Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas naturally.

예시: Yes, I like singing very much because it helps me relax and enjoy my free time. When I was a child, my mother often sang to me, which made me love music even more.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to use correct tenses and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: No, I haven't learned how to sing because of financial difficulties in my family. However, I would love to learn singing in the future whenever I get the chance, as it would bring me pleasure and satisfaction.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words. Also, avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases to make your answer natural and effective.

예시: I want to sing for my loved ones, especially my parents, friends, and cousins. Whenever I sing, even if it's just a lullaby or in the bathroom, they enjoy listening, and that makes me very happy.

제안: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use appropriate linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences to make your answer more effective.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I feel sad or demotivated, listening to music cheers me up instantly. Therefore, singing and music can help improve people's mood.

× Whenever I got free time I listen to music I see.

✓ Whenever I get free time, I listen to music.

The sentence mixes past tense 'got' with present tense 'listen'. Since the context is habitual action, present tense 'get' should be used to maintain consistency.

× In my childhood during my laser time, my mom's used to seeing a lot and the same to message my mom bought me kiss it.

✓ In my childhood, during my leisure time, my mom used to sing a lot and sometimes my mom bought me cassettes.

The original sentence has multiple errors including incorrect word choice ('laser' instead of 'leisure'), incorrect verb form ('used to seeing' should be 'used to sing'), and unclear phrases ('the same to message' is unclear). Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I didn't learn how to sing because there was a financial problem in our household.

✓ No, I didn't learn how to sing because there was a financial problem in our household.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and fits the context, so no correction is needed.

× I would love to learn singing in future or whenever I got a chance to chance because it's a something that may give me pleasure and satisfaction.

✓ I would love to learn singing in the future or whenever I get a chance because it's something that may give me pleasure and satisfaction.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' (article error). Also, 'got' should be present tense 'get' to indicate a future possibility. 'Chance to chance' is redundant and corrected to 'get a chance'. 'A something' is incorrect; 'something' does not need an article.

× I want to sing for my loved ones, especially my parents, my friends and my cousins they love.

✓ I want to sing for my loved ones, especially my parents, my friends, and my cousins who love me.

The phrase 'my cousins they love' is incorrect. It should be 'my cousins who love me' to correctly use the relative pronoun and clarify meaning.

× Police in my singing whenever I lullaby or singing in my head or singing in my bathroom, still eagerly wants to hear that and that makes me very happy.

✓ People enjoy my singing whenever I sing lullabies, or sing in my head or in my bathroom; they still eagerly want to hear that, and that makes me very happy.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect phrases ('Police in my singing'), inconsistent verb forms, and run-on structure. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Obviously singing mixed drinks happiness to people, especially when I am just raised or I have so much sadness or I become demotivated.

✓ Obviously, singing brings happiness to people, especially when I am feeling down, have a lot of sadness, or become demotivated.

'Mixed drinks happiness' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'brings happiness'. 'Just raised' is incorrect; 'feeling down' or similar is appropriate. Pronoun and verb usage corrected for clarity.

× I just listened to music and they instantly cheered me up.

✓ I just listen to music and it instantly cheers me up.

The sentence mixes past tense 'listened' with present tense context. Also, 'they' is incorrect pronoun for 'music'; 'it' should be used as 'music' is singular.

× So obviously it saves me a lot. People should listen music when.

✓ So obviously, it helps me a lot. People should listen to music when they feel down.

'Saves me a lot' is incorrect; 'helps me a lot' is more appropriate. 'Listen music' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'listen to music'. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.