✓ I imitate the songs of famous singers so that I can improve my voice and learn the lyrics.

The phrase 'and you learn the lyrics' is incorrect and disrupts sentence flow. It should be 'and learn the lyrics' to maintain parallel structure and correct sentence formation.

× So that I can convey my emotions and my feelings with my special persons.

✓ So that I can convey my emotions and my feelings to my special persons.

The preposition 'with' is incorrectly used here; the correct preposition is 'to' when expressing conveying feelings to someone.

× I love to sing a song for my husband when I want to express my love for him in a different way so that I can express my feelings with him when I am short of the words I want to express to convey my feelings and loves for him by singing a song.

✓ I love to sing a song to my husband when I want to express my love for him in a different way so that I can express my feelings to him when I am short of words; I want to convey my feelings and love for him by singing a song.

The preposition 'for' should be 'to' when indicating the person receiving the action of singing. Also, 'with him' should be 'to him' when expressing feelings. The sentence was also run-on and needed punctuation and restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I was definitely thinking bring happiness on the faces of the people when we or sing a special song for them or whenever we single group song for the people who admirers, it makes them feel special and feel them. Explicit.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing brings happiness to the faces of people when we sing a special song for them or whenever we sing a group song for the people who admire us; it makes them feel special and appreciated.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'was definitely thinking' should be present tense 'definitely think' to match the question tense; 'bring' should be 'brings' for subject-verb agreement; 'on the faces' should be 'to the faces'; 'or sing' is incorrect and should be 'we sing'; 'single group song' is incorrect and should be 'sing a group song'; 'people who admirers' should be 'people who admire us'; 'feel them. Explicit.' is unclear and corrected to 'feel special and appreciated'. The sentence was also fragmented and needed restructuring.